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Ease of Instructions
The website provided examples which were very helpful. The examples give the audience a
practical application of the topic discussed. One page was confusing, though. The Letter
Examples tab contains two letters. The first sentence states that both letters are acceptable
but later sentences discredit one of the letters. The second and third sentences address the
amount of information that determines when each letter would be appropriate. The next
sentence contradicts the prior two, stating that the amount of information is the same.
Clarity of Writing
The language was unclear throughout the website. Here are examples from the Home page:
- Second sentence: world business world. The repetition of world seems
confusing.
- Third sentence: It is unclear if this is referring to the first sentence or the second
sentence. Also, writing stills. Perhaps you meant skills.
- The final sentence seems to be a fragment: the nouns examples and pointers
have no verb.
- As a suggestion, you might consider this for the second paragraph: This site
covers a few aspects of the day to day business skills needed in the secretarial
occupation. The examples and pointers found on this website provide information on
composing professional emails, memos, invoices, and flyers.
Here are examples of unclear areas on the Email and Memo page:
- First Paragraph
- First Sentence: The word overall could be deleted. The sentence
could also be phrased differently by saying Emails and memos are the most
common forms of communication in a professional environment.
- Third Sentence: The word however may not be the best option
for this sentence, or it could be moved elsewhere in the sentence.
- Second Paragraph
- Fourth Sentence: The word importance should be moved to the
beginning of the sentence, and the sentence should read The importance of
revising for errors in spelling, word choice, sentence structure, and formatting
cannot be stressed enough.
- Fifth Sentence: in should be is. Also, there should be a comma
after you.
- Third Paragraph
- This sentence doesnt make sense. Is exchange; supposed to be
in this sentence? Also, theres a semi-colon at the end of the sentence?
- Fourth Paragraph
- First Sentence: This sentence is a little wordy. Be is used twice
almost back to back. Also, describing what it is you are expressing is oddly
phrased.
Here is an example on the Invoicing 101: Formal page:
- First Paragraph
- Third Sentence: The word of should be removed.
Here is an example on the Invoicing 101: Informal page:
- First Paragraph
- Last Sentence: The last sentence ends without any explanation or
punctuation.
Here are more examples of unclear language from the Special Events page:
- First paragraph:
- The first sentence seems to be a run on sentence.
- The second sentence is confusing: the invitation to vendors is fine
but the invitation to a newspaper ad and the invitation to a flyer do not seem to fit.
- Second paragraph:
- The first sentence ends with the preposition be, this is a passive
statement. Try changing to The development of the event letter depends on the
event details. In order to ensure that the main points are covered, these letters
must be included in the letter:
- However may not be the best word of emphasis for the second
sentence. Have you considered Remember or Ensure?