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Sofia Piloni
Mrs. Webb
3rd Hour
June 6th, 2016

Writing Reflection
Throughout the semester I learned and improved my writing in many ways. This can be
see when comparing some of my older essays to my most recent ones. My essays show that
during the semester my writing has improved by the use of better topic sentences, adding detail
to my essays, and analyzing evidence.
My essays show that I have improved my topic sentences in my writing. In the first quick
write of this year my topic sentence was, Early in the book, the main character, Holden, informs
the reader that he is being kicked out of school. This is hardly a topic sentence because it
doesnt tell you what the paper will be about. My teacher even made a comment on the weak
topic sentence. In a later essay, my topic sentence is The setting of Pency Prep makes Holden a
confrontational person. This is a much better topic sentence because you actually know what the
following paragraph will be about. This time my teacher commented on how good this topic
sentence is. Therefore, my use of a better topic sentence shows my improvement as a writer.
My use of detail in writing assignments shows that I have improved as a writer. In my
first quick write, I only filled up one page and fit all of my details into one paragraph. In my inclass essay for my independent novel, I put each piece of evidence in a separate paragraph,

giving me enough room to elaborate on the evidence, use plenty of details, and create strong
topic sentences for each piece of evidence

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My essays also show that I have improved as a writer through my analyzing of the
information that I use. In one of my early essays, I said He also describes it as naked, giving
morality a sense of vulnerabilityhe is scared because of how frail and vulnerable his life is. In
this analysis, I use the same word twice instead of elaborating. Later on, I describe a line where
sap is leaving the dead body of a groundhog and compare it to a childs fear by saying, The
sap could be a metaphor of the childs fear slowly draining. This is much better because I use a
literary device to clearly get my point across, strengthening my analysis. The teacher also made a
comment about how nice this analysis was. Through the improvement in my analyzing skills, I
have improved my writing.
Reflecting back on this semester, I have definitely seen improvement in my writing. My
improvement can be seen when comparing g the older and newer essays. I have improved in
creating better topic sentences for my paragraphs, adding details to my essays, and analyzing my
evidence in a clear and efficient way.