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Mackenzie Belton
28 April 2015
UWRT-1102-047
Ms. Ingram

Introduction
My e-Portfolio is plain, simple and to the point. I did not want the layout or the small
details of the portfolio to distract the reader from what is important, my work. That is why I
chose to do a simple yet pretty background. I could have added in images that related to my topic
but there is not much I can put into pictures with regards to my topic (mentally ill). Even though
we focused on one particular project this semester I can definitely see a change in my writing
and the magnitude of research that I did and my goal is that the reader can see that change as
well. This paper is about the organization and construction of my e-Portfolio and the reasons
why I chose to do the things I did. I hope this paper clears up any unanswered questions one
might have about my e-Portfolio or anything in it.

Home
This is the first page of my e-Portfolio. I wanted this to be the first page because I wanted
the reader to get a sense of who the author was, a little background knowledge. I did not want to
leave that a mystery. However, seeing that the project was not based on me, personally, I chose to
not put a picture of myself with my bio. I did this because I felt like that would make it too
personal for the reader and that is not really the goal of my e-Portfolio. The goal being to show
the reader my research process and the writing that I did to get to my final draft, not to talk about
me the whole time. I used spatial, visual, and linguistic modes of communication on my home
page. I used spatial because of where I placed the text box (front and center), visual because of

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the color of the text box and the size of the text, and linguistic because of the actual words in the
text box like, Hi yall, Im MackenzieI hope you enjoy my site. I mainly only used these
three because my bio is the only thing on this page.

Traditional Research Essay


The traditional research essay was the main thing that we worked on this semester. After
hours of research, writing, and figuring out which perspective to take it all was shown through an
eight-page paper. For it being my first real research paper that I have done, I think I did pretty
darn well. Within this paper, and throughout my drafts, you can see a lot of change that occurred.
Just from draft one to draft two there was a great difference in my writing and of the level of
knowledge about my topic. I did a whole lot of editing and revision throughout this project as
well. With the help from my peers and Ms. Ingram I was able to fuse together all of the feedback
I got and make a good final draft. This whole project was centered on independent inquiry &
curiosity. We had to be curious about a topic, independently research about it, and obtain enough
information to create a well-balanced argument. It takes a lot of critical thinking as well
because you have to go in depth and the information is not just on the surface. I think throughout
this inquiry project I used both of these concepts effectively. I hope the layout of this page was
not confusing to the reader. I used spatial mode of communication very cautiously because I had
a lot to put on this page and I did not want the reader to have to scroll forever just to see all of
my artifacts. The artifacts that follow the final draft have two on each row (two rows of that) and
then the last one centered in the middle underneath. Below each artifact is a little caption briefly
explaining what the image above it is. I chronologically placed my artifacts on this page just
because that makes the most sense to me.

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The first thing on this page is the final draft of my research essay. It took me a while to
finally come to this draft but I made it. I decided to put the final draft at the top of the page so my
reader can see the finished product and then scroll down and see how I got there. Within the final
draft I had to highlight what changed from the previous draft to the final. There was not a whole
lot that I revised/changed but the feedback I got from Kelsey and Ms. Ingram allowed me to
progress my draft even more. For instance, in the final draft I was told to add an example that
would help support the point that I stated above. My point was that, Research suggests that
the mentally ill are more likely to be a victim than the perpetrators of the violence. The
support that I added was, For example, research from NC State University and Duke
University said that people with schizophrenia, bipolar disorder, or psychosis are two and a
half times more likely to be attacked, raped, mugged than the general public. Just by
adding one sentence improved that section of the paper greatly. The other big thing that I
changed in this draft was the Personal Experience part of the paper. Even though the story
was made up, I changed it to something that was based on a true person. The last thing I revised
was I added subtitles. Kelsey recommended that I use those so the reader does not get confused
on what they are reading about because I have to admit my paper is a little challenging to follow.
The first artifact that I used on my Traditional Research Essay page was the
brainstorming for draft one of the research paper (Process Work Artifact 1). I was kind of lost at
the beginning of this project because it is super frustrating when you do not know how to start
something and especially when you want it to be perfect (or at least somewhat). I had done most
of my research already so I had enough information where I could start writing. This artifact
shows the main points that I was going to include in the first draft as well as the perspective I
was going to take. I also included the people at my roundtable like Psychologists,

