Garcia-Paz

Temporal Comfort

The amount of time in a day has been the same for each who has walked this
Earth. Time is constant and will never change its setting. When Jesus Christ
walked with men, He had twenty-four hours, yet He was able to bless and

Comment [AT1]: 24 hours to do what?

minister to those who followed Him. It seemeds as though He had everything

balanced. As a college student, it seems almost difficult to want to accomplish

Comment [AT2]: What is meant by this? Why

did it seem that He had everything balanced?

everything there is to do:, from socializing in social activities to finding that

eternal companion. Though the situation varies from person to person, I often
complain about how hard life really is when it really is notnt. The self-pity I
once had has developed into self-absorption:; from only thinking of about myself

Comment [AT3]: This is an en dash, which is

used for ranges, what you need to use is an em
dash which can be formed like this: life really is
when it really isnt. Just combine two hyphens
and itll automatically do it.

and not letting go off the past.

My admiration for Paul increases as I read the letters he wrote to the Romans
as well as the Galatians. He was a man who once persecuted Christians, but left
that life behind while on his journey to Damascus. Paul, however, never boasts

Comment [AT4]: The way this is led might

confuse the reader. You jumped from selfabsorption to your admiration for Paul. Make a
connection so that the paragraph flows.

about his change, but rather realizes he is weak without God. Men are given
weakness that they may be humble and that Gods grace is sufficient for all
men that humble themselves before [Him]; for if they humble themselves before
[Him], and have faith in [Him], then will [He] make weak things become strong
unto them. (Ether 12:27) Like Nephi, Paul acknowledges that his strength came

Comment [AT5]: How is Paul like Nephi?

Explain

from God and from within his carnal state. I admire most. We are all given

Comment [AT6]: What is it that you admire

most?

mountains to climb, but it is up to us to decide what we learn from them.

I haveve been living and taking classes at BYU-I, consecutively, for the past
year and have finally felt its affect on me. It is obvious that not every student is
meant for a year around schedule; most especially if that student is a first year
like meyself. By worrying what field to study and with whom to associate myself
with, I haveve forgotten my purpose in coming to this special university.
Instead, it seems as though I am only focusing on what I need to be doing

Comment [AT7]: The beginning of this

sentence doesnt make any sense. Consider
changing it to With my worries about what my
field of study was going to be and whom I should
associate with, I have

secularly rather than spiritually. At the start of the new fall term, I found myself
overloaded with just good things, as Elder Packer would say. My time is
devoted to volunteering on campus, taking a full course load, working as a parttime student, and serving on the council of the Relief Society.
Just as Paul and Jesus had twenty-four hours in a day I must do my best to

Comment [AT8]: Im confused by the 24 hours

in a day. What happened in these 24 hours?

fulfill my duties to God in such a time frame as well. Sometimes I wear [my]
busyness as a badge of honor (Uchtdorf, GC, Oct 2012), as though everyone
should care about the things that I am doing. Jesus Christ would say otherwise.
In His short he gave unto people His precious time, not Hhis anger or stress. I ran

Comment [AT9]: In His short what? Explain.

across campus going from meeting to meeting as well as complaining to others

about my hectic schedule., Jesus was not like this -- can you imagine Him
bustling between meetings or multitasking to get a list of urgent things
accomplished [?] (Uchtdorf, GC, Oct 2012)
I never understood the differences between good, better, and best. Though it
may seem obvious from an outsiders perspective, it wasn not apparent to

Comment [AT10]: So close to the em dash, just

connect the words.

me until I felt the pressure as the weeks progressed. However, I am stillstill

am confused by what would be best for me to do. Relief Ssociety is best, but

Comment [AT11]: Why is it best? Explain.

as is working since I need to pay for school. My worries then converted into
stress, which only affected my health and relationship with those I love.
Instead of working out to release the bottled up frustration, I instead would
lash out against my sister. and this was only the beginning. This was only the
beginning. It was not until just recently when my sister, Melissa, told me that
my self-pity had developed into self-absorption that I realized how far I had
gone. And it has. I would repented for a sin I once committed, but then yet
drown myself in sorrow when God hads already forgiven me: thisand there
was my weak point. This weakness was not caused because I was sorry I got
caught, but rather developed because I had offended God. God will judge and
it is only God that I should care about. Once I realized that my sorrow was for
offending God, I then understood the process of the Atonement.
The principle of forgiveness and repentance has been the hardest lessons for
me to learn. It may seem immature to hold a grudge since it only affects the
person holding it, but I have made it a habit its what Ive made a habit. The Lord
has commanded us to love Him and the second commandment is like unto the
first. It is simple to realize that everyone around me is my brother or sister, but it
is difficult to treat everyone with lovelovingly if it is not reciprocated. Yet I think
loving yourself is a harder task than loving those around you,; mostly because a
person has to feel comfortable with ones own self and love the body God gave to
them.

Comment [AT12]: Be careful with your tenses.

Your starting to switch between past and present
tense.

Whenever I am faced with a challenge, the thought of, wWhy cant this be
easier? echoes through my mind. The lesson is notnt to learn how to complain,
but instead its to teach a person how to adapt to different changes.
A wise manis he who accepts conditions as he finds them rather
than changes them to be as he wishes them to be (Stoicism).

Instead of relying on the hand of the Lord to guide me through this mountain

Comment [AT13]: Be careful of how often you

use this word.

of mine, I haveve found myself drowning in the thoughts that I speak. President

Comment [AT14]: You say this quite a bit as

well. Make sure you vary your word choice.

James E. Faust taught that, Satans power only exists if we give him permission

Comment [AT15]: What do you mean by this?

and that he cannot know our thoughts unless we speak them. (C.R, Oct, 1987,
p.43). Changing my mindset was not something that occurred overtime, I
learned that standing firm against Satan would never allow him to win.
When the term reconciliation is broken down into syllables from its Latin
root the term is very much similar to that of the Atonement. Re- means to bring
back, -con is with, -cilia to be seated at a chair or throne, and tion is defined as a

Comment [AT16]: Make sure you have a lead

into your paragraphs. Giving the definition of
reconciliation can be confusing to the reader
unless you have an explanation beforehand.
Comment [AT17]: Put these in quotations.

process. In other words, it is the process of being brought back to the presence
of God. The Atonement of Jesus Christ those feelings of sorrow, loneliness, and
despair will one day be swallowed up in a fullness of joy. (Bowen, GC, Oct 2012)
Each morning before class begins, I look forward to the hymn that will be
sung. It is powerful to know that each song is a prayer to God; a prayer of
thankfulness, joy, sorrow, and love. By memorizing the lyrics or even the tune
from one of my favorite hymns, my thoughts are automatically turned to the
Lord. It acts as a protective shield against negative thoughts and is a reminder of

Comment [AT18]: Make sure you have a lead

into a quote and that you explain it as well.

Gods love for me. I know that Jesus Christ was sent to die for us, to save [us]
from the woes of sin (McConkie, I Believe in Christ, Hymns, 134) if only we turn
to and confide in Him, our Lord our Godour Redeemer.