PROCESS ESSAY REVIEW

TYPE : PROCESS ESSAY

TITLE : HOW TO MAKE A SIMPLE BIRTHDAY CAKE

ORGANIZATION OF ESSAY

This essay have introductory paragraph which have 3 sentences , body paragraph 1 which have 2
sentences , body paragraph 2 which have 4 sentences , body paragraph 3 have 11 sentences ,
body paragraph 4 have 6 sentences and for the concluding paragraph , it have 3 sentences.

This is a complete essay which has all the organization of the essay starting from introduction to
conclusion. For the process essay, the essay is in the chorological order which it follow step by
step.

PARAGRAPH

The author mentions the main idea or topic sentence at the introductory paragraph. The author
did not write the topic sentence in the first sentence, the author writes the topic sentence in the
second sentence. I can see the author states the topic sentence that generally introduces the
information that follow in the supporting sentences of the paragraph. Before the author moves to
another steps, the author using a connectors to link each other. There a 4 body paragraph and
each paragraph have more than one steps. Lastly, the concluding paragraph , the author mention
again the answer from the question in the introductary paragraph for the closure and giving the
result.
Introductory Paragraph (3 Sentences)
Present Situation : question Have you ever wanted to make a birthday cake for a
loved one?
The essay will (Essay outline) Well, here is how to make a simple birthday cake.
All you'll need is a little time, love, and a few items
from the grocery store.
Body Paragraph 1 (2 Sentences)
Introduction stage (first) You will need a boxed cake mix (the favorite of the
birthday person), shortening, eggs, oil, flour, and
birthday candles (the number will depend on the age of
the birthday person.)
Introduction stage (second) When you get home, you will need to gather a few
items: a large mixing bowl, a large cake pan, an
electric mixer or a large mixing spoon, a spatula, and
measuring cups and spoons.
Body Paragraph 2 (4 Sentences)
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Step 1 First, you will need to wash your hands and work area.
Step 2 Read through the directions on the cake box to be sure
you have everything you need.
Step 3 Then, gather all of your equipment and food items in
your work area, organize it according to the order you
will use them in making your cake.
Step 4 Be sure to preheat your oven to the appropriate
temperature before you begin.
Body Paragraph 3 (11 Sentences)
Step 5 Next, put the dry cake mix into your large mixing bowl
Step 6 Then, put the prescribed amount of water, oil, and eggs
into the mix.
Step 7 Then, with the electric mixer or mixing spoon mix the
batter until it is smooth and free of clumps.
Step 8 Next, grease the large cake pan with the shortening.
If you wish, you can wrap your fingers with wax paper
to keep them from getting greasy.
Step 9 Then, flour the pan lightly
If you do this over the garbage can it will be easier to
clean your work area later.
Step 10 Next, pour the cake batter into the cake pan, using the
rubber spatula to scrape all of the batter off of the sides
of the bowl.
Be sure the batter is level in the pan so it will rise
evenly
Step 11 Next, place the cake on the top rack of the oven and
bake for the amount of time specified on the box, the
time is usually around thirty minutes.
While the cake is baking clean up you work area.
Body Paragraph 4 (11 Sentences)
Step 12 After the cake is done remove it from the oven
If you push a toothpick to the bottom and it comes out
clean it is done.
Step 13 Turn off the oven and let the cake cool
Step 14 After the cake has had ample time to cool, you are
ready to spread the icing on the cake.
If you use a spatula, rather than a knife, the icing will
spread easier and will be less likely to ruin the cake.
Step 15 When the icing is on the cake, place the appropriate
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number of birthday candles on it, you are ready to

present your simple birthday cake.
Concluding Paragraph (3 Sentences)
Summary of the essay There you have it, a birthday cake that someone will be
glad to devour.
This cake is easy to make, but still shows someone you
care.
Be sure to prepare it with love, and your loved one will
appreciate it.

THESIS STATEMENT

Basically the thesis statement is appear early in the essay and it conveys two kinds of
information which is topic and viewpoint.

Topic : Have you ever wanted

Viewpoint : to make a birthday cake for a loved one?

Thesis Statement : Have you ever wanted to make a birthday cake for a loved one?

The author expressed his thesis statement as a question. The author ask the reader that Have you
ever wanted to make a birthday cake for a loved one? , it mean that the author will answer the
question in the whole essay.

TOPIC SENTENCES

The topic sentence found at the second sentence of introductory paragraph. The subject is
“Baking a cake”.

Topic sentences : how to make a simple birthday cake

Topic : how to make

Statement : .. a simple birthday cake

When I see how to make a simple birthday cake . I can expect process or steps from the author
about that showing steps by steps to make a cake. This topic sentence cover all the paragraph in the
essay
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SUPPORTING DETAILS

All the steps that the author writes from the first step to the end step is the supporting details that
support the topic sentence and the author point out the supporting by using his personal
observation.

STRENGTH AND WEAKNESS

Strength
 The thesis statement is related to the
topic sentence where is coherence each
other.
 The author give a clear viewpoint for
this essay
 The steps is easy to understand and to
follow even the author didn’t state
connector to the new step
 The conclusion paragraph reveals the result
of the process.
Weakness
 There no need the author to write a
sentence which is not related to the
baking process for example : If you do
this over the garbage can it will be
easier to clean your work area later.
Because it is too specific , maybe the
reader will not follow the steps and skip
the steps easily.
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How to Make a Simple Birthday Cake

Have you ever wanted to make a birthday cake for a loved one? Well, here is how to make a
simple birthday cake. All you'll need is a little time, love , and a few items from the grocery
store.

You will need a boxed cake mix (the favorite of the birthday person), shortening, eggs, oil, flour,
and birthday candles (the number will depend on the age of the birthday person.) When you get
home, you will need to gather a few items: a large mixing bowl, a large cake pan, an electric
mixer or a large mixing spoon, a spatula, and measuring cups and spoons

First, you will need to wash your hands and work area. Read through the directions on the cake
box to be sure you have everything you need. Then, gather all of your equipment and food items
in your work area, organize it according to the order you will use them in making your cake. Be
sure to preheat your oven to the appropriate temperature before you begin.

Next, put the dry cake mix into your large mixing bowl. Then, put the prescribed amount of
water, oil, and eggs into the mix. Then, with the electric mixer or mixing spoon mix the batter
until it is smooth and free of clumps. Next, grease the large cake pan with the shortening. If you
wish, you can wrap your fingers with wax paper to keep them from getting greasy. Then, flour
the pan lightly. If you do this over the garbage can it will be easier to clean your work area later.
Next, pour the cake batter into the cake pan, using the rubber spatula to scrape all of the batter
off of the sides of the bowl. Be sure the batter is level in the pan so it will rise evenly. Next,
place the cake on the top rack of the oven and bake for the amount of time specified on the box,
the time is usually around thirty minutes. While the cake is baking clean up you work area.

After the cake is done remove it from the oven. If you push a toothpick to the
bottom and it comes out clean it is done. Turn off the oven and let the cake cool. After
the cake has had ample time to cool, you are ready to spread the icing on the cake. If you
use a spatula, rather than a knife, the icing will spread easier and will be less likely to ruin
the cake. When the icing is on the cake, place the appropriate number of birthday candles
on it, you are ready to present your simple birthday cake.

There you have it, a birthday cake that someone will be glad to devour. This cake
is easy to make, but still shows someone you care. Be sure to prepare it with love, and
your loved one will appreciate it.

Written By Saeed Majidi Golvandani

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