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Assessment of Reading, Writing and Mathematics:
Primary Division





Released 2013 Assessment: Language 2, Writing



Item-Specific Rubrics and
Sample Student Responses with Annotations





























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Scoring Guide for Short Writing (2013)
Topic Development
New Kind of Transportation Booklet 2 - Question 13

Q13: Imagine you have invented a new kind of transportation. Write a paragraph explaining
how it helps people.

Code Descriptor

B

Blank: nothing written or drawn in the space provided





I

Illegible: cannot be read; completely crossed out / erased; not written in English
OR
Irrelevant content: does not attempt assigned prompt (e.g., comment on the task,
drawings, ?, !, I dont know)
OR
Off topic: no relationship of written work to assigned prompt
OR
Errors in conventions prevent communication




10


Response is not developed; ideas and information are limited and unclear.
Organization is random with no links between ideas. Response has a limited
relationship to the assigned task.



20


Response is minimally developed with few ideas and little information.
Organization is minimal with weak links between ideas. Response is partly related
to the assigned task.



30


Response has a clear focus, adequately developed with ideas and supporting details.
Organization is simple or mechanical with adequate links between ideas. Response
is clearly related to the assigned task.



40


Response has a clear focus, well-developed with sufficient specific and relevant
ideas and supporting details. Organization is logical and coherent with effective
links between ideas. Response has a thorough relationship to the assigned task.











Scoring Guide for Short Writing (2013)
Topic Development
New Kind of Transportation Booklet 2 - Question 13

Code 10

















Annotation:
Response is not developed; ideas and information are limited and unclear (e.g., My transportation
will help others because they will get to move place to place). Organization is random with no
links between ideas (e.g., and they get to play games).
Response has a limited relationship to the assigned task.

Scoring Guide for Short Writing (2013)
Topic Development
New Kind of Transportation Booklet 2 - Question 13

Code 20
















Annotation:
Response is minimally developed with few ideas and little information (e.g., I have invented the
digger mate 3000. can go under groundas fast as you wanthas an itached xbox 36010
people per 1 car). Organization is minimal (e.g., I haveIt can goIt hasIt can also).
Response is partly related to the assigned task.

Scoring Guide for Short Writing (2013)
Topic Development
New Kind of Transportation Booklet 2 - Question 13

Code 30
















Annotation:
Response has a clear focus and is adequately developed with ideas and supporting details (e.g.,
can help people becauseIt has saftey features like non-slip peddlesgets people around
fasterbecause it has a electric, re-chargeable, high powered motor!even runs by itself).
Organization is simple and mechanical with adequate links between ideas (e.g., The rocket bike
can help peopleIt hasIt also getsIts because it hasThe rocket bike even).
Response is clearly related to the assigned task.


Scoring Guide for Short Writing (2013)
Topic Development
New Kind of Transportation Booklet 2 - Question 13


Code 40



Annotation:
Response has a clear focus, and is well-developed with sufficient specific and relevant ideas (e.g.,
The Amazing Flyer 3000has a cofee and soda despencer The Amazing flyer 3000 is powered
by grass!) and supporting details (e.g., you dont have to waste time making cofee at homeIf
you are going to the gymThe Amazing Flyer 300 has a smoothie/energy drink makerIf you are
stuck in a traffic jam, dont worry that flying car can fly over traffic not making you late for
work!). Organization is logical and coherent with an opening and closing sentence and effective
links between ideas (e.g., My imgginary invention is The Amazing Flyer 3000! It hasIf you are
going to the gymIf you are stuckDont even think about buying gas, just grab some
grass!Thats my super duper invention of new transportaion).
Response has a thorough relationship to the assigned task.


Scoring Guide for Short Writing (2013)
Conventions
New Kind of Transportation Booklet 2 Question 13

Q13: Imagine you have invented a new kind of transportation. Write a paragraph explaining
how it helps people.











































Descriptor

B

Blank: nothing written or drawn in the space provided



I

Illegible: cannot be read; completely crossed out / erased; not
written in English
OR
Errors in conventions prevent communication



10

Errors in conventions interfere with communication
OR
Insufficient evidence to assess the use of conventions


20

Errors in conventions do not interfere with communication


30

Conventions are used appropriately to communicate

Scoring Guide for Short Writing (2013)
Conventions
New Kind of Transportation Booklet 2 Question 13

Code 10











Annotation:
Response has errors in conventions (e.g., omission of all beginning and ending punctuation
creating one run-on sentence: the floting car is the best transportation you could think of it can go
faster then eney thing you can flot over cars no trafick; misspelled words: flot, trafick, then for
than, eny for any) that interfere with communication.
Response does not demonstrate the use of expected conventions.






Scoring Guide for Short Writing (2013)
Conventions
New Kind of Transportation Booklet 2 Question 13


Code 20













Annotation:
Response has errors in conventions (e.g., inconsistent use of beginning and ending punctuation,
creating a run-on sentence: You could go any ware in the word with a flying care it would help you
get to school faster; misspelled words: care for car, trafik, placses, any ware, word for
world) that do not interfere with communication. Some control of simple sentences is evident.
Response demonstrates the use of some expected conventions.
Scoring Guide for Short Writing (2013)
Conventions
New Kind of Transportation Booklet 2 Question 13


Code 30









Annotation:
Response uses conventions appropriately to communicate (e.g., consistent use of beginning and
ending punctuation; uses complex and compound sentences; uses a variety of punctuation:
periods, commas, a dollar sign, a question mark, exclamation marks and a colon). Some errors
may exist (e.g., misspelled words: diffrent, apsolute; misplaced capital letters: Fly, Jiffy).
Response demonstrates control of expected conventions.








