Writers Name: ________________________ PEER FEEDBACK SHEET Writer: Look at your blueprint sheet and copy the A and

B of your thesis statement here: A. ___________________________________________________________________________ B. ___________________________________________________________________________ Introduction Feedback from: _____________________ 1. The writer included both titles (in quotation marks) and author names (spelled correctly) 2. The writer included a brief summary (1 sentence for each is fine) of both stories. The summary is in present tense 3. The last sentence of the introduction is a clearly worded and thoughtful thesis statement. Highlight the thesis statement sentence. 4. The thesis statement template sheet the writer used fits the thesis statement. If not, suggest which template the writer should use instead: _______. 5. The essay is typed, double spaced, and written in 12 point, Times New Roman font Body Paragraph 1 Feedback from: ____________________ 1. The topic sentence connects the story to the thesis statement. It includes: the story title (in quotation marks) character names (capitalized and spelled correctly). 2. The writer included the background information the reader needs to know to understand the argument. No, too much. I dont need to know____________________________________________________ No, not enough. I need to know_______________________________________________________ 3. Evidence 1 is either (check one): a quotation from the text detailed summary of a specific moment in the story 4. The analysis of evidence 1... clearly explains how the evidence supports part A of the thesis statement (see above) discusses the evidence itself (uses character names instead of you) 5. Evidence 2 is either (circle one): a quotation from the text detailed summary of a specific moment in the story 6. The analysis of evidence 2... clearly explains how the evidence supports part B of the thesis statement (see above) discusses the evidence itself (uses character names instead of you) 7. The writer needs to strengthen their analysis by (check all that apply): o using words from your thesis statement in your analysis o talking about the evidence itself (using character names) instead of saying you o connecting the evidence to the thesis statement with This supports my thesis because o if the analysis talks about stereotypes, explaining what the stereotypes are o finding a new piece of evidence for (circle one) #1 or #2 since it does not support the thesis 8. At least one piece of evidence is a quotation from the story and it is in quotation marks with the page number in parenthesis after it. Example: Oliver Button is a Sissy Star (2).

Body Paragraph 2 Feedback from: _____________________ 1. The topic sentence connects the story to the thesis statement. It includes: the story title (in quotation marks) character names (capitalized and spelled correctly). 2. The writer included the background information the reader needs to know to understand the argument. No, too much. I dont need to know____________________________________________________ No, not enough. I need to know_______________________________________________________ 3. Evidence 1 is either (check one): a quotation from the text detailed summary of a specific moment in the story 4. The analysis of evidence 1... clearly explains how the evidence supports part A of the thesis statement (see top of first page) discusses the evidence itself (uses character names instead of you) 5. Evidence 2 is either (circle one): a quotation from the text detailed summary of a specific moment in the story 6. The analysis of evidence 2... clearly explains how the evidence supports part B of the thesis statement (see above) discusses the evidence itself (uses character names instead of you) 7. The writer needs to strengthen their analysis by (check all that apply): using words from your thesis statement in your analysis talking about the evidence itself (using character names) instead of saying you connecting the evidence to the thesis statement with This supports my thesis because if the analysis talks about stereotypes, explaining what the stereotypes are finding a new piece of evidence for (circle one) #1 or #2 since it does not support the thesis 8. At least one piece of evidence is a quotation from the story and it is in quotation marks with the page number in parenthesis after it. Example: Oliver Button is a Sissy Star (2). Conclusion Feedback from: _____________________ 1. The first sentence: restates the thesis in a new, more specific way uses the names of the characters from both stories instead of you 2. The writer compared the two stories and explained how the characters are similar. 3. The comparisons went beyond the obvious. 4. The writer used the language of comparison (similar, like, both) 5. The writer thoroughly explained why the reader should care by giving a (check the one the writer used) text-to-self text-to-world connection describing a lesson learned from the stories 6. Suggestions for improvement: _______________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________