Peer Review: Reflective Essay draft

Authors name: Evan Guest

Reviewers name: Ugochukwu Okechukwu
Author: Provide the following information about your essay:
1. Write your thesis statement/main idea below (if it is still a work in progress, say so)
Very rough, but my main idea is how technical communication/writing will directly relate to what I
will be doing as a professional.

2. Write out one or two questions about your draft you would like your reviewer to answer.
1. Is my theme/main idea clear throughout the entire reflection?
2. Is my technical writer identity and how it has developed clear?
Reviewer: Read the writers entire draft once. As you reread the draft, respond to the following:
1. Introductory paragraph(s): Write down the sentence or sentences that contain this reflection
papers main idea (according to you). Does the author focus on an overarching theme/metaphor/quote
symbol/etc.? Suggest how the thesis statement/main idea could be strengthened, clarified, or otherwise
improved. Does the author state which evidence will be examined in the rest of the essay? Suggest
how the author could improve this part of the essay.

This class has given me the opportunity to take all that I have learned and add it to my collection of
writing. Yes, the authors also focus on an overarching theme, which is the quote. The thesis statement
is well established you just have to talk more about how you as a writer have improved with specific
reasons. Evidence is well cleared.

2. Supporting paragraphs: Check to make sure the content of the paper supports the thesis and that
additional evidence or content is not needed to support it. Indicate one paragraph in which the writers
evidence is strong, and state the reasons why you think so. Then find one paragraph that needs more
evidence. Drawing from your own experiences or understanding of the type of assignment the author is
discussing, suggest evidence that might work to better illustrate or develop the main idea or subclaims.

Content support the thesis statement and the evidence are well stated. This course has given me the
chance to see what kind of writing concepts are used in the real world through assignments such as
Writing for Employment, creating my own rsum and completing a research project proposal. I think
is paragraph has very strong evidence he listed the works he participated it and how he has worked
through it. Also, another paragraph that might need some work is I have learned how to take multiple
perspectives on a matter while I wrote. More examples and different suggestion will help with this
paragraph

3. Organization: Number the paragraphs in the authors paper. Then, use the space below to describe
the purpose or main idea of each paragraph. Check to make sure the paper follows a consistent
organizational pattern and is effectively organized with clear paragraphs (focused around one subclaim) and smooth transitional/topic sentences. When you finish, suggest where the writer might
improve the organization of the paper through the use of transitional sentences, by focusing on one
topic in each paragraph, by restructuring the order of paragraphs, etc.
1. The main is how technical writing has improved his writing from how he started from the
beginning of the semester to today. The first paragraph is well explained and well detailed.
2. The main idea in this paragraph to understand the basics-writing concept used in the real
world and how it applies to him. You can talk more on how you struggled at first in writing it to how it
is now easy for you.
3. The main idea in this paragraph is how he has built different skills and knowledge through
writing. Perfectly explained.
4. The main idea in this paragraph is how his communication skills have improved in all
aspects. Also a good conclusion of this will help.

4. List the 2 most important things the author should focus on during revision.
1. Need conclusion
2. And looks for some spelling errors

5. Respond to the authors questions in number 2.

1. YES, the thesis are clear

2. YES, it is clear

Author: When your essay is returned, read the comments by your peer reviewer and do the following:
1. Compare your description of the thesis statement with your readers. Consider your readers
comments and revise your thesis statement if necessary.

2. What additional evidence from the research youve read, from your experiences, from your
observations, etc. would strengthen the support for your thesis?
Showing how my work will directly relate to work that could be accomplished in the real world.
3. Make a revision plan. List, in order of importance, the 3 most important things that you need to do
as you revise your essay.
1. Add length
2. Make a reflective conclusion
3. Add examples of work from assignments in class to back up my evidence