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May 20, 2016


Dear Mrs. Stegner,
For my reflection letter I have chosen my bullying research paper, racial profiling essay,
and Into the Wild essay and process work from bring a text to class, Brave New World, and the
good food bad food proposal. From this work, I will reflect on what I learned about building my
vocabulary and using it properly, developing a strong argument, having appropriate punctuation,
and having the right tone of voice. I will address in my academic essays, vocabulary skills that I
have learned, connecting my evidence with my commentary which I need to improve, and goals
that I have for my writing.
To start out with the essays, the bullying research paper, racial profiling paper, and Into
the Wild paper all contain similar type of structure and elements. The bullying essay was a
research paper where you had to pull out statistics such as, 20% of respondents reported
seriously thinking about attempting suicide to prove the thesis (Hinduja). The racial profiling
paper was more of an argumentative essay since some people agree with it and some do not. For
example I wrote in my essay, Although some say racial profiling may be a useful source in
arresting someone, it does more harm than good. which is a counter argument which is needed
in every argumentative essay. Lastly, the Into the Wild essay was an persuasive essay where I
persuaded the reader to see Chris McCandless as an idealist instead of ignorant. I believe I did
that best in my commentary, Chris was a visionary by the way he believed that his life was his
and he had a right to live it the way he wanted.
For the process work I will talk about the prep work from the bring a text to class, Brave
New World, and the good food/bad food proposal. From the bring a text to class essay I had
written a rough draft for it. The purpose of the rough draft was to see what I could add or take

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out of the essay for a better paper overall. For the Brave New World process work I wrote down
quotes from every single chapter I read that I thought were most significant. Finally for the good
food/bad food proposal I made a survey to understand how students actually feel about school
lunches. Doing all of these different activities definitely helped me with my final papers to make
sure that what I was writing was completely accurate.
Having the right skills is a vital factor to writing a great essay. I believe that coming up
with the right thesis comes easy to me. I think that all of my thesis are pretty strong but my best
one was from my racial profiling essay when I wrote, Racial profiling is not necessary because
it unfairly targets minority groups and affects many innocent lives. This thesis was very
straightforward and easy to understand yet very significant. The evidence I chose to match that
thesis also compliments my skill to do so, 5 times as many whites are using drugs as African
Americans, yet African Americans are sent to prison for drug offenses at 10 times the rate of
Whites.(NAACP). I believe this quote to be very relevant towards my thesis because it has
ethos logos and pathos. Topic sentences are another skill that I have. When I wrote my bullying
research paper the topic sentence of my first body paragraph is, Depression is just one of the
consequences of cyberbullying. This is a good topic sentence because the reader can obviously
tell what I am going to talk about in that paragraph. Another skill I acquire is being prompt. I
have turned in all of my assignments to google classroom and turnitin.com on time. Lastly,
making a works cited page also contributes to my skills. In every single paper I have written this
year I have not once got any points off from a works cited page.
I trust that with every strength I have in my writing, there will be a weakness. One
strength I admit to having is proper MLA. I have done the correct formatting for all of my papers
all year: twelve point font, times new roman, page number in the top right of each paper (one

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half an inch down), double spaced, and 1 inch margins all around. Another strength of mine is
my parenthetical citations. For example in my Brave New World essay I wrote, a group of
women who were made to wear t-shirts saying, I was a drug addict....while members of the
public jeer at them, and when those women get out of prison theyre going to have criminal
records, (Hari). I correctly cited where I pulled my evidence from. A weakness I have and that I
need to work on is integrating quotes and not dumping them. In my racial profiling essay I
started the sentence with this quote, Racial Profiling data compiled by the missouri attorney.
and did not integrate it. Another weakness is my use of words such as is, was and be. It is
hard for me to avoid those terms and manipulate my sentences.
A skill that I can do now that I could not do at the beginning of the year was create a final
draft. Every time I had written a rough draft I rarely ever changed it to make it a final draft. I
always thought that it was already good enough. By the end of this year I have come to realize
that in my later essays like the bring a text to class or my bullying research paper, I did benefit a
lot more by understanding the importance of a rough draft. I see that there can be a lot of
grammatical errors and other things that would have prevented my paper from becoming an A
essay.
I believe that I still need work with word choice because in my last paper for Brave New
World, Mrs. Stegner had many dw marks which means dead word. I need to find words other
than a lot, very, and thing.
My skills from this class have transferred over to my American government class in a
couple ways. I am able to understand a political research paper or an article about the
government better than I would have without this class. From what I have heard from students
who have taken ERWC and are now in college they are very happy that they had been placed in

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this class. They have said that this class was super beneficial to them. I believe that I am ready
for my college experience thanks to this class along with the help of Mrs. Stegner who made me
the writer I am today.
Sincerely,
Moriah Tago

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