Name: Lukas

Date:8/3/13

Rewriting Frankenstein
How can your environments impact who you are and the choices you make? Pick one of the following scenes from the play. Think about how the situation affected the Monster. Think about how if the scene unfolded differently, the Monster may have changed. Rewrite one of the following to show how they would have impacted the Monster and his choices in life if the situation had been different. 1. 2. 3. 4. When Frankenstein sees the monster for the first time and his reaction is to run away When the monster is in a town, where dogs and towns people are after him When Felix shoots the monster When the monster kills William

Your scene should have between 2-4 characters. 1 or 2 of these characters may be your own characters (not from the play). Your scene will have two parts: 1. What happens to the monster (the situation) 2. His choices as a result (the impact) Which scene will you rewrite? What is the situation in the scene? What do others do to the Monster? The situation is that monster came into the house looking for a friend and she was going to accept the monster but then the Felix comes in and thinks that the monster is going to kill her so he shoots the monster, agathe was going to accept him and would let felix shoot the monster but felix took her away and supposably saved her. He drived the monster away in pain and astonishment.

How does this affect the Monster? What impact does it have on his life? What choices does he make as a result? He now knows that no-one will let him be with them because they think that he wants to suck there blood and kill them. Also this affects his life because he started knowing that people hated his guts and killed people and really did become the monster. If he wouldnt have been let free into the world he could have been kept in a safe place and not able to harm anyone so that people wouldnt have died and people lives been destroyed. How will this affect the Monster? What impact will it have on his life? What choices will he make as a result? The monster wants to be very loving but think that the world is miserable so he hates Frankenstein and kills his family members to make Frankensteins life miserable. The monster wouldnt of had to do that because at least some people loved him ( agathe and felix) and he wouldnt have to kill to make other people sad and depressed. People wouldnt have to live in fear as well. The impact will be that he wants to live and that he knows that some people love him and that he is safe so that he and others can live a normal life. He will have to know that there will be some people that hate his guts that not to kill them that there are people that love him. Also he would have to choose between living on the

How will you change the situation? How might things happen differently during the scene? I would of changed the situation by when felix comes in that agathe would have already accepted him so that felix would e able to help the monster and tell the town that he means well. So that he will be able to be a person and live like everyone else Well he wouldnt have gotten angry at everyone else and started to kill frankensteins family so that, people would have to live in fear and anger as well so it would be a regular person. Also he would be able to live happily and Frankenstein can be proud of the monster in a way, so that people can live normaly and live nicely. Agathe and felix wouldnt have to live hidden and since there political refugees.

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Date:8/3/13 planet or killing himself because theres non of his kind, but has to realize that there are people that love him an want to help.

Rewrite the scene using your ideas from the purple boxes above. Your scene should: Include A Note On Staging refer to page 6 in the Frankenstein play o Explain the set design o Explain the costumes and props o Explain lighting, sound, and special effects Include a paragraph to explain your choices for your Note On Staging Include descriptions of the characters refer to page 8 in the Frankenstein play o List each character and give a short (2-3 sentences) description of his/her appearance and personality Include stage directions (in italics) to indicate how the characters move and how they speak In your scene, include dialogue that will move the plot along and show how the new situation unfolds and how it impacts the Monsters life

Criterion A: You compose a script that shows how a situation impacts the Monsters life using a lot of details (dialogue and stage directions).

Criterion B: You write in the form of a script, using the appropriate structures expected in a play script. Your scene builds appropriately.

Criterion C: Your write your characters to reflect their personalities and tone. Your script is free of grammar, punctuation, and spelling errors.
Your script does not reflect the voice of the characters. Your script has very frequent errors in grammar, punctuation, and spelling. Your script sometimes reflects the voice of the characters. Your script has frequent errors in grammar, punctuation, and spelling. Your script often reflects the voice of the characters. Your script uses generally accurate grammar, punctuation, and spelling. Your script often reflects the voice of the characters. Your script consistently uses a formal tone to explain. Your grammar, punctuation, and spelling are accurate. Your script masterfully reflects the voice of the characters.
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You do not reach the standard described below. Your script reflects very limited imagination Your script does not use the and creativity. It does not show the situation organizational structures of a script. and how it impacted the Monsters life. Your script is generally disorganized. Your script has no details (dialogue, stage directions) to show how the Monster develops through the scene. Your script reflects limited imagination and Your script sometimes uses the creativity. It attempts to show the situation organizational structures of a script. and how it impacted the Monsters life. Your script is beginning to be Your script has insufficient details (dialogue, organized but lacks coherence. stage directions) to show how the Monster develops through the scene. Your script reflects some imagination and Your script usually uses the creativity. It somewhat shows the situation organizational structures of a script. and how it impacted the Monsters life. Your script is generally wellYour script has adequate details (dialogue, organized. stage directions) to show how the Monster develops through the scene. Your script reflects imagination and Your script consistently uses the creativity. It shows the situation and how it organizational structures of a script. impacted the Monsters life. Your script is usually well-organized. Your script has substantial details (dialogue, The ideas build on each other. stage directions) to show how the Monster develops through the scene. Your script reflects a lot of imagination and Your script uses the organizational creativity. It clearly shows the situation and structures of a script in a sophisticated

