Assessment Marking Sheet English, Journeys

Name: D C
Due: 31-05-16
Criteria/Marks available

3 marks

2 marks

1 marks

0 marks

The students characters

develop throughout the
story

The student has created a

character that has significant
development and changes
throughout the story.

The student has created a

character that has a fair amount
of change and development
throughout the story.

The student has created a

character that has minimal
change and development
throughout the story.

Not
mentioned or
very limited

The Creative writing is

presented in the correct
format. This includes being
at least one A4 page long
and correctly using
paragraphs

The student has written one or

more A4 pages and has used
paragraphs appropriately.

The student has written one A4

page and occasionally used
paragraphs appropriately.

The student has not written

the required A4 page and
rarely uses paragraphs.

Not
mentioned or
very limited

Shows the experience of a

journey

The student clearly demonstrates

the experience of a journey.

The student occasionally

demonstrates the experience of
a journey.

Not
mentioned or
very limited

The writing is engaging and

original and uses a range of
language features.

The student has created a piece

of writing that is original,
engaging and uses a wide range
of language features.

The student has create a piece

of writing that is fairly original,
engaging at times and uses
some language features.

Clearly shows the type of

journey represented in the
stimulus piece.
Spelling, Grammar and
Punctuation. Including
correct tense, speech marks
etc.

The student clearly shows the

journey represented in the chosen
stimulus piece.

The student at times shows the

journey represented in the
chosen stimulus piece.

The student ineffectively

demonstrates the experience
of a journey.
The student has created a
piece of writing that is
unoriginal, rarely engages its
audience and only
occasionally uses language
features.
The student rarely shows the
journey represented in the
chosen stimulus piece.

The story is engagingly written,

with correct use of mentioned
elements.

The story is well written, with

mostly the correct use of
mentioned elements.

The story is difficult to follow

though has but has some of
the mentioned elements.

Comments
Your narrative is well written and uses an extensive use of vocabulary. Avoid using clichs
such as Determination and fatigue battled. Is there another way you could have written
this? Your writing is engaging, uses a range of language techniques and clearly shows the

Not
mentioned or
very limited
Not
mentioned or
very limited
No editing

16/18

Assessment Marking Sheet English, Journeys

experience of a journey. The final four lines could have been left out otherwise it needed to
be written as a new paragraph and you should have written more about the town and how he
feels living there.
Grade- A