L.

Sims, English IV & DE

Essay Comment Sheet

Areas of concern are circled or highlighted; also see comments!

1. Introduction (x/10)________ *Hook *Clear introductory & concluding sentence(s) *Plan & purpose are conveyed *Other/comments:__________________________________________________________ 2. Body (x/30)________ *Main points are present, valid, and defendable *Smooth transitions 3. Conclusion (x/10)________ *Summative statement(s) 4. Grammar (x/30)________ -Research: -Punctuation & Syntax: -Careless/Obvious: *Quotations *Commas *Spelling *:;- errors *Citations *Phrasing/word use *Capitalization *Works cited *Verb or agreement errors *Overt sentence errors (fragments, etc.) *Food for thought line(s) *Strong concluding statement *Other/comments:__________________________________________________________ *Provides sufficient evidence to defend *Unity & development (moves argument forward, logical)

*Other/comments:__________________________________________________________

-Other/comments:__________________________________________________________ 5. Organization (x/10)________ *Content fits well together *Consistent tone/perspective *Appropriate holistic perspective *Other/comments:__________________________________________________________ 6. Miscellaneous (x/10)________ *Consistent use of academic vocabulary *Is it thoughtful? (i.e. was the argument worthwhile?) *All research is cited/no accidental plagiarism (in-text & works cited) *Other/comments:__________________________________________________________ Comments:___________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________ __________________________________________________________Overall Score:________ *The score breakdowns above assume that some effort was made on each component. Point penalties for leaving components out entirely are below: No introduction, conclusion, or organization: -20 (each) No body paragraphs: -80 No attempt at grammatical correctness: -50 Any outright/purposeful plagiarism: -automatic zero

L. Sims, English IV & DE

SAMPLE Essay Comment Sheet

Areas of concern are circled or highlighted; also see comments!

1. Introduction (x/10)_8/10____ *Hook *Clear introductory & concluding sentence(s) *Plan & purpose are conveyed *Other/comments:___You left out a hook to draw readers attention!______________ 2. Body (x/30)__20/30______ *Main points are present, valid, and defendable *Smooth transitions 3. Conclusion (x/10)_10/10_______ *Summative statement(s) 4. Grammar (x/30)__21/30______ -Research: -Punctuation & Syntax: -Careless/Obvious: *Quotations *Commas *Spelling *:;- errors *Citations *Phrasing/word use *Capitalization *Works cited *Verb or agreement errors *Overt sentence errors (fragments, etc.) *Food for thought line(s) *Strong concluding statement *Other/comments:__Well done!____________ ________________________ *Provides sufficient evidence to defend *Unity & development (moves argument forward, logical)

*Other/comments:__You make good points but dont back them up with enough evidence________

-Other/comments:__________________________________________________________ 5. Organization (x/10)_9/10_______ *Content fits well together *Consistent tone/perspective *Appropriate holistic perspective *Other/comments:__Your tone begins formally but slips into informal language_______________ 6. Miscellaneous (x/10)__7/10______ *Consistent use of academic vocabulary *Is it thoughtful? (i.e. was the argument worthwhile?) *All research is cited/no accidental plagiarism (in-text & works cited) *Other/comments:_That shift to informal language includes too many colloquialisms & simple words! Comments:___The good news: your content (intro, body) etc. is excellent except for the lack of research to provide sufficient evidence. The bad news: little elements like careless grammar significantly degrade your authority as a writer; readers wont trust your argument if you dont write like a professional adult. Next time: take more time to research and write carefully, and then proofread!__ Overall Score:__75/100 (C)_ *The score breakdowns above assume that some effort was made on each component. Point penalties for leaving components out entirely are below: No introduction, conclusion, or organization: -20 (each) No body paragraphs: -80 No attempt at grammatical correctness: -50 Any outright/purposeful plagiarism: -automatic zero