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Psychiatrists, Dorothea Dix, and Family or relatives of the mentally ill, where I could refer
back to what their point of view was on the topic and incorporate that into the paper as well.
The second artifact on this page is draft one of my research paper (Process Work Artifact
2). I decided to use my first draft as one of my process work artifacts because I think this is
where you can see the biggest change from the next draft and especially to the last. Like I stated
just a second ago, I was lost on which direction to go in when writing the first draft. The draft
was not even a full three pages in length and it lacked a lot of my research. This artifact is
important in showing how my writing has grown because my first draft was awful but it shows
my writing from beginning to end (and dont worry, it gets better I promise). In this stage of the
writing process this is where providing & receiving feedback is super crucial. Breaking up into
small groups and peer editing was the most helpful aspect of the writing process because you get
constructive feedback and it is more personal, too. Kelsey (one of my peer reviewers) was great
at giving me ideas for future drafts. I got confused when you began talking about the pros and
cons of institutionalization and deinstitutionalization. I would suggest adding subtitles to keep
them separate, is just some of the helpful feedback I received from her. This advice opened me
up to new ideas for my future drafts that I had not thought of before.
The third artifact on this page is a draft of my thesis statement (Process Work Artifact 3).
I decided to use this draft of my thesis statement as a process work artifact because as you will
see throughout this project I changed my mind a lot (I mean A LOT) and I wanted to show where
I was at this stage in the game. I had not written my second draft yet but for class we had to write
an ongoing draft of our thesis statement. Mine reads, When asked the question, Should
people with Psychological disorders be institutionalized? My quick response would be yes.
However, since conducting research I have come to my own conclusion that these certain
individuals should not. This almost made me laugh when I read it again just now because it is

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totally different than the thesis statement that I ended up with in my final draft. I think that is OK
because that is what the writing process is all about, right?
The fourth artifact on this page is the brainstorm/outline for draft three of my research
essay (Process Work Artifact 4). I decided to use this as a process work artifact because even
though it didnt directly show my growth, it showed my train of thought for the third draft. It is a
messy outline but it was very effective. Brainstorming before every draft is a really helpful way
to move the writing process along. When I immediately put down my ideas for something it
allows the information to flow more readily instead of sitting there thinking of what I want to
write.
The fifth (and final) artifact on this page is draft three of my research essay with feedback
from Ms. Ingram (Feedback Artifact 1). I decided to use this draft as a feedback artifact due to
the fact that I got a lot of good feedback from Ms. Ingram (as usual) that aided in the revision
process for my final draft. I liked this draft because I thought it was my best one yet and I wanted
to make it even better. She stated, The question I have here is-what kind of care do people with
SMIs need? Why is being at home possibly the worst place? This particular feedback was
helpful in the fact that it was a question so I had to ask myself this and research it so I could find
an answer to it.

More: Visual Bibliography


The next tab you come to in my e-Portfolio is a link to my visual bibliography. This was
all the research that I had conducted for my paper that I put into a Prezi. There are ten annotated
sources and each of them has at least ten sentences within them. It was not easy finding credible
sources for this research topic. Since I changed inquiry questions after starting the bibliography,
some of the annotations are referring to the old question but coincidentally some of it helped

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support my argument so it was not wasted information. I used spatial mode of communication
within the bibliography because of the way I laid each annotation out, it acts as a stepping stone
from one annotation to the next, connecting all of them together. I used visual mode of
communication by colors I used in each annotation and the size of the text as well. I, obviously,
used linguistic mode because there is a lot of text on the bibliography.

More: Blog
The next page below the visual bibliography in the More tab is my blog page. Just from
my blog alone you can see a big difference in my writing. There were a couple revisions I did
with my blogs, whether it was due to a comment from a peer or Ms. Ingram or because I saw
another classmates blog post and decided to revisit mine. Not only did other classmates writing
help me but my writing also helped others. I like how your genres weren't the typical genres
you normally think of. You actually gave me some ideas that I will incorporate into my own blog
posts, so thank you! This was a comment left on one of my blog post from Alexus. It was
inspiring to me that my writing was influencing others, who knew? I only used a couple modes
of communication other than linguistic, because that is a given, which was spatial and visual (can
you see a trend?). Spatially, each blog is in order chronologically and visually, they are all pretty
similar. The font of the titles and the background color of each box both contribute to it being
visually appealing (or at least I hope). My favorite blog post had to be Blog 5. This post was
about genres and the different types of genres we have come into contact with since August.
Before this post I considered a genre to be what we watched, or read, or even wrote about but not
something we live every day. I think these genres have a lot to do with shaping me as a
person and it's interesting to think that so much can change you from 6 months ago to
today. I loved this line that I wrote at the end of the blog because it is so true.

