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the dialogue, the comma goes after the attribution, and the
appropriate punctuation mark goes inside the quotation mark at the
end of the dialogue:
Mom said, Sam came by to see you.
When punctuating dialogue with commas and adding an attribution
after the dialogue, the comma goes inside the quotation mark:
She came home with me, Will said.
When youre punctuating dialogue with commas and adding a
pronoun attribution, the comma goes inside the quotation mark,
and the pronoun is not capitalized:
I hate you, she said.
With dialogue that trails away, as though the speaker has gotten
distracted, use an ellipsis inside the quotation mark:
I just dont know Jenny said.
When dialogue is abruptly interrupted or cut off, use an em-dash
inside the quotation mark:
Well, I dont think
Because you never think!
For a non-dialogue beat to break up a line of dialogue, use either
commas or em-dashes:
And then I realized, Jane said with a sigh, that
he lied to me.
Without the antidoteMatt shook his headI
dont think we can save him.
When the speaker has started to say one thing, and changed his or
page, and if you use one or the other, or both, you run the risk of
reminding the reader that theyre reading a story. Try not to do
anything that breaks that fourth wall and calls attention to the
mechanics of the story itself.
Look for the discussion about the great debate between said
and other attributions in Part II of this post.
Don't get too colorful with the dialogue tags. "Hello," she shouted;
"Hi there," he cried; "How are you?" she queried," "Fine thanks,"
he shrilled"... too much of this stuff gets distracting fast. Put your
thesaurus away. The basic dialogue verbs "say," "tell," and "ask,"
have the advantage of fading in the background, letting the reader
focus on what your character is saying.
Chapter 1
Wake up! I heard a voice calling me in my sleep. When I opened my eyes,
I saw a black-haired little boy about my age, looking at me curiously with
bright excited eyes.
Where am I? Are we in Australia?
Chapter 2
Part 1
Overwhelmed by the excitement of building a big fire, we
scattered into the forest in a race to get the most firewood.
Grabbing a handful of firewood, I ran back to the burning pile
Chapter 3
The littluns surrounded Simon in a circle, and asked, What
is the beastie, Simon?
Simon squat down, making himself the same height as the
Chapter 4
George was one of the best hunters on the island. He was a
handsome, fair-haired boy with an muscular build. He was
the only hunter who caught ten pigs, breaking Henrys
record of eight.
to go home, and you blew it! You and your stupid hunters!
What if no ship ever comes by again? We will be stuck on
this little island for the rest of our lives!
Dont speak to me like that! Do you know who I am, kid?
Jack burst out in anger. Upset and enraged about what
happened, Jack made eye contact with the kid and stared
him down until everyone went to sleep but the two of them.
Later that night, Jack and the kid continued arguing and
Jack could no longer hold back his anger when the littlun
called him a coward. Before the littlun could finish
talking, Jack picked up his spear and impaled the poor
littlun right through the chest. Woken up by the boys highpitched shriek, Ralph opened his eyes and saw the face of
the poor boy right in front of him, blood-stained and
contorted in fear.
Ahhhhh! Hes dead! Hes dead! Oh lordy, hes dead!
Ralph screamed in horror. Ralph immediately thought
about asking Jack what happened. Jack suddenly leapt
toward Ralph. Ralph feels like he s being wrapped in
something, then everything went black.
Chapter 6
Ralph, Piggy, and the littluns were surprised by the
demonic figures with painted faces that appeared out of
nowhere. Jack, who was now half naked and had his body
painted with pigs blood, came forward and began to shout.
Chapter 7
As the sky grew dark, Roger began to stomp a simple beat
with his feet. Thump, thump, thump, thump. Then the twins
started to stomp out the rhythm, then a few more followed
their lead. Soon everybody was stomping furiously.
Thump,thump,thump,thump.
Limbs waved