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1. Good background music. 2. Watch how some transitions cut off words. 3. Good use of quotes. Perhaps include more of the quotes in your voiceover, not your slides. 4. Add more video footage to balance the pictures. 5. Maybe include more voiceovers. 6. Add names/description of poses. 7. Interviews are good! Really direct questions, love that it ties to other things, the soccer and motocross. 8. Add some voice over explaining the poses. 9. Represented the figured world actors and artifacts very well. Like explaining how beginners can use props to help with poses. 10. Watch how you loop the music, it abruptly cuts off when the clip ends, see if you can make it smoother.
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