Diego Palacios

ENGL4183

04/18/16
Marked draft 3/Project Assessment
Project Assessment

This project assessment was done to reflect on the revisions made to the
second part of the UNC Charlotte Community Engagement report of activates Fall
2011 Spring 2014, pages 16 through 29. There were different considerations made
during the changes and suggestions made for this project, such as having a
different audience from the past two projects, as well as a different tone and the
heavy inclusion of graphics and a 3 column format for the bulk of the report. The
different format and graphics brought about specific issues and problems such as
odd spacing between words and letter, excessive white space and other alignment
issues.
The first issues tackled were obvious typos missed by the author. The original
file was in PDF format but was formatted to word, as I preferred making the actual
change to the report and commenting the specific change done. When the reports
format was changed, it made a few more errors with words being crunched together
but they were easily fixed. There were not many typos in this report, as it seems
considerable editing and proof-reading was done for this report. The more prevalent
issues came in the alignment and formatting of the different graphics and large
bodies of text within the report. Since the report was writing in a 3 column format
and justified, many sentences were oddly stretched out to fit well and straight into
the columns, which is unavoidable. However, there were some other spacing issues
that could be manually rearranged to get a better sentences, like many of the
situations were many options were listed, some did not include the use of
parallelism or the options were not in proper order to avoid stretching out sentences
due to long words. Words automatic formatting inconsistency checker aided in
revising many of the sentences that could be revised. With the report including
many graphics and graphs, it resulted in more issues regarding formatting of the
report as a whole. On other parts of the report, the graphics were sized so that they
cut into the columns of text and while some worked well, other were awkwardly
placed and created stretched sentences that included single words in place of an
entire sentence. In pages 25 through 28, there was considerable amount of white
space that were not filled with anything. Some of these were solved with arranging
the columns to try and hide the white space, but ultimately, the addition of more
graphics or text will be needed to patch these white spaces, left up to the discretion

Diego Palacios
ENGL4183

04/18/16
Marked draft 3/Project Assessment

of the author. Lastly, with the help of another classmate and peer reviewing, it was
apparent that some parts of the report included references to graphs with relevant
information however, many of the graphs did not include a figure number, reference
or even source, making it hard to identify the proper referenced graphic and were
made known to the author using comments.
Despite some errors and alignment issues during revisions, the report was
well-made and organized. It was reasonably proof-read, as it included few typos and
simply requires further revisions to finish it properly. The last few hurdles will come
from the managing of the graphics which can interrupt the readers pace if not
allocated properly. The tone of the report reflects the type of audience it is aiming
for, as well as not attempting to use overly complicated words or rare synonyms,
which is highly appreciated by a younger crowd. Overall, it was a great project to
tackle since the inclusion of graphics made for different problems and issues to
handle that would otherwise be missing from text-only reports.