Brief Assignment 8: Revision of the Introduction

Your BA8 is due on November 13 on Raider Writer by 11:59:59 p.m.

Objective: To develop new strategies for writing effective introductions for academic
papers and to expand your understanding of what makes an effective introduction.
Purpose: The introductory paragraph of a document plays a key role in how readers
respond to the entire text. In this assignment, you will attempt a revision of your
introduction to Draft 1.1. Keep in mind that your original introduction may remain the
better of your two efforts.
Description: Your completed assignment should contain the following:
A copy of your original introduction
Your revised introduction
A short summary and evaluation of your revisions, in which you identify and
explain what you changed and why
The total length of the analysis should be 300-400 words, NOT including the original
and revised introductions.
Before you start to revise, take a few minutes to review key elements of your Draft 1.1,
such as your audience, purpose, and thesis statement. Your new introduction should
reflect your consideration for each of these as well as indicate your understanding of what
a rhetorical analysis accomplishes.
Next, study your original introduction and any comments that your instructors or peer
critiquers made about that introduction. Using this feedback along with your broader
understanding of a rhetorical analysis, revise your original introduction so that it more
effectively reaches your readers.
Please note that if you need to revise for coherence, emphasis, or conciseness, refer to
Chs. 50 and 53 of your e-handbook. If you need to work on sentence structure, see Chs.
44-49. If you need to work on other grammatical and/or mechanical elements, consult the
appropriate chapters.

Formatting the BA8

Original Introduction
Revised Introduction
Evaluation of Revisions
Identify the changes you made
Explain why you made those changes
You can also explain why you did not make a change.
Your evaluation of revisions must be between 300-400 words.