11 May 2016

Elizabeth Benedict
University of New Mexico
Albuquerque, NM 87144
Dear Ms. Benedict,
For the three revisions required for my final portfolio, I decided to traditionally revise all three
documents. These three documents composed of the following: job application materials, a
proposal, and lastly, a recombination report. In order so that I revised these documents in an
effective manner, I chose to re-read chapter eight until I felt as if I had a firm grasp on what it
means to properly revise a document. In general, I did the same process for each revised
document. Initially, I upload my old documents from UNM Learn with Ms. Benedict's comments
in order so that I could read through her comments and suggestions. After I re-read though my
document and her comments, I tried to fix the things that she had suggested to fix and I did this
to the best of my ability. I then presided to go through and look at the comments my peers had
left on my papers under the Discussion Board section on Learn. After I read their comments, I
tried altering my documents to make them as close to perfection as possible.
For my job application materials, I initially revised my resume and then proceeded to revise my
cover letter. I found my resume to be the most difficult to revise due to the fact that I had written
and re-written this resume for various job applications and scholarships. However, like always, I
found sentences that were unnecessary and misplaced spacing. Also, I chose to add a contact
reference to the bottom of my resume because initially I only had one person listed under my
references. The reason was due to a lack of space. However, I found that by deleting unnecessary
material I was able to add another contact reference.
For my cover letter, I altered the formatted of my letter in order so that it was visually appealing
and concise. The only trouble I had revising this letter was the length. I tried multiple times to
take out any unnecessary information, however when reading and re-reading through my
material I found all of my sentences to be a vital part of my representation as a future
professional and employee. Although I made minimal changes to my cover letter, I now feel like
my cover letter flows better and is more professional and organized.
For my proposal, I did a lot of rearranging paragraph. For my first draft I received a ninety-two
percent due to the fact that some of my information was misplaced and was not as organized as I
had initially hoped it would have been. In order to enhance the organization of my material, I
spent various hours rearranging paragraphs, reading and re-reading my information, as well as
making sure my sentences were as clear and concise as possible. Initially, I had to do a
tremendous amount of research on my intended topic. As a result, I tried writing about all of the
information I had researched and as a result, my proposal was unorganized. I felt that re-reading
my proposal helped me realize and see the sections that I needed to change.
For my recommendation report, I found this document to be the most challenging to revise. The
reason being was because this was my most challenging major writing assignment to compose.
Initially, I thought the topic I had chosen was related to Universal Design, however it turned out

that this was not the case at all. Because my topic was not closely related to Universal Design,
writing my recommendation report was extremely hard to compose. While revising my
document I ended up taking out a lot of unnecessary information and correctly a lot of grammar
errors. The only reason why I noticed this was due to your helpful comments and feedback.
These suggestions helped me tailor my information to meet the standards of my intended prompt
and helped make clear the differences between writing a proposal and a recommendation report.
Consequently, I feel that by being giving the opportunity to edit and resubmit my major writing
assignments allowed me to create more fluid documents. The main thing that I learned by
revising my major writing assignments was that by having the ability to write as a process was
the most helpful guidelines to go by. Reading, rereading, and editing are the three things that I
really tried to master when composing a refreshed piece of work. After these editing processes, I
feel that my rhetorical analysis is concisely explained. Undoubtedly, with the use of revising
these documents are now more professional, organized, and concise.
Sincerely,
Gabriella M. Dalton