News Headline Short Story Story has clear exposition, rising action, climax, falling action, and resolution

5 4 3 2 1 0 - Annie your story does a fantastic job of building to the climax. You immediately hook the readers and pull them into the story. I thought you used humor extremely well as you concluded the story. Characters are clearly developed 5 4 3 2 1 0 - YES! YES! YES! You had characters that seemed like people (albeit WEIRD people) Story has clear, effective and well thought-out conflict (both internal and external) 5 4 3 2 1 I loved the internal conflict as it battled with the external conflict. You developed these nicely and they helped build the story as a whole. It made Riverside seem like someone who might actually offer his... Story includes foreshadowing or flashback 5 4 3 2 1 0 - Beautiful! Incorporated seamlessly.

All elements turned in on time (plot diagram, outline, foreshadowing/flashback pre-write, workshopped rough draft & final draft) 5 4 3 2 1 0 - Bravo! Overall this story was extremely well crafted. From your opening line to your ending you had me hooked. Your use of humor added to the story and you showed such creativity. I wanted to keep reading! Total: 25/25