Wray1 Dear Dr. Hartman, I really enjoyed this piece, although I was not so fond of it at first.

When I was writing my essay as it seemed, I had a hard time making my piece not seem so scary. ut, after your help, I enjoyed my letter much more. !hank you for the great idea that helped coa" me out of my research paper mindset and into a more personal one. I feel like I did a great jo# and really hit all of the key elements of a research position piece in the category of information. I tried to use good information from reputa#le sources #ut I didn$t want to o%erwhelm someone with the amount of information in my paper like I did pre%iously, so I$m not sure if I did this perfectly. I wasn$t e"actly sure how much I needed to include to #lend #ut I think I did a good jo#. I felt like my process work was %ery o#%ious and that$s why I ga%e myself a &ike, $Whoa'$ in that category. I clearly went from a research(y paper to a letter where I included my opinion and the opinion and information of others at the same time. I felt like I was %ery strong in this area #ecause I had so much change and plenty of process work. I was unsure of a topic as well at first, and so I feel like I showed a great deal of growth. I feel really confident in the area of rhetorical knowledge. I think that I deser%e a &ike, $Whoa'$ #ecause I feel like my audience and purpose are %ery clear to the reader. I also chose my position without forcing it on others. I tried to include good sources and #lend them with my own opinion and slight humor to make the information seem less harsh. I feel like my purpose is %ery o#%ious to the reader as well and that it is o#%ious that I really care a#out the su#ject I wrote on.

Wray) *y position piece draft includes a lot of information on the health risks associated with fried foods, #ut I don$t think it comes across as too scary like my original draft did. It is %ery easy to read and the idea of #reaking up with fried foods makes the information less frightening as well. I checked se%eral times for spelling, grammar, or citation errors and I feel like I did a %ery good jo# in this area and deser%e a &ike, $Whoa'$ for the category of knowledge of con%entions. +%erall, I feel really confident a#out this paper. I tried to take information made a%aila#le #y others and add my opinion and %oice as well. I am %ery interested in my topic and I feel like that is %ery noticea#le in my paper. In the #eginning of my paper I put off the %i#e that I$m going to miss the fried foods #ut #y the end, after learning of all of the health risks, I don$t miss them at all. I hope that this is clear as well and the shift in attitude is not confusing. +ne final note I would like to make is that the works cited page at the end is for my final draft. I did use other sources in my first draft which I cited in(te"t #ut then later remo%ed. ,lso, in my other letter draft, I did not cite anything #ecause I created the letter portion of my piece while my creati%e juices were flowing. I just used information I already knew a#out the health risks associated with fried foods as I wrote the letter and then I went #ack and changed my letter a great deal as I used my sources within it. I also had to edit some of my parenthetical citations for the li#rary data#ase articles. I hope this is not an issue #ecause I did gi%e credit e%erywhere that credit was due in my final draft.

Wray!hank you for your consideration of my opinion on my draft. *egan Wray

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.atings for your work &ike, Whoa' 0ou need to teach a class on this' 1reat jo#' 0ou really hit all the key elements' 1reat start' 0ou2%e got some good stuff going. &ooking forward to seeing you de%elop this more' Draft pro%ides somewhat clear and rele%ant information gi%en the topics, audience, and purpose= ,t least 1 source included and citation attempted #ut may not #e accurate or *&,= Writer may ha%e had trou#le making decisions on what to include and how 5ome e%idence of process work= ,ttempts at idea de%elopment, #ut ideas are lacking in some way= &ittle e%idence of re%ision is present @e". +nly 1 draft su#mittedA Hmmm30ou did turn something in4great' 5eems like you2re struggling to understand some key concepts and6or to fully participate Draft lacks clear and rele%ant information from sources. 5ources used are cited #ut may not #e accurate or *&,:= Writer either did not include these or used ineffecti%e information gi%en the topic, audience, and purpose

I78+.*,!I+7 ,s a working draft, piece shows9 :8ailure to attempt to cite sources when paraphrasing or summari;ing, or to use <uotations, etc. will result in honor code %iolation /.+>?55 ,s a working draft, piece shows9

Draft pro%ides e"ceptionally clear, rele%ant, accurate, and effecti%e information gi%en the topics, audience, and purpose= ,t least ) sources included and cited accurately using *&,

Draft provides clear and relevant information given the topics, audience, and purpose; At least 2 sources included and cited accurately using MLA

Process work provides exceptional evidence of progress from first drafts pieces, highlighted noted changes from original piece in process work and or reflective letter

/rocess work is e%ident and present= +#%ious progress from first drafts6pieces, may ha%e highlighted6noted changes somewhat in process work or reflecti%e letter

/articipation in process work, de%elopment of ideas, and6or e%idence of re%ision is incomplete or insufficient

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.H?!+.I>,& C7+W&?D1? ,s a working draft, piece shows9 Draft demonstrates exceptional understanding of audience, purpose, and taking a researched position; sources are effectively !alanced with writer"s personal opinion and voice Draft is easy to read, information provided is easy to understand, sources are cited correctly, no spelling errors, misused or incorrect words, etc# Draft demonstrates good understanding of audience, purpose, and taking a researched position= sources are somewhat #alanced with writer2s personal opinion and %oice, #ut sources may dominate or sources may not #e used effecti%ely Draft is easy to read, information pro%ided is generally easy to understand, sources are cited, few to no spelling errors, misused or incorrect words, etc. Draft demonstrates some understanding of audience, purpose, #ut researched position may not #e clear= sources may dominate or may not #e used effecti%ely !his aspect of the piece is incomplete6 insufficient. Work shows little to no e%idence of rhetorical knowledge

C7+W&?D1? +8 >+7D?7!I+75 ,s a working draft, piece shows9

Draft might #e difficult to read, information pro%ided might #e difficult to understand, sources are cited #ut not properly, a few to se%eral spelling errors, misused or incorrect words, etc.

1laring issues6errors in grammar, capitali;ation, punctuation, spelling, and other con%entions= /iece is difficult to read= &ittle to no attention has #een gi%en to con%entions of writing