Buddy Check Brandon, Your website is very professional but still manages to give a real impression of who you

are as a person. The formatting is wonderful and is very easy to read. Your use of images makes the pages so much more engaging and interesting- youve really made some nice design choices:) Below is a breakdown, page-by-page of the strengths and weaknesses I found. I have copy and pasted the text that is hard-to-read, and have used a red font to show where I found problems OR possible solutions. You have divided up the content nicely and have really showcased some great work here. This has clearly been a big project, and youve created a great-looking portfolio! The synthesis essay struck me as especially powerful. Hope that my feedback is useful:) -Anna Home page Great:) About me In the section My Family, there is a sentence about your wife that reads, My wife

supports me in tremendous ways that helps me going. Did you mean, keeps me going. ? In the section What I Teach, it reads, I haven't been able to use my skills and knowledge for this eld but I try to stay abreast in subject. I think youre missing a word or two here.

In the section My Values it reads I am an active participant in my church and have strong beliefs in how our values shape us and grow us. This sentence doesnt read well. You are saying that values grow us- maybe you mean values shape our growth

This page is a really nice way to make the portfolio have more of a human element. The images work well to create a clearer vision of who you are.

Philosophy of Teaching First Paragraph:

My entry into the world of education was a mix of opportunity (opportunities) that met with many uncertain and untrained skills. I did not enter my undergraduate studies with the intention of leaving it as a teacher(,) but here I am applying what was knowledge that I took for granted all throughout grade school. As a result of decisions made with little foresight as a young college student, I have come to seriously understand and respect the role of a teacher and the intricacies of learning. As a result of the decisions I made early in college with little knowledge, I learned to have the courage to keep ones heart open in those very moments when the heart is asked to hold more than it is able so that the teacher and students and subject can be woven into the fabric of the community that learning, and living, require. (Palmer, 1998 p. 11) Teaching has tugged at my heart and made it vulnerable. That is why I now teach. I think it would help to say who palmer is, give his rst name, and the book you are quoting- not just reference his info at the bottom so the reader knows that Palmer is a writer about education. In the Role of A Teacher section, you write, Until the learner learns how to go the right path on their own for this to happen, the teacher trains with and models what this should look like to the student with a fervor that exposes their caring intention. It doesnt read very well- maybe the area in red could be tweaked. In Role of A Student it reads, Learning is done best when the student is the one that takes it upon them to learn anything. Maybe it should read, The best kind of learning occurs when students take responsibility for their own learning. Part of knowing our learners are (is) knowing that everyone can be at a different developmental place and have a different learning style that works. These differences are vital for me to provide the numerous learning opportunities for those that I am teaching. MAYBE THIS LAST SENTENCE COULD READ: It is vital for met to provide numerous learning opportunities that address these difference. On this page it seems like there are quite a few areas that just need to be cleaned up so it reads more smoothly. I like how you incorporate quotes from Palmer, Pratt, etc but it makes it seem like you wrote this paper for a class. When you dont give the reader an idea of who you are quoting, it doesnt really give the same impact and it makes the reader feel like they werent the

intended audience for this paper. Maybe inserting lines like, The noted educator and writer, P. Palmer, writes, .......

Resume Great layout, easy to read, and I love how you include the pictures! Looks great:) Goal Statement Reection The title, "Molding Clay" that is My Career as a Teacher conveys a great metaphor but I think it might read better as Molding The Clay: The Development of My Teaching Career and the last line, I look forward to see how my career will be shaped whether it would continue in math education or in coaching. seems to need a comma. This page, like all the others, have great formatting and a good use of white space. Future as a Learner 4th paragraph reads, As long as I continue to coach, I plan on attending yearly seminars provided by the MHSAA and continue to develop just though the gaining of experience. Sometimes you write Masters and sometimes you write Masters. I dont know which one is right!! But I think they should at least be consistent:)

Synthesis In the sixth paragraph under, What I learned for the Classroom, it reads, However, I did learn a lot about my students an gained important insights in to what can be done to better help my students. In Final Thoughts it reads With technology always changing, I realize the need to continuously educating myself on how to use it to make an impact in the classes I currently teach. Again, great visuals and easy to read formatting:) Youve really given a comprehensive synthesis of your time at MSU!

Coursework In KIN856 the word, Examined has an uppercase E. In TE855 it reads, We were encouraged to utilized our wiki site and VoiceThread as presentation methods. This page is laid out really nicely, all of the links work, and the formatting is very consistent. Nice job:)

The My Classroom page doesnt have any active links yet. Still in the work, maybe!? Good luck ne tuning your portfolio as we wrap up the course!