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how it impacted the Monsters life. Your script has illustrative details (dialogue, stage directions) to show how the Monster develops through the scene. Include a title Describe each character Include a note on staging to explain how your staging choices (set design, costumes/props, effects) show the situation and its impact on the Monster Employ dialogue to show how the scene develops Include stage directions to show the action Use details to show the actions and emotions of the characters involved

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manner. Your script is consistently wellorganized. The ideas build on each other in a sophisticated manner. Use the format of a script o Skip a line each time a new character speaks o Italicize the stage directions o Write dialogue by bolding character names Build the dialogue and action to first show what the situation is, then how the Monster is affected Font size= 12 Your script shows a mastery of formal tone to explain. Your grammar, punctuation, and spelling are completely accurate. Edit for spelling, punctuation, and grammar Use first person when writing the dialogue Use the type of language that the character would use when writing the dialogue

In order to succeed you need to:

Rewrite the scene using your ideas from the purple boxes above. Your scene should: Include A Note On Staging refer to page 6 in the Frankenstein play o Explain the set design o Explain the costumes and props o Explain lighting, sound, and special effects Include a paragraph to explain your choices for your Note On Staging

Explain the costume and props: I wont need much just cheese for when the monster eats it. I will also need a table and chairs for when they sit down and ask question for the monster. I will also need to have Explain the lighting and special effects: The special effect i need is to have some lightning because outside there is a storm and is very loud and hard. Also I need to have some lights in the room. The lightning ghas to not be that light because its under all the trees in the forest. Explain the costumes: Felix: a simple white shirt and shorts John/The monster: torn white shirt that is too small for him and a very small black shorts. Agathe: simple red blouse

Comment [JH1]: Ok, but seems that you did not finish your sentences here. Please proof read it!

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Date:8/3/13

Rewriting Act 2 (When Felix shoots the monster.)

Agathe and Felix are walking towards a small cottage in the forest inside is a rough table, a couple of rough chairs. A small bed in the only room. Small amounts of food on the table an apple, cheese and molding bread. The moonlight is beaming through the window as light as day. There is an owl howling in the wind. The wind that is blowing the leaves in every which direction. In the distance the sound of dogs barking is thunderous. Suddenly the light has been blocked by the monster standing in the widow, it is hard to tell his expression either anger or fear from the dogs. He is wearing a torn white shirt which is too small for him. Agathe and Felix are approaching their house. Felix: Not far now. Mind that stone. Agathe: Heavens above, Ive walked this path so many times its like the back of my hand. Felix: Agathe, I need to go get our food for tomorrow, I will be back soon. Please get some rest. Felix walks out the door, Agathe walks slowly to her bedroom and starts to sleep, she is awaken from the noise of the dogs barking off in the distance. She comes downstairs, as there is noises in her house, which are caused by the monster. Thinking it was Felix she whispers. Agathe: Felix is that you? The monster stands to a stop, wondering what to do. The monster: (in broken English) he..he..hell..hello? Agathe freezes, and the slowly walks curiously toward the monster. Agathe: Who are you? The monster: I would rather not say. Agathe: Its ok you can trust me. The monster: I am a..uh I am a creation from Frankenstein and I need a home. Agathe: Oh well, you might be able to stay with us. As the monster and Agathe are starting to get to know each other Felix walks into the door screaming. Felix: (screaming) Agathe get away from that foul beast!! Agathe: Trust me Felix he means no harm. The monster: (in broken English) II c.cc.c com..come ..i..in ppp..peace Agathe: Im telling you, he means no harm. Felix: Agathe Im trusting you on this

Comment [JH2]: Great introduction to your script Lukas!

