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Text Structures

AND/OR
Language Features
This is a compound
sentence as it contains
two or more verbs.
Sat and Hung See
other side for
evaluation.

THE FAADE BEHIND THE EGO

He sat in silence as a musty aura hung


suspended in the shadows, sending chills
slithering down Jonnos undernourished spine.

A squalid light seeped through the aperture


This complex sentence
suggests that Jonno is
extremely depressed
and agitated. reader
This text also includes
dependent clauses
peering on his selfharmed wrist, smirking
down silently, amused
that Jonno was lying
there in disarray Thus
the dependant causes
illustrate that in this
case that Jonno is
apprehensive, to
anything in his
environment.

and onto the floorboards, casting an eerie


glow on his weary body which laid curled up
under a meagre blanket, dwindling Jonnos
senses and encouraging his pessimistic
thoughts to run wild.

Imagery has been


created through
adjectives and
personification in a
musty aura hung
suspended in the
shadows, sending chills
slithering down and
Jonnos undernourished
spine and casting an
eerie glow on his weary
body which laid curled
up under a meagre
blanket.
This imagery suggests
Jonno is pitiable and
melancholic.

Beside him, on his grubby bedside table, a


clock sat in pleasure, peering on his selfharmed wrist, smirking down silently, amused
that Jonno was lying there in disarray.
In anguish, Jonno imperatively knocked his
head wilfully against the languished
bedframe as he filched a joint from his
pocket, his hands madly shaking as he set

This is a complex
sentence as It uses a
Variety of fugitive
language and imagery.
(see other side for
evaluation and what
effect it has on the
reader)
Independent:
Billowing far beyond in
the distance, eerie
faces hung,
Dependent:
though Jonno gazed on
them with no care.

Language Features
AND/OR
Text Structures

the fag alight. Abrupt as it happened, the


hard-curl bitter taste of the poisonous fumes
enveloped his fragile mind.
Far away from his pathetic hovel, Jonno stood
up, upon a high ridge, its edges notched and
jagged with sinister fangs. Billowing far
beyond in the distance, eerie faces hung,
though Jonno gazed on them with no care.

The clock has been


personified, peering in
pleasure. This
exemplifies Jonnos pain
and emphasizes that
hes lying there in
disarray.
These two small
paragraphs have
complex sentences as it
depicts that Jonno is
Getting rid of his
sorrows this is
illustrated with the a
vary of dependant and
independent clauses.
The paragraph also
depicts a use of slang
filched a joint Thus,
this sets a troubling
mood on the audience.
This is supported
through the figurative
language as it is backed
up by adjective words this is used all

Over the ridge, tendrils of swirling smoke


danced towards Jonno across the lake as he
exhaled his sorrows away.

This is a complex
sentence as it uses a
Variety of
personification,
fugitive language and
imagery. Plus, it has a
independent is
dependant clause
which make it a
complex sentence.
(see other side for
evaluation and what
effect it has on the
reader)

Through the mist, Jonno noticed an


intimidating figure gawking at him beyond.
With his gaze vulnerable to the inadvertent
impression of death, the figure suddenly
fluttered towards him, its ghastly hands
muffling Jonnos shrivelled mouth. He was
pushed against a jagged fang as the figures
long decaying nails were thrust down his
throat, causing him to convulse in agony.

This is a simple
sentence though has a
great effect on the
reader. This is because
of its language
features. (See
evaluation on other
side)

Those who rebel must face the


consequences, the creature hissed, its fetid
This is a compound
sentence - as it has
two verbs (see other
side for evaluation)

This is a simple
sentence though it

throughout the two


paragraphs.
Consequently, It sets a
chilling mood towards
the reader and
expresses that Jonno is
in a impulsive mood.
Which encourages the
reader to use their
imagination Therefore,
imagery is also an
aspect used in this two
paragraphs.
Example of imagery:
Jonno imperatively
knocked his head
wilfully against the
languished bedframe
and Jonno now stood
upon a high ridge, its
edges notched and
jagged with sinister
fangs.

breath sending Jonno into complete darkness.

Personification has been


created to give the
audience a grasp on
what Jonno is
experiencing this is also
used through the
language feature,
Fugitive language. With
his gaze vulnerable to
the inadvertent
impression of death
Thus, it proclaims to the
reader that Jonno is
scared and has his aim
on the figure as he
doesnt take his eye off
it for one second.
Imagery is also created
Through the Mist
Thus, this tells the
reader that what the
environment is like and
what Jonno is
experiencing.
The language features
used in this sentence
depict a use of dialog.
Thus, this dialog is used
throughout the narrative
to set a mood on the

emphasizes that Jonno


is relieved. Thus
through its verbs and
figurative language it
proclaims to the
reader what Jonno is
going through and
explains the
environment to the
reader individually.
He gazed around his
hovel

Drenched in sweat, Jonno abruptly woke from


his nightmare, sliding his famished chicken
backbone against the wall. Wedged between
two rusted bars, Jonno began to scream, his
voice echoing around the scrummy room.

Relieved that it was only the pot talking, he


gazed around his hovel.
This is a complex
sentence as it has an
independent and
dependant clause (see
evaluation on other
side)

With his morbid thoughts rushing through his

audience as it intrigues
them to read more while
there sitting there
imagining on what is
taking place.
Consequently, it once
again uses imagery.
The creature hissed,
its feted breath
Drenched in sweat
Once the reader
interprets this they are
fixed with someone
drenched in sweat
thus, imagery is used
once again. Figurative
language is also backed
up by it and is used all
throughout this
paragraph as it
emphasizes on what
Jonno is experiencing as
it sets a mood of the
paragraph That Jonnno
is fuelled with
misperception and is
troubled.

Once again, Imagery is


used through the and
adjectives. he gazed
around his hovel

head, Jonno laid down, wearily laying his


head against the obscure floor. Little flecks of
This is a simple
paragraph though it
has a significant effect
on the readers mind
as it explores
language features
such as figurative
language and imagery
(see evaluation on
other side)

car light filtered through his aperture as he


struggled to pardon his obscure dreams.

He knew that his past would continue to


haunt him, though he questioned why the

Imagery has once again


been created through
adjectives and
personification and is
also backed up with
figurative language all
throughout the
paragraph.
Example of
Personification and
Imagery - With his
morbid thoughts rushing

atmosphere of neglect and abandonment was


This is once again a
complex sentence as it
has a independent and
dependant variable. It
also used figurative
language and imagery.
(see evaluation on
other side)

so tangible.

through his head Thus,


this sets a image in the
readers head. As they
can come to a
conclusion that Jonno is
despicable to the
environment and his
thoughts.

He exhaled, closing his bloodshot eyes,


knowing that the evidence of his night would
still be evident the next day at school and
yet too exhausted to care, Jonno slumbered
over, dozing off to the sound of the rats
infesting his joints.
Written by Chris Vassilakos

This Paragraph suggests


the Jonno is in
misperception and is yet
he is a bit melancholic
on what he has done,
though is trying to hide
it. Thus, with this
figurative language it
proclaims to the reader
on what Jonno is
experiencing as it sets
an image in there mind.

Imagery is once again


created through
adjectives
personification,
figurative language.
Closing his blood shot
eyes Consequently, this
sets an image in the
readers mind on what
Jonno is feeling
Generally depraved (or
crap)
Thus, it uses imagery as
well.