Peer Review: Reflective Essay draft

Authors name: William Garrison

Reviewers name: David Grabowsky
Author: Provide the following information about your essay:
1. Write your thesis statement/main idea below (if it is still a work in progress, say so)
I think this is the thesis:
A professional writer is an amateur who didnt quit. Richard Bach
2. Write out one or two questions about your draft you would like your reviewer to answer.
Does my theme and overall reflection match together?
Suggestions?
Reviewer: Read the writers entire draft once. As you reread the draft, respond to the following:
1. Introductory paragraph(s): Write down the sentence or sentences that contain this reflection
papers main idea (according to you). Does the author focus on an overarching theme/metaphor/quote
symbol/etc.? Suggest how the thesis statement/main idea could be strengthened, clarified, or otherwise
improved. Does the author state which evidence will be examined in the rest of the essay? Suggest
how the author could improve this part of the essay. Through this final reflection piece, I will
demonstrate my process of creating reader-centered writing, while also following the words of Richard
Bach, A professional writer is an amateur who didnt quit. Does not specifically mention which
evidence will be examined but otherwise seems to be a solid introduction
2. Supporting paragraphs: Check to make sure the content of the paper supports the thesis and that
additional evidence or content is not needed to support it. Indicate one paragraph in which the writers
evidence is strong, and state the reasons why you think so. Then find one paragraph that needs more
evidence. Drawing from your own experiences or understanding of the type of assignment the author is
discussing, suggest evidence that might work to better illustrate or develop the main idea or subclaims.
You give a lot of really good supporting evidence. Breaking up each project from the class into sections
and then reflecting on them provides the reading with a lot of supporting evidence as well as
explanation. The Resume and Letter of Interest section is especially informative.
3. Organization: Number the paragraphs in the authors paper. Then, use the space below to describe
the purpose or main idea of each paragraph. Check to make sure the paper follows a consistent
organizational pattern and is effectively organized with clear paragraphs (focused around one subclaim) and smooth transitional/topic sentences. When you finish, suggest where the writer might
improve the organization of the paper through the use of transitional sentences, by focusing on one
topic in each paragraph, by restructuring the order of paragraphs, etc.
1. Introduction: give an overview of what this reflection will be about
2. Resume and letter of interest opening: gives background information on the topic of writing
(symmetry financial group) and background information and writers process of resume writing.

3. Step two letter of interest writing.: writer explains the process of letter writing and talks about the
peer review process.
4. Writing instructions: explanation of the difficulties and process of writing instructions
5. proposals: the process behind writing a proposal, background information on your proposal (black
tar herion) and what parts were easy and hard about the process.
6. Conclusion : aptly named as it concludes the paper by giving an overview of what was gained from
the class.
The way that you broke each paragraph into separate sections and then labeled them according to the
topic of the paragraph made it so that transitions between paragraphs were pretty unnecessary. The
bolded titles served as transitions and if anything made the topic of each paragraph even more clear.
4. List the 2 most important things the author should focus on during revision.
1.

In the introduction give some examples of what the reader can expect to hear about later in the
paper.

5. Respond to the authors questions in number 2.

In the sense that you give multiple examples of how youve learned from mistakes and
increased you knowledge of writing, I would say yes your theme/quote and overall reflection match

Author: When your essay is returned, read the comments by your peer reviewer and do the following:
1. Compare your description of the thesis statement with your readers. Consider your readers
comments and revise your thesis statement if necessary.

2. What additional evidence from the research youve read, from your experiences, from your
observations, etc. would strengthen the support for your thesis?

3. Make a revision plan. List, in order of importance, the 3 most important things that you need to do
as you revise your essay.