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Requirements
The entire text is justified
Interesting Title
The Font is Arial size 12
All paragraphs are tabbed
Spoken in 3rd person, not in 1st
There is an outline
Thesis statement is present
Good arguments for the topic
The topic sends a persuasive message
The topic is original, it means a necessity
to humanity
The beginning of the introduction talks
about the topic and not the arguments
The Body has 3 paragraphs
Each argument has more than 2 good
examples, well explained
Excellent grammar usage: verbs well
conjugated, words spelled correctly
Appropriate use of punctuation marks
and capitalization rules
Complex and elaborated vocabulary
Good conclusion, great ending message
Essay was turned in on time
Final grade according to rubric (sent
through Phidias)

Carolina Pea and Sebastian Osorio

Met or not met?
Yes
Yes
No, the Font is Impact, must follow
instructions!
No
Yes
Yes
Yes
Yes, but you both must work on making it
more persuasive, provide solutions to the
problem.
Yes, it is for the school.
Yes
Yes
Yes
Amazing, I am surprised at how you both
write and express your ideas, you
conjugate really well! Fix the observations
made in the document please.
Yes, you are missing some commas,
please fix them
Yes, but I wish I had seen more, your
paragraphs are too short!
Yes, please fix the observations.
NO
4/8

Names: Carolina Pea White and Sebastian Osorio

BAD FOOD IN SCHOOL

Outline:
ARGUMENTS

The flavor is disgusting:

1. The food is made without enthusiasm.
2. They dont take into account peoples taste.
3. Sometimes the food is poorly served.
The lines are complicated:
1. We have to wait so much.
2. People get bored and decide not to eat at school.
3. People cut in line which makes us waste more time.
The price is high:
1. A little amount of food for a high price.
2. The food should satisfy us for the price.
3. We cant pay in an individually way for food we like.

Food is essential for our lives, it is necessary to eat 3 times a day, but
sometimes we dont want to eat and this affects our mental and physical health,
we dont like to eat at school sometimes because much of the times the flavor is
disgusting, the lines are very complicated and the prices are too high. These
factors are the ones that made us dont want to eat at school, and go to buy
another things to eat, that much of the time are not healthy for us.
Food is delicious, but at school is boring to eat it, this happens due to some
facts, one of them is that sometimes the chefs have problems in their lives and
this gives the food a bad taste because it is made without enthusiasm, another
aspect you is that the chefs dont take into account the taste they only make
what they want and this makes us avoid the food, when we are asking for our
food sometimes they dont see that they serve the plates very poorly.
In the other hand when we end our classes and we go to the restaurant we hate
that the lines are so large, we need to wait a long time and this makes that we
dont only eat ,also makes us lost time form our recess, but also some people in
the school are rude and they cut in line, which makes us lost more and more
time.
In our school we pay for everything: transportation, food, and education. We
think that the price for the food is high, and this makes us think that the school
gave us a little amount of food for such an high price, we thought that instead of

paying for all the food together, we pay individually for it but the school would
not accept it, but if all of us are in agreement we could talk for the one in charge
of the kitchen and provide our idea.
In conclusion, we can say that the food is very delicious and very important for
our health, there are some obstacles that makes us avoid eating, like the flavor
of some food, the lines that are so long and the prices, this obviously is not
good for us, but instead of seeing the bad aspects of this, we need to see the
good side because we need to eat, because we cannot stop eating because
food help us to be in shape.