ENG 101

Jabberwocky discussions
Point of View

Meet in the following groups. Discuss your element with

other group members. Discuss main ideas of peerreviewed article. Be ready to teach others about your
element and a 1-2 sentence summation of all group
members articles.
Plot Aziz, David, Ashley B, Summer

Character Robert, Ashley C, Danny, Tony

Setting Corrine, Kaprielle, Zach, Naudya
Symbols Brittany, Cody, Pauline, Mieah
Irony & Theme Cambria, Cassandra, Daishawna, Kambria

Meet in the newly assigned group. Discuss findings from

first groupings. The goal is for everyone to understand
ALL elements and what scholars have said about the
poem.

SHIFTS

ELIMINATE DISTRACTING SHIFTS

These distract or confuse readers

Point of view
Verb tense
Mood or voice
Indirect to direct questions/quotations

MAKE THE POV CONSISTENT IN PERSON

& NUMBER

First person emphasizes writer

Good for informal letters and writing based on
personal experience
Second person emphasizes reader
Good for giving advice or explaining how to do
something
Third person emphasizes subject
Best for formal academic and professional writing

MAKE THE POV CONSISTENT IN PERSON

& NUMBER
One week, our class met in a junkyard to practice
rescuing a victim trapped in a wrecked car. We learned
to dismantle the car with the essential tools. You were
graded on your speed and your skill in extricating the
victim.
One week, our class met in a junkyard to practice
rescuing a victim trapped in a wrecked car. We learned
to dismantle the car with the essential tools. You were
graded on your speed and your skill in extricating the
victim.

MAKE THE POV CONSISTENT IN PERSON

& NUMBER
One week, our class met in a junkyard to practice
rescuing a victim trapped in a wrecked car. We learned
to dismantle the car with the essential tools. You were
graded on your speed and your skill in extricating the
victim.
One week, the class met in a junkyard to practice
rescuing a victim trapped in a wrecked car. They learned
to dismantle the car with the essential tools. They were
graded on their speed and their skill in extricating the
victim.

MAINTAIN CONSISTENT VERB TENSES

Consistent verb tenses clearly establish time of the actions
being described
Which sentence is incorrect?
A. She caught the ball and then throws it to the catcher for
the out.
B. She caught the ball and then threw it to the catcher for
the out
C. She catches the ball and then throws it to the catcher
for the out.
A. She caught the ball and then throws it to the catcher for
the out.

MAINTAIN CONSISTENT VERB TENSES

When writing about literature or current research, use
present tense
Which sentence is correct?
A. Research showed that the Great Pyramids were built
before wooly mammoths became extinct.
B. Research shows that the Great Pyramids were built
before wooly mammoths became extinct.
B.

MAINTAIN CONSISTENT MOOD & VOICE

Three moods in English
Indicative is used for facts, opinions, questions
Imperative is used for orders or advice
Subjunctive is used to express wishes or conditions contrary to fact
Which sentence is correct?
A. The officers advised us against allowing anyone into our homes without
proper identification. They also suggested that we alert neighbors to our
vacation schedules.
B. The officers advised us against allowing anyone into our homes without
proper identification. Also, alert neighbors to our vacation schedules.
A.

MAINTAIN CONSISTENT MOOD AND VOICE

Which sentence is correct?
A. Mother said that she would be late for dinner and asked
me not to leave for choir practice until Dad came home.
B. Mother said that she would be late for dinner and please
do not leave for choir practice until Dad comes home.
A. Mother said that she would be late for dinner and (she)
asked me not to leave for choir practice until Dad came
home.

MAINTAIN CONSISTENT MOOD AND VOICE

B. Mother said that she would be late for dinner and

please do not leave for choir practice until Dad
comes home.
Mother said that she would be late for dinner uses
the indicative mood/voice.
Please do not leave for choir practice until Dad
gets home uses the subjunctive mood/voice.

AVOID SUDDEN SHIFTS FROM INDIRECT OR DIRECT

QUESTIONS OR STATEMENTS

Indirect question: Alex asked whether the potatoes

were ready and whether he could cut them for the
salad.
Direct question: Are the potatoes ready and can I
cut them for the salad?

AVOID SUDDEN SHIFTS FROM INDIRECT OR DIRECT

QUESTIONS OR STATEMENTS
Which of the following is incorrect?
A. My instructor asked whether I was prepared for the
course and have I bought myself a laptop.
B. My instructor asked whether I was prepared for the
course and whether I had bought myself a laptop
C. My instructor asked, Are you prepared for the course,
and have you bought yourself a laptop?
A. My instructor asked whether I was prepared for the
course and have I bought myself a laptop.

NEWSLETTER REVISING
Underline subjects to look for POV shifts
Circle all verbs to ensure that none of the verbs shift.
Ensure that there arent any shifts from a statement to
a question or vice versa

NEWSLETTER REVISING
2. Turn down the heat when are you more likely to wake up
at night when you are hot or cold? The body prefers to be in
a colder milder climate to sleep. Experts recommend
bedroom temperatures to be 65 70 degrees.
3. Exercise every day This will greatly improve your ability to
sleep at night. However be careful not to exercise too close
to bed time as it can have a negative effect on sleep.

NEWSLETTER REVISION PRACTICE

2. Turn down the heat when are you more likely to wake up at night when
you are hot or cold? The body prefers to be in a colder milder climate to
sleep. Experts recommend bedroom temperatures to be 65 70 degrees.
3. Exercise every day This will greatly improve your ability to sleep at night.
However be careful not to exercise too close to bed time as it can have a
negative effect on sleep.

NEWSLETTER REVISION PRACTICE

2. People should turn down the heat. People are more likely to wake up at night
when they are hot. The body prefers (to be in) a colder milder climate to
sleep. Experts recommend bedroom temperatures to be 65 70 degrees.
3. People should exercise every day. This will greatly improve an individuals
ability to sleep (at night). However one must be careful not to exercise too
closely to bed time as it can have a negative effect on sleep.

ASSIGNMENT
Write a 1 paragraph essay analyzing one element of
Jabberwocky.
7-10 sentences
Topic sentence, primary details, secondary details,
concluding sentence
Write paragraph in 3rd person point of view
Rewrite same paragraph in 1st person point of view
Rewrite same paragraph in 2nd person point of view
Conferences 2/9, Peer reviews 2/11, Final copy 2/16

BODY PARAGRAPH STRUCTURES

Topic sentence
Supporting detail
Quote from text

Explanation of how quote shows topic

Supporting detail
Quote from text
Explanation of how quote shows topic
Concluding sentence

FOR TUESDAY
Conference your rough draft with me

FOR THURSDAY
Peer review Lit Analysis paragraph rough drafts