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Instructor: Malcolm Campbell
English 1103
9/7/14
Has technology created a generation that cannot communicate with their own voice?
The I will be studying the effects of technology on the ability of Gen-Z being able to
communicate face to face with other people is what I will be researchingpeople.. Up until 5-7

Comment [MC1]: Double check facts

years ago, if you wanted to get a hold of someone, you had to call them. They may not be there
so you would have to leave a message. That is unheard of these days. Now we can gain instant
contact with anyone in the world as long as their cell phone is on. We can shoot them a text, face
book message, tweet, and a number of other communication means. As a younger generation in

Comment [MC2]: Is this capped?

America gets smart phones and computers, they are less and likely to be able to communicate in
person. As it is nowadays some people text while sitting two feet away from each other.
According to Lillin Li of the fastertimes.com, she says that she has no clue how to talk on the
phone with a stranger. She says, People who grow up using their dial-pads for the letters rather
than the numbers on them do not know how to talk on the phone not because they are socially
awkward, but because they are ill-bred. This is happening right now in front of our faces and it

Comment [MC3]: Think of a professor not me

but a professor reading this word in a topic
proposal. Would this be a good word choice?
Comment [MC4]: State what fastertimes.com is.
So, of Fastertimes.com, a website for,
Comment [MC5]: Shes saying she has no clue,
of is she talking about younger people. What makes
her qualified as a good person to talk about this?
Comment [MC6]: Explain what on earth she
means by ill-bred?

will only get worse as time goes on and 8 year olds begin to get cell phones. Soon enough we
may never use our voices again, we may adapt and lose them for good. You may ask why this is
happening, two reasons; technology is increasing so fast and is so easy to use that everyone and
their kids want to use it and can. Second, the parents are letting them. Certain parents dont make
their kid get off the computer or phone. They only communicate with their friends through

Comment [MC7]: Wow you just jumped from

one side of the Grand Canyon to the other. This is a
huge leap, which sounds so improbable that youve
got to build up to it. Do you really think this is so?
And Im curious what the connection to losing our
voice is I gather its the use of written language via
text? But youd want that there. Pretty big claim.

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written words, never their voices. Problem is, generally, no one is there to stop them. The
increased use of technology and lack of parenting is causing teens across the nation to become
lackluster voice communicators.
My preliminary research involved talking to others, mostly my family. My close family

Comment [MC8]: When you introduce face-toface communication skills, that makes sense. When
you go into people losing their voice, you go very,
very broad.

recognizes how inadequate most teenagers are t talking to people. Most of my friends are well
spoken people, but we talk about the lack of people our age being able to talk t people in person,
especially strangers. During my life I have been put into situations when you have to talk to
complete strangers. It will happen to everyone no matter how you try to avoid it. Ive been
working before and Ill just strike up a conversation with a customer, just because. Sometimes

Comment [MC9]: Any reason why wed want to

avoid it? One issue thats being overlooked is that
were not going to stop face-to-face
communications.

that conversation will be about how people my age have no clue how to talk to strangers. I have
experienced firsthand that teenagers lack the ability to talk to people. When we hire new
employees, some of them have literally no clue how to associate with another human. Its truly
pathetic. Along with talking to people about this subject, I have done online research from sites
such as teenink.com, fastertimes.com, and huliq.com. I have looked on the UNCC database and

Comment [MC10]: Note how strong your

opinion here is and you can make an argument in
your EIP but name calling or such strong opinions
generally do not turn your audiences onto your side
when called pathetic. More discussion in class.

come up with nothing. I have yet to seek a librarians help, but I have gathered a lot of
information on the topic just from the few sources I have spoken to.

Comment [MC11]: Lordy, child. No reading?

spoken people, but we talk about the lack of people our age being able to talk t people in
person, especially strangers. During my life I have been put into situations when you have to talk
to complete
Initial Inquiry Question
Has technology and social networking killed the ability of the American teen to be able to
talk to people using his/her voice?
My Interest in this Topic

Comment [MC12]: Hindered or is it killing are

better verbs for argument because you allow the
other side to feel their side will be addressed. If
somethings killed, its done, over with, kaput.

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I am very interested in this topic because it directly affects me and is directly criticizing

Comment [MC13]: Who is?

my generation and younger. I also have dealt with it on a daily basis throughout the summer
when I am working. I hear it when people my age still ask their parents to call companies for
them. I am interested because I am directly influenced by their. I dont want to see out generation
going down this path, even though I think the damage may be done. I know that technology and
social networking has killed verbal communication in our society, but the question is how much.

Comment [MC14]: Did I miss where you are

working? I was wondering earlier when you
mentioned work.
Comment [MC15]: ? huh
Comment [MC16]: This is where inquiry comes
in you will learn if damage is done, if so how
much, etc.

Certain adults are even become addicting to technology and social networking. I would hope to
learn many more opinions and many more facts on my topics. For the most part, my knowledge
is opinion based. I want some hard facts that tell me what is really happening. I want to hear both
sides because I am mostly on the side that it is killing verbal communication. I want to
understand why my generation is going down this path. I want to gain a vast knowledge on this
subject.
I will be further researching my topic by using the schools database, if possible. I would
like to look at face books PR page to see what they think. I would like to look at Twitters PR
page. I would like to contact the major cell phone companies
Next Steps
I will be further researching my topic by using the schools database, if possible. I would
like to look at face books PR page to see what they think. I would like to look at Twitters PR
page. I would like to contact the major cell phone companies and see what they think. I would
like to study research done by professionals. I will definitely be asking the librarian to see if they
have any very information filled sources.

Comment [MC17]: Excellent!

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Howdy Jon yes, youre on the right track. My comments are straight forward, not
meant to sound critical. I realize youre just drafting and you have time. I highlighted a few
typos/missing words but not all. Youd know to read through carefully and aloud when
finalizing.
So the topic is excellent. What you want to do is make more clear the question
youre investigating. For example, voice and face-to-face communication skills are
different, and the use of voice is confusing me. There is a great deal of conversation
about this topic. Some folks believe its an enhancement to be able to communicate the way
we do, that it only adds to our ability to talk if we can get certain minutiae out of the way
and save important things to discuss for when we meet. Others, of course, are more in line
with your thinking: that harm has been done, and the question is how much and what can
we do to slow, stop, reverse the harm? Am I more-or-less correct in what youre going to
look into?
Ill place a link or two below for some solid research since you need to show youve
been doing some good reading the one source above is good but youll want to go further.
Plus her qualifications arent clear. Youll see what I mean when I dig up an article or two
on the topic.
Dont get discouraged by this. Youve got the intent of the sections down but not
some of the specifics. Go back through the assignment and read exactly whats to appear in
each section. If it asks you to name specific sources, do so. Youll see what I mean.
Good start! mc