Peer Review: Reflective Essay draft

Authors name: Grace Cheviot

Reviewers name: Julian Leicht
Reviewer: Read the writers entire draft once. As you reread the draft, respond to the following:
1. Introductory paragraph(s): Write down the sentence or sentences that contain this reflection
papers main idea (according to you). Does the author focus on an overarching theme/metaphor/quote
symbol/etc.? Suggest how the thesis statement/main idea could be strengthened, clarified, or otherwise
improved. Does the author state which evidence will be examined in the rest of the essay? Suggest
how the author could improve this part of the essay.
I did not completely sense a theme with in the introduction but I would recommend incorporating the
quote using in the supporting body, Keep on moving. As this relates your site as well as the theme of
the paper already.
Once you begin to embody your paragraph with the underlined quote starting with the introduction
your paper will be very smooth flowing. Also I would include what topics you are reflecting on inside
the introduction as well, even though I was able to find out the information given your supporting
paragraphs.
2. Supporting paragraphs: Check to make sure the content of the paper supports the thesis and that
additional evidence or content is not needed to support it. Indicate one paragraph in which the writers
evidence is strong, and state the reasons why you think so. Then find one paragraph that needs more
evidence. Drawing from your own experiences or understanding of the type of assignment the author is
discussing, suggest evidence that might work to better illustrate or develop the main idea or subclaims.
I think your supporting paragraphs were genuinely reflective, good job. Although I would embody the
quote your phrases for each section. This would give the reader a commonality as they read through
the paper.
3. Organization: Number the paragraphs in the authors paper. Then, use the space below to describe
the purpose or main idea of each paragraph. Check to make sure the paper follows a consistent
organizational pattern and is effectively organized with clear paragraphs (focused around one subclaim) and smooth transitional/topic sentences. When you finish, suggest where the writer might
improve the organization of the paper through the use of transitional sentences, by focusing on one
topic in each paragraph, by restructuring the order of paragraphs, etc.
I think your organization and flow was very good.
4. List the 2 most important things the author should focus on during revision.

Clearing stating your topics for reflection in the introduction and incorporating your quote as your
theme throughout your paper.
5. Respond to the authors questions in number 2.

Author: When your essay is returned, read the comments by your peer reviewer and do the following:
1. Compare your description of the thesis statement with your readers. Consider your readers
comments and revise your thesis statement if necessary.

2. What additional evidence from the research youve read, from your experiences, from your
observations, etc. would strengthen the support for your thesis?

3. Make a revision plan. List, in order of importance, the 3 most important things that you need to do
as you revise your essay.