InternationalGCSEinEnglishLiterature

ExemplarsforPaper3

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CandidateA

Commentaryandmark:
Therequirementfor6poemsismet.Theworkshowsadetailedknowledgeofthepoemsandasensitive
wellinformedunderstanding.Thereareinsightsintotheuseoflanguageandafairamountofanalysis
usingtechnicallanguagethoughthereareoccasionswhentheanalysisisincompleteorimprecisee.g.
ignores'boom'intheonomatopoeiainPiano,doesnotreallyanalysefullytheuseof'tossing'and
'seasoning'inPoemat39etc.Thereisfocusontheassignmentand,thoughthestyleisalittleimpersonal,
thereisengagementshownthroughtheinformedpersonalevaluation.Thewiderreadingpoemsare
treatedwiththedevelopmentexpectedatthislevel,perhapsevenmorethanstrictlynecessary,though
notmorethanthepoemsfromtheAnthology.
Thefolderhasenoughdetailedanalysisjusttoreachthe2326Bandwithamarkof23.

CandidateB:

Commentaryandmark:
Therequirementfor6poemsismet.Theworkshowsasoundunderstandingwithsomedetailed
referenceandaclearunderstandingofmeaningandtone.Thereisappreciationofthepoets'useof
languageandstyleincludingtheuseoftechnicaltermsbutcommentisconfinedtoexplanationofmeaning
anddescribinggeneraleffectse.g.'isastrongvisualimage','makesthereaderfeelnauseatedbyevoking
thissuffocatingsmell'etc.(Theoneexceptionis'crystalstair'.)Thereisfocusontheassignment.The
widerreadingpoemreferencesarebriefbutdorefertospecificquotationsusedincomparison.The
criticismshowsengagementwiththepoems.
Thefolderfallsatthelowerendofthe1518Bandwithamarkof15.

CandidateC:

Commentaryandmark:
Therequirementfor6poemsismet.Theworkshowsdetailedknowledgeofthepoemsandgenerallya
soundunderstandingthoughthisdoesfaltere.g.withregardtothe'actofnoconsequence'inAMotherin
aRefugeeCamp,WarPhotographerexploringthelossofsoldiersetc.Appreciationofthepoets'useof
languageandstyleisshownandthereissomesuccessinlinkingstructuretomeaningbutotherwisethere
isatendencyforquotation+namingoffigureofspeech+generaleffecte.g.negativememoriesinPiano,

themanicbackgroundinAMother.....Camp,theassonanceof'boom'etc.Thereareafewexamplesof
attemptsatpreciseanalysise.g.themetaphorsinWarPhotographer.

Focusontheassignmentismaintainedformostofthetimebutdoesdriftoccasionally.Thewiderreading
referencesdeveloponedetailedcomparisonforeachpoembutarefairlybrief.Althoughreferringto'the
reader'throughout(withoneexception)engagementwiththetextswasclear.
Thefolderfallswithinthe1922Bandwithamarkof19.Theanalysiswouldneedtobemore
consistentlypreciseandthedetailedunderstandingmoresecureforahighermark.

CandidateD:

Commentaryandmark:
Therequirementfor6poemsismet.Alimitedknowledgeofthepoemsisshownandthereisageneral
understanding.Thereisaresponsetotheassignmentthoughthereferencestothewiderreadingpoems
moveawayfromthenamedtheme.
Thoughrelevantmaterialisselectedandspecificlinesareidentified,overallnotenoughofthecriteriaare
mettomovethisintothehigherband.
Thefolderfallsintothe46Bandwithamarkof6.

CandidateE:

Commentaryandmark:
Therequirementfor6poemsismet.Thereissoundknowledgeofthepoems.Understandingofmeaning
ingeneralisshownbysummaryandsomeexplanationofquotationsbutthisisfairlysuperficialand
sometimesfaltersonthedetaile.g.therustcolouredhairdoesnotbelongtotherefugeemother.
Somerecognitionofthewriters'techniquesisevidentwithdescriptionofthestructureandnamingof
figuresofspeechandoneattemptatanalysiswith'tacksandsplinters'inMothertoSon.
Focusisgenerallymaintainedandthereisaclearpersonalresponsetothetexts.Briefpointsof
comparisonwiththeAnthologypoemsaremade.
Thereisnoconsiderationforthestyleandaccuracyofthecandidate'swritinginthemarkschemebutit
doeshampercommunicationoftheideasinplacese.g.therefugeemother'smotives.
Thefolderjustfallsintothe1114Bandwithamarkof11.

CandidateF:

Commentaryandmark:
Therequirementfor6poemsismet.Theworkshowshighlydetailedknowledgeofthepoemstogether
withasensiblematureunderstanding.Thereissophisticatedappreciationoftheuseoflanguageand
technicalvocabularyisusedskilfullyintheanalysis.
Thoughthewiderreadingpoemshavebeentreatedinagreatdealofdetail,thishasnotbeenatthe
expenseoftheAnthologypoems.
Thereisclearfocusontheassignment,theexplorationofmemory,andawellarguedpersonalresponse.
Justoccasionallythecandidate'sknowledgeofthecontextperhapstakestheinterpretationsbeyondwhat
thepoemitselfjustifiese.g.withRemember.
Thisfolderfallsinthetopband2730andreceivesamarkof27.

CandidateG:

Commentaryandmark:
Therequirementfor6poemsisnotmetasonlyonewiderreadingpoemisincluded.Thereissoundknowledgeof
theAnthologypoemswithsomedetailandunderstandingofhowmeaningdevelopsinoneofthepoemsbutthinon
theothers.Tooffsetthisalittlethereissomerecognitionofthewriters'techniques:repetition,imageryandsoon.
Thereisresponsetothetermsoftheassignmentandopinionsareoffered.Thestandardoftheworkonthe
Anthologypoemswouldbringthisfolderjustbelowthe1114Bandbutasonly4poemsarereferenced3marks
needtobedeductedgivingafinalmarkof7.