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Noemi Amadeo
Dr. Griffin
Tech Prep 12
18 November 2014
"My Papa's Waltz"
by Theodore Roethke
The whiskey on your breath

Commented [a1]: This word makes me think about

drunkenness, stinging, abuse and liquor.

Could make a small boy dizzy;

Commented [a2]: This word makes me think about being

distraught, spinning and being uncomfortable.

But I hung on like death:

Commented [NA3]: Death makes me think about eternity,

family, heaven, God and seriousness.

Such waltzing was not easy.

Commented [NA4]: Waltzing is like dancing. It makes me think

of Cinderella and ball gowns and parties.

We romped until the pans

Commented [NA5]: Romped makes me think of rough housing,

bounding around recklessly and being careless.

Slid from the kitchen shelf;

Commented [NA6]: The kitchen makes me think of home. It

makes me think of my family and my mother

My mother's countenance

Commented [NA7]: This word makes me think of body

language and posture. It also makes me think of feelings.

Could not unfrown itself.

Commented [NA8]: Unfrown brings unhappiness or anger to

mind. It also makes me think of something disgusting or ridiculous.

The hand that held my wrist

Commented [NA9]: Held makes me think of comfort. It is past

tense so it is not happening now. It makes me think of a mother
holding her child.

Was battered on one knuckle;

At every step you missed
My right ear scraped a buckle.

You beat time on my head

With a palm caked hard by dirt,

Commented [NA10]: Battered makes me think of fighting. It

makes me think of blood and bruises.
Commented [NA11]: A step makes me think of dancing. It
reminds me of staircases and programs.
Commented [NA12]: Scraped makes me think of pain and
small scratches from my childhood.
Commented [NA13]: The word can make me think of music or
abuse. In this context I think it is more about the beat of the music.
Commented [NA14]: At first glance caked makes me feel
hungry but when I read the whole sentence this word makes me
think of something that is smothered.

Then waltzed me off to bed

Commented [NA15]: Theres that word again. This time in past

tense it still makes me think of dancing. It makes me think of happy
people and parties.

Still clinging to your shirt.

Commented [NA16]: The word clinging makes me think of

someone holding on for dear life.

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