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Why would they need to work? They still have husbands. Its not just insulting to them, its
insulting to the whole village, The New York Times reported on a five-month investigation
conducted in Northern India by ____________________on the women labor work force.

When the male leaders of the Nat caste ??? in the village of Peepli Khera, India ??? banned
women from working, a report in The New York Times said, the women decided they would

simply leave for work ??? in the morning. Except, when they did, their neighbors were standing
there, telling them to stop.

The Indian Constitution guarantees equality to any person before the law or the equal protection
of the laws within the territory of India.
The Indian Constitution guarantees equality under the law.

Furthermore, it shall be the duty of every citizen of India to abide by the Constitution and
respect its ideals and institutions. ND

In the patriarchal social order of the Nat community, strict caste rules and centuries of traditions,
that constitutional guarantee means very little to them, said in The New York Times report.
But for women facing a patriarchal social order, strict caste rules and centuries of
traditions, that guarantee means little.

In India, womens participation in the labor forces stands at around 27 percent, lower than any
other country in the G-20, except Saudi Arabia, said in The New York Times report.

The World Bank revealed from 2005 to 2015, womens participation in the workforce declined
27 percent from 37 percent.

The New York Times report said the decline is largely because of women dropping out of the
work force.

Additionally, there are social factors that play a very significant role in repressing the womens
labor force in India
Social factors play a very significant role in repressing womens labour force
participation in India.
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which have led to this reduction in womens employment, said in the International Labor
Organization report on female labor force participation in India.

The Nat chief in Peepli Khera, and the other men on the village council decided that females
working outside the community hurts the reputation of the village and therefore should stop
working, if a woman were to disobey there would be consequences, such as shunning, said in
The New York Times report.

The Nat women have been able to tolerate the punishments set forth by the village leaders,
unfortunately leaving them with heartbreaking moments said in The New York Times.

Geeta, a Nat woman, who ignored the ban to work and continued her employment at a meat
factory, The New York Times said, was punished, ostracized and became an outcast.

Geeta offered her mother a glass of water. She refused. Geeta offered her tea. She refused.
Geeta invited her in (Geetas home). She refused.

Neighbors and relatives do not want to be seen with an outcast for fear they would be declared an
outcast as well, The New York Times said.

These women who continued to work outside the village, sought out the help of lawyers and
went to the courthouse for protection of their legal rights, said in The New York Times report.

The Nat women have the opportunity to bring home earnings adding to their husbands pay,
however there is an importance difference between these two income flows, The New York
Times said in the village of Peepli Khera, those wages earned by men, is the money that is
earned with respect.
there was an important difference between these income flows. My money, he said, is
the money that is earned with respect.

References

http://www.nytimes.com/2016/01/31/world/asia/indian-women-labor-work-force.html?ref=world
http://data.worldbank.org/indicator/SL.TLF.CACT.FE.ZS?page=2
http://www.ilo.org/wcmsp5/groups/public/@asia/@ro-bangkok/@sronew_delhi/documents/publication/wcms_324621.pdf