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Agathe: Thank you They all sit down and for about an hour and talk as they get to know each other quit well they begin to get tired. The monster: I need a place to sleep I was wondering Agathe quickly to answer. Agathe: Sure, yes you can. Felix: (whispers to Agathe) are you sure about this, and where is he going to sleep. Agathe: Hhe can sleep on the couch hell be fine with that wont you? The monster: Yyes, it sounds good to me. As the morning sun rises to the sky everyone has been woken up by the sound of the birds chirping off in the distance. Agathe: aAhh the sound of the morning birds. What do you guys want to eat. Felix: Iim fine with toast how about you what is your name by the way. The monster: I dont really know but you guys can call me Jjohn The monsters name has now been changed to john Agathe: How did you come up with that name? John: I heard it when I was hiding iIn the bushes. I would like to have some toast as well I geussguess. The towns people are wondering what is going on where did he go. They set out a search party to find him. Felix: While I was out I saw a search party with dogs. John: I was wondering if you guys could help me with being a human and letting them knowe I o mean no harm. Agathe: Well we cant really since were political refugees, but maybe one day.
Comment [JH4]: When you write in stage directions this is something that the audience can only see. So you need to re-word this, so that the audience either can see this change or you have a narrator say these lines. Comment [JH3]: Good you need to have more information like this to show how the characters are speaking to each other.

Comment [JH5]: These lines need to be said by a narrator.

The monster with his head down and sad. Agathe: Dont worry, John? Well make it happen as soon as we can. Felix: (whispers to Agathe) I dont think its safe for us to be with him.

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Agathe: Hhes been hurt, shot at and hated by nearly everyone, do you think that I want him to feel like that?. Felix: I know but what if we get caught. Agathe: We stick together, I am Im not leaving him. John/the monster heard the whole conversation, feeling happy because someone really cares for him that much that they would have their life be destroyed to help him. John: Hey guys what do you want for lunch chicken, chicken or chicken. Agathe: Haha, I will take the chicken please. Felix: Where did you get it? John: I saw this little thing just outside the house. Agathe: Why thank you john. Agathe and Felix felt happy to have someone else in their life that cares for them as well. Agathe: Iits getting dark so Im going to go to bed. As Felix and the monster go out to hunt for food fir the next day, they see off in the distance the search team. Felix: (whispering) John are those the John: Yes Running back thinking what to do, they decide to hide under the house in the underground tunnel they found. They wake up Agathe taking anything in sight with them, they take the food and run under to the basement. Agathe: what the Hhek are we doing down here, I want to know now someone tell me what is happening. Felix: Wwe have to keep moving before we can talk now go go go . As they got get fuarther and fuarther away Felix began to tell Agathe what happened.
Comment [JH8]: Again, this is something the narrator needs to say, Comment [JH9]: You also need to add: The sun sets and rises. Comment [JH6]: This is good, but you need to say something like this in order for the audience to understand what is happening. John is listening to the whole conversation, smiling. Comment [JH7]: I am not sure why you keep including details on what the characters are eating!

Felix: (out of breath) Ok so, Agathe do you remember that search team Jjohn was talking about.

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Agathe: (confused) Yes? Felix: (disappointed) Yeah well there after him and while we were out, I think that they saw us. Agathe: Felix I think we need to tell the town about him, it might save us as well. Thinking to themselves, Agathe and Felix tell the monster they are going to tell the town that you mean well. John: guys you dont have to do this for me. Agathe: (tearing up) Its ok we have to. As they get ready to face the town they start to say their good-byes just in-case they didnt come out of this together. They walk out to the town about to get tackled by the police and the town members. Agathe: Stop stop he means well let us talk we have rights. Felix breaks away from the police and found find a mic Felix: Stop let him go I know you may think he does wrong but hes been living with us for 4 days now and has helped us with cooking and everything. If you guys could give him a chance you would be surprised. The police stop, everyone stares and doesnt looks perplexed. believe that this is true. Felix: I know this sounds weird but we actually have pictures of him with us living are runaway lives. As Ffelix is showing the pictures that Agathe has taken the people start staring at John. Towns people: Who made this this this,,, creature shall we all say?. John: A man called Frankenstein. Frankenstein has now wasbeen fined 100,000 $ and counting for his crimes. Agathe and Felix have now been forgiven from being political refugees and can now live there regular life. John has been accept from not only the town but people around the world. Johns speech is being taken place at New York times. John: I am very thankful to be on in this beautiful world and with such wonderful, such as my favorite people on this world that I can never repay for the courage that they have done for me. Turning me from an ugly foul beast as some of you I think have called me (chuckling). They have changed me to be the man that I am today so a big, big round of applause for them. (Sad music slowly raising the music over Johns voice)
Comment [JH12]: Again this needs to be the narrator who is talking.

Comment [JH10]: Again you need a narrator for this part of the play. The audience will not know what the characters are thinking, unless they say it out loud or a narrator says the lines.

Comment [JH11]: Same you need a narrator.

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Comment [JH13]: Again, this needs to be said by a narrator!

Conclusions: John is now touring around the world to share his story to others, meeting up with his creator Frankenstein and thanking him. John is feeling joyful and thankful for everything that anyone has ever done, also of course meeting with Agathe and Felix helping to donate to make Agathe be able to see. Agathe and Felix are now able to live there regular lives and do what theyve always wanted to do. Frankenstein is now experimenting with animals and researching for the future.