Title: _____________________________________________________________ Literacy Construction of connected story line.

Excellent (5) Story skilfully controlled and constructed; ideas linked effectively. Paragraphs effectively constructed to fully develop ideas.

Name: ___________________________________________________________ Good (3) Story shaped to some extent with some links created so that it develops in an interesting way. Ideas arranged into paragraphs well. Satisfactory (2) Some sense of developing a story line but the events need better connectivity so that the story develops in an effective manner. Some use of paragraphs to organise ideas but limited effectiveness. Needs stronger story line to engage reader. Occasional sense of character but not sufficiently sustained to promote engagement. Ending needs further thought to provide a clear and effective ending. 10 D 9 E+ Needs Improvement (1) Story line had some useful ideas but these need better connection for a cohesive story line. Little or no attention given to organisation into paragraphs.

Very Good (4) Story is well controlled and mostly well constructed; some linking of ideas is evident. Ideas arranged into paragraphs very well.

Engagement with plot.

Sense of character created.

Effectiveness of conclusion.

Reader drawn into the story line through suspense and fully engaged. Reader gains a very vivid sense of who the character is and is strongly engaged by the character. Clever ending which is very appealing and effectively resolves the story. 15 B+ 14 B

Story line creates readers engagement. Reader gains a very good sense of the character and is usually engaged by the character. The ending is clearly thought out and concludes the story well.

Story line quite effective in engaging reader. Some sense of character so that the reader can relate to this character to some degree. Ending rounds off the story but lacks impact.

Minimal engagement with reader.

Minimal creation of a character; the reader has no sense of wanting to know and support the character. Resolution of the story was lacking; a clearer conclusion was required.

20 18 A+

17 -16 A

13 C+

12 C

11 D+ Good (3) Some use of interesting words. Some evidence of novel ways of description. Some effort made to write in a colourful manner. Imagery needs further extending to build up appeal and atmosphere. Some variety of sentence structure; use more fully to develop the interest. Some room for improvement. Be more careful with:

8E Needs Improvement (1) Simple words used, repetitive use of language; vocabulary needs extension. More effort is required to use descriptive language so that atmosphere and emotional appeal is created. Simple, repetitive structure of sentences. Lacking interest. Many errors; focus on improving mechanics of language. Take note of:

Language Effectiveness of vocabulary.

Use of descriptions; appeals to senses.

Sentence structure.

Spelling, punctuation, capitalisation, grammar, direct speech. A+ 20 - 18 Comment: A 17 - 16

Excellent (5) Vivid, very appropriate selection of vocabulary. Displays originality. Sophisticated language choices. Very colourful descriptions used which have sensory appeal and aid atmosphere. Original images that effectively capture an idea. Complex sentences used to make the writing piece most interesting. Variety of sentence lengths. Accurate.

Very Good (4) Some very pleasing vocabulary choices. Good range of language choices and very good originality. Colourful descriptions employed which appeal to the sense and help to build atmosphere. Very good imagery that conveys ideas. Pleasing use of varied sentence structures and lengths which add to the overall interest. Mostly accurate.

Satisfactory (2) Language is clear but limited; vary and extend use of vocabulary. Descriptive language is not sufficiently used or sustained to capture the read or create atmosphere. Limited use of varied sentences structure and lengths. Use more fully to develop the interest. Improvement required. More accuracy especially needed for:

15 B+

14 B

13 C+

12 C

11 D+

10 D

9 E+

8 E