Beruflich Dokumente
Kultur Dokumente
by Omar Cuevas
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where?
careers? classes?
Figure 1?
nice presentation
good rationale
revealed to be?
which
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GENERAL COMMENTS
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Instructor
T hank you f or revising your assignment, Omar. You
have added quotation marks to all but one of the
plagiarized sentences/clauses/phrases (the "not be
conf used with" sentence).
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Concise
Practice our sentence revision techniques here and throughout your report (e.g., reduce
prepositional phrases, use vigorous verbs, etc.).
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where?
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Unclear
Your construction of this sentence clouds your meaning.
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how? where?
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careers? classes?
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Figure 1?
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nice presentation
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Problem in Parallel Form:
Coordinate ideas should be expressed in parallel f orm. All expressions that are similar in
content and f unction should be expressed similarly.
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Unclear
Your construction of this sentence clouds your meaning.
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good rationale
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revealed to be?
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which?
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RHET FOCUS
Prof icient
Write f ormally and inf ormally, in-class and out-of -class, f or a variety of audiences and purposes.
ABSENT OR BELOW Audience's needs are of ten not recognized: terms and ideas need explanation and
BASIC
language needs adjustment f or the audience. Purpose isn't clear or achieved.
DEVELOPING
Shows some attention to audience's needs, sometimes def ining necessary terms and
ideas and using audience-appropriate language. Purpose may be unclear at times,
and it may not be achieved convincingly.
PROFICIENT
Shows attention to audience's needs, def ining necessary terms and ideas and using
audience-appropriate language. Purpose may be implied, but it's clear and achieved.
ADVANCED
Shows sophisticated attention to audience's needs, def ining necessary terms and
ideas and using audience-appropriate language. Purpose is explicit and achieved with
style.
ET HICAL RES
Prof icient
Find, evaluate, select, synthesize, organize, ethically cite, and present inf ormation f rom a variety of
sources appropriate to their disciplines.
ABSENT OR BELOW Omits or uses incorrectly MLA- or APA-style parenthetical citations, quotation marks,
BASIC
and works cited list. Drops quotations and ideas into text without introducing source.
PROFICIENT
Correctly uses MLA- or APA-style parenthetical citations, quotation marks, and works
cited list. Usually introduces each source f ullyreader knows who did the research or
communicating, f or whom, and why. Use of sources is usually relevant and
persuasive.
ADVANCED
Correctly uses MLA- or APA-style parenthetical citations, quotation marks, and works
cited list. Introduces each source f ullyreader knows who did the research or
communicating, f or whom, and why. Use of sources is relevant and persuasive.
PERSUASION
Prof icient
Compare, evaluate, synthesize, and communicate caref ully, objectively, and persuasively the relative merits
of alternative or opposing arguments, assumptions, and cultural values. Integrate this evaluative work into
ones own persuasive arguments.
ABSENT OR BELOW Inadequate, inappropriate, or irrelevant reasoning and evidence do not support a
BASIC
controlling idea or paragraph claims.
DEVELOPING
May rely too heavily upon quotations, provide too little evidence, or under analyze
evidence. May omit reasoning and include some irrelevant or unpersuasive evidence.
PROFICIENT
Usually supports the controlling idea and paragraph claims with persuasive reasoning
and credible, relevant, analyzed evidence. Sources are usually balanced with author's
opinions and analysis.
ADVANCED
Supports the controlling idea and paragraph claims with relevant, thorough, and
insightf ul reasoning and analyzed evidence. Sources are judiciously balanced with
author's opinions and analysis.
Prof icient
Organize ones thoughts and communicate them clearly and coherently to address a rhetorical situation.
ABSENT OR BELOW Organizational devices (controlling idea, headings, subheadings, topic sentences,
BASIC
transitions) may be absent, unrelated to the prompt, or illogically connected. Ps
PROFICIENT
ADVANCED
LANGUAGE
Developing
Recognize, evaluate, and employ the f eatures and contexts of language that express and inf luence
meaning and that demonstrate sensitivity to gender and cultural dif f erences.
ABSENT OR BELOW Spelling, syntax, diction, or punctuation errors impede readability. Lanuage may ref lect
BASIC
a gender or cultural bias.
DEVELOPING
PROFICIENT
Spelling, syntax, diction, or punctuation errors are f ew and do not distract f rom
meaning. Lanuage respects gender and cultural dif f erences.
ADVANCED
DESIGN
Prof icient
Recognize, evaluate, and employ the f eatures and contexts of design that express and inf luence meaning
and that demonstrate sensitivity to gender and cultural dif f erences.
ABSENT OR BELOW Inconsistent, conf using, or unconventional design distracts f rom the text's message.
BASIC
DEVELOPING
ADVANCED