Scoring Guide for Long Writing (2013)
Topic Development
You Find a Ticket in a Book Language Booklet 2 - Question 7

Q7: You find a ticket in a book at the library. Write a story about what the ticket is for and what
you do with it.

Code Descriptor

B

Blank: nothing written or drawn in the space provided





I

Illegible: cannot be read; completely crossed out / erased; not written in English
OR
Irrelevant content: does not attempt assigned prompt (e.g., comment on the task,
drawings, ?, !, I dont know)
OR
Off topic: no relationship of written work to assigned prompt
OR
Errors in conventions prevent communication




10


Response is not developed; ideas and information are limited and unclear.
Organization is random with no links between ideas.
Response has a limited relationship to the assigned task.



20


Response is minimally developed with few ideas and little information.
Organization is minimal with weak links between ideas.
Response is partly related to the assigned task.



30


Response has a clear focus, adequately developed with ideas and supporting details.
Organization is simple or mechanical with adequate links between ideas.
Response is clearly related to the assigned task.



40


Response has a clear focus, well-developed with sufficient specific and relevant
ideas and supporting details. Organization is logical and coherent with effective
links between ideas.
Response has a thorough relationship to the assigned task.











Scoring Guide for Long Writing (2013)
Topic Development
You Find a Ticket in a Book Language Booklet 2 - Question 7

Code 10


Annotation:
Response is not developed; ideas and information are limited and unclear (e.g., I was wakiNg thRo the
LibRarYAND thaR wasa ticket AND iseiD FRee game ticket).
Response has a limited relationship to the assigned task.




Scoring Guide for Long Writing (2013)
Topic Development
You Find a Ticket in a Book Language Booklet 2 - Question 7


Code 20



Annotation:
Response is minimally developed with few ideas and little information (e.g.,I saw a purplelgolden ticket it
said 10,000 icecreams Free! at baskin robinsI got 10,000 icecreamchoclate, strawberry, cookie dough,
mint choclate chip and more). Organization is minimal (e.g., One day I openedthen I sawSo I
wentI gotI never got...me and my icecream lived happily ever after The End!).
Response is partly related to the assigned task.

Scoring Guide for Long Writing (2013)
Topic Development
You Find a Ticket in a Book Language Booklet 2 - Question 7


Code 30




Annotation:
Response has a clear focus and is adequately developed with ideas and supporting details (e.g., I was
walking down a iyel of a library and found a bookThar was a hockey ticket in it! The game was in 3 hours
I coud not go alownThe to teams Playing was tronto and monryol in trontoTronto won 3-0).
Organization is simple and mechanical with adequate links between ideas (e.g., One dayThar wasI
ran...and sadeand tolldso we wentWe take the tranand wachtThan we went home and Feel a
sleep).
Response is clearly related to the assigned task.



Scoring Guide for Long Writing (2013)
Topic Development
You Find a Ticket in a Book Language Booklet 2 - Question 7

Code 40




Annotation:
Response has a clear focus, and is well-developed with sufficient specific and relevant ideas and supporting
details (e.g., I found a ticket in afariy tale coll-ection book! It said: Enter the pin-code: WF24YX at
Winmoney.com for a chance to win 100,000 dollars! I ran 14 blocks utill I got home). Organization is
logical and coherent with an opening sentence and effective links between ideas (e.g., I was at the library
yesturday and I found a ticketI ranI burst inand yelled:...My mom and dad came runingMy m-om
and dad ran wildlyWe waited two months utill we got a email saying: You have won the grand prize:
100,000 dollars!).
Response has a thorough relationship to the assigned task.
Scoring Guide for Long Writing (2013)
Conventions
You Find a Ticket in a Book Booklet 2 - Question 7

Q7: You find a ticket in a book at the library. Write a story about what the ticket is for and what
you do with it.








Descriptor

B

Blank: nothing written or drawn in the space provided



I

Illegible: cannot be read; completely crossed out / erased; not
written in English
OR
Errors in conventions prevent communication



10

Errors in conventions interfere with communication
OR
Insufficient evidence to assess the use of conventions


20

Errors in conventions do not interfere with communication


30

Conventions are used appropriately to communicate

Scoring Guide for Long Writing (2013)
Conventions
You Find a Ticket in a Book at the Library Booklet 2 - Question 7

Code 10

Annotation:
Response has errors in conventions (e.g., inconsistent use of beginning and ending punctuation resulting
in a run-on sentence; misplaced capital letters: Flacht, beFor, My, Mgic, stuFF; misspelled words: whent,
Flacht, beFor, Mgic, sinny for shiny, dis apird, sow for saw; incomplete sentence: it had cool
stuFF that never sow) that interfere with communication.
Response does not demonstrate the use of expected conventions.




Scoring Guide for Long Writing (2013)
Conventions
You Find a Ticket in a Book at the Library Booklet 2 - Question 7

Code 20


Annotation:
Response has errors in conventions (e.g., misplaced capital letters: uPon, Picked, Park, My, Money, Pore;
misspelled words: libary, sed, thosand, doller, reseach, quater, Pore for Poor; incorrect contraction:
yoused; missing capital letters: then, ontario) that do not interfere with communication.
Response demonstrates the use of some expected conventions.


Scoring Guide for Long Writing (2013)
Conventions
You Find a Ticket in a Book at the Library Booklet 2 - Question 7

Code 30


Annotation:
Response uses conventions appropriately to communicate (e.g., uses a variety of punctuation: capital
letters, periods, quotation marks, uses an exclamation mark; uses commas). Some errors may exist (e.g.,
uses incorrect verb tense: I had no classes, so I can play with my friends; misspelled word: icecream).
Conventions are used appropriately to communicate.
Response demonstrates control of expected conventions.