Felt by the examiners that you need to set up what the concerns to be clearly in your introduction Follow the line consistently all the way through to help you, make sure you signpost much better during the commentary At different moments during the IOC, link back to the concern that you had identified in your introduction something that only 2 people did well Hammer it home like the IBO Examiners are simpletons The concern that you identify needs to be more than just 1-2 words long Criterion B: traditionally been where it all comes unstuck, and still is: A lack of confidence with identifying enough of literary techniques, and identifying them both clearly and correctly More meta-language, must be a) specific and b) supported with where it is Structure is the big picture: the only one you can highlight in your intro Focus needs to be sustained: one thing that was done really well was why are you approaching it in a linear way? Progression etc. add in your intro to justify your linear approach, making it more coherent + convincing