More: Midterm
The next page you come to after the blog page in the More tab is my midterm. I set this
page up just like my other ones, the finalized draft first and then the artifacts below it. In my
midterm I talked about the key concepts I was doing well with and the ones that I was struggling
with. For the second half of the semester it is safe to say that the two key concepts that I was
struggling with I have now been able to overcome. With providing and receiving feedback the
fact that we have peer edited a couple of times and have gotten the hang of things giving
feedback comes a lot easier. I am a person that likes constructive feedback so now that I am
receiving that I am able to provide it for others as well. With multi-modality I think I have gotten
the hang of it more now, especially with the e-Portfolio and it being so visual. Assessing the key
concepts half way through the semester allowed me to see which concepts I am comfortable with
and ones that I need to focus more on for the rest of the semester.
The next thing you come to on this page is the feedback I received from Ms. Ingram
regarding my midterm (Feedback Artifact 2). I think she gave me more positive feedback than
negative, which was a relief. She responded to what I stated in my midterm and gave her
thoughts about it. She thought that I used visual and spatial modes nicely even when I thought I
had not. At the end she gave me a list of things to work on (only one) and that was to, Rewatch
the peer review video on Moodle (it might offer some helpful reminders about the purpose of
peer review). Throughout the second half of the semester I have come accustomed to all the key
concepts needed for this course. Since there was nothing I needed to change in my midterm
(according to Ms. Ingram in her feedback), not much is different than the midterm I wrote a
couple months ago. The only thing I added was a person to my roundtable and in my midterm I
stated why I chose to add this particular individual.

More: Writers Notebook Artifacts


This page consists of two Writers Notebook Artifacts. The first one you come to is a
warm-up that we did in class one day (Writers Notebook Artifact 1). This warm-up was really
helpful because it sparked a lot of ideas for my research paper. This warm-up allowed me to
finally settle on the perspective I wanted to take and the audience in which my paper would be
directed toward. It also progressed me to finalize my thesis statement. I concluded that,
Individuals with severe mental illnesses should be institutionalized, then I go on talking
about the reasons why they should.
The next artifact on this page is a picture of an activity we did in class to help with key
concepts (Writers Notebook Artifact 2). In our small groups we laid out each key concept we
had already achieved and the ones we did not. There were a lot more concepts we were
struggling with than the ones we already mastered. Doing this activity allowed me, and my
group, to see which key concepts to focus on in the next coming months. It was a very visual
activity, which I liked because I am a visual person. This helped the growth of my writing
process because it prompted me to focus on certain key concepts within my writing so it could be
as well rounded as possible.

More: Wild Card Artifacts


This page consists of two Wild Card Artifacts. The first one you come to is guidelines of
APA format for citations (Wild Card Artifact 1). This was a huge help in my writing process
especially my visual bibliography because without referring back to this I would be lost. I
decided to use this as a wild card artifact because even though it did not directly have
significance to my topic, it did however have a whole lot to do with my writing. The examples
given by this website are easy to follow. I got this reference from using it in another class

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because we use APA a lot. I have looked at this site so many times that now I dont need it
anymore.
The next artifact on this page is a warm-up that was a dear reader letter to Ms. Ingram
and her feedback is what I am focusing on for this artifact (Wild Card Artifact 2). The subject of
the dear reader letter was my experience of the annotated bibliography and what was going
smoothly and what wasnt. The feedback I received from Ms. Ingram was helpful in pointing me
in the appropriate direction for my research and it had a great impact on my writing process. She
prompted me to step back and possibly take a different route with my research. She stated, Do
you need to define what a psychological disorder ismaybe focus on a select few serious mental
disorders. After reading this it immediately gave me clarity and I was able to continue writing
without getting stuck.

Self-Assessment/Conclusion
In conclusion, this whole project has changed me as a writer. I think I illustrated a
particular key concept that I might have not had before this course, intellectual growth &
maturity. I believe that almost every single piece of writing that I am writing now, whether it be
in this class or other ones, they are different than the pieces of writing I wrote before this course.
I am not just writing because I have to, I am slowly maturing (as a writer) through the things I
write about. I not only see this growth in this course but in my other ones as well. If I had to give
myself a grade, I would give myself an A. According to the grade scale, my e-Portfolio is
exemplary work because I feel as though I not only met the requirements but I went above and
beyond the minimum. I think I put a lot of time and effort into the pieces of writing illustrated
above and I think it deserves an A.