Eng 102, Fall 2010

Instructor Stamper

Review Questions
1. Is the paper Title effective for the argument? Why or why not? (Consider the Creating
Titles Course Document guidelines.) There is not title
2. Is the paper Introduction effective for the argument? Why or why not? (Consider the
Introductions Course Document guidelines.) The first paragraph is fairly effective. It
sets the context, states why the topic is important, and has a thesis.
3. Are all the arguments based on some of the following: reason, logical arguments, facts,
and/or statistics? Are these argument techniques used throughout the paper? If not,
where would the paper benefit from revising to add these rhetorical techniques? Lots of
facts and statistics are used. I think reason and logical argument could be used in
interpreting and explaining the facts and statistics.
4. Are there other appeals made in the paper, such as appeals of pathos or ethos (emotion
or ethics/right and wrong)? If so, identify these for the writer and suggest that these
appeals be revised to logical arguments. I think the end of the third paragraph talking
about what parents tell their children is more of an appeal to ethos and pathos. Try to
make it more based on logic. All the other parts seem to be logical.
5. Does the paper take a position on/make an argument about the topic? Identify for the
writer where you see the main argument, or comment if you do not see this yet. I see the
main argument as very clear and repeated many times. Its that the media is influencing
teenagers to have sex before marriage.
6. When paraphrasing, is it clear when paraphrasing *begins and ends* and then clear
where your peers words begin? If there is paraphrasing in the draft, comment on one
instance and how it is handled. The instance that talks about teens watching racy shows
is pretty straightforward and clear. I thin it was handled well in this instance.
7. Are the outside sources directly relevant to the main paper focus and subject? Are the
sources helpful, and most importantly, are there questions that you have as a reader that
are not answered or supported that could use outside expertise? I think the sources are
very pertinent to the topic and helpful although I think they could be explained more
thoroughly and connected better to the authors own original argument.
8. Are complete author names and the titles of their publications introduced when being
paraphrased or quoted for the first time? Afterward, are the authors referred to by their
last names when they are quoted or paraphrased? There are no author names in the
body of the paragraph and the same citation is used each time.
9. Are correct in-text citations given in MLA style for quoted and paraphrased work? No I
do not think so
10. Is the paper Conclusion effective for the argument? Why or why not? I think the first
and last sentences are very clear and concise but the second one seems out of place.
11. Are there any unanswered questions that you have about the subject as a whole after
reading this paper? Or specific areas that raised questions? It was proved very well that
the media effects teenagers but I would like more facts on the different ways they do
that. This would make the argument more effective for me ad believable if the process
was explained using logic and facts.
12. Address two specific strengths and two specific areas that could be improved with
revision. I think the paper is very concise which is good and clear in its argument. I
think the length could be improved and greater explanation as to the methods the media
uses would be an interesting addition.
13. Comment upon whether the writer has edited and proofread carefully and used spellcheck. You do not need to look for grammar issuesjust look for things that stick out to
you, such as missing words or misspellings or sentences that jump out at you. There
are some words repeated here and there.

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14. Are the in-text citations in correct MLA form? Is the Works Cited page part of the
document with continuous page numbers? Are the ASU library or database names listed
in the Works Cited by each entry? Is there at least one book among the sources? There
is a works cited as part of the text but no page numbers. There is at least one book
referenced.
15. Going beyond: Is the writing coherent or smooth? Are the vocabulary choices
interesting or vibrant? Is the argument/assessment clear or even persuasive? Give kind
and productive suggestions. The argument is clear but I dont think the writing is smooth
as it could be.