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Mariana Garcia
Professor Ditch
English 113B
8 May 2015
Writing is Recursive
Progress only happens if one performs a task daily and each time they try find different
ways to improve. It can be done to anything an individual wants to improve in. Each time I write
a paper I always look at the mistakes on my last paper. I always want to better myself even
though I get an A on an assignment. My writing has never been perfect and never will be
completely, but writing is recursive and I can always improve on my mechanics and also
grammar. From the beginning of the semester till now I know I have improved in my writing.
Although I received As on both papers, I made many critical mistakes and now I can recognize
them and can easily correct them. My writing is not perfect, but the more I write the higher
chance I have to become a great writer. My corrections from my previous essays will prove that
I have improved over the last couple months and will continue to improve by writing on a daily
basis.
In my project space essay, Constructing My Identity Through Cultural Perspectives, I
made many critical mistakes. My thesis did not quite meet the requirements given in the prompt.
I did not include any cultural space in my discussion. In order to receive a good grade, the
prompt requirements need to be fulfilled. Re-reading the prompt can be useful for my future
essays as I go onto higher division courses. In my project space essay I state, Being encouraged
to work rather than pursue my education has made me proud of my sub-culture as a college
student. This sentence is confusing and does not make much sense. I replaced this sentence

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with, My gender has a big part of how I perform in different environments. This sentence is
easier to understand and it is also a transition sentence to my next paragraph where I explain how
the terms sex and gender are related but not entirely. Little mistakes like that can be crucial in my
upper division classes that I will take in the future. My primary and secondary sources also have
a huge impact on my thesis. They not only strengthen my thesis, but they also make my writing
credible as I use other authors thoughts about the subject I am refereeing to in my essays. At
first it was difficult for me to find any sources that support my thesis, but with time I found them.
The Project text essay was a bit more difficult, but I saw some improvements from my prior
essay to this essay.
In my project text essay, Bravery Acts of Heroine Women, I improved the most as far
as using sources that support my argument. This essay was a bit more tough because it was no
longer an autobiography, but an argumentative essay. The requirements for this essay were more
challenging to fulfill. The length of this essay had to be five to six pages long. Although, this
essay had to be five to six pages long, it was great practice and now I know how to prepare for an
essay that has to be longer than usual from the prior essays I have done. In this essay my thesis
was too general and not specific enough at first. In my revised version of this essay I constructed
a thesis that fit in perfectly with what my essay was about. Another mistake I made was that I
included a quote from a source in the first paragraph. It is recommended to not use a quote in the
introduction; therefore I moved that quote into a body paragraph to make my paper more
effective. In this essay I state, Back then women had no rights and most women were not
financially stable unless they had a wealthy husband. This sentence does not include why
women were not financially stable. The revision I made for this sentence is During this time
women had no rights and most women were not financially stable because they often followed

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traditional gender roles, which caused women to depend on their husbands. In the revision I
explain why women were not financially stable. The traditional gender roles do not allow women
to be the dominant sex. Minor mistakes like this can cause the reader to have some confusion.
The feedback I received after my professor had graded my essays was extremely helpful. To
visually see my mistakes allows me learn from them and improve on my writing.
Even though I had many mistakes in my prior two essays, it was a great learning
experience on what not to do in an essay and how I can better my chances of getting a high
grade. If it were not for the mistakes I had made in my essays, I would not know where to
improve in my writing. I am aware that nobody is perfect, therefor I am not ashamed of my
mistakes, but rather happy with the learning experience I have gained through out this course.
Out of all the many experiences that have directed me towards becoming a developed writer is
not the actual writing, but the process. The process in preparing for an essay, for example the
research and the drafts was very enlightening. The preparation for an essay can be crucial
because most of the time I choose to procrastinate. In these two essays I began writing my essay
two weeks prior to the due date. This allowed me develop ideas and fix minor mistakes because I
would proofread my work every time I thought I was done. This course was not only about
writing essays, but also how to rhetorically analyze different pieces of writing. Noticing the
rhetorical appeals that an author or even activist speaker uses allows me to understand their main
claims of their writings or speeches. This technique was extremely beneficial and I can use these
strategies in my own writing in the future. Theirs always different ways to improve in my writing
and I know it will not be easy but it will be worth it. I will take this knowledge with me to my
next course on my road to become an efficient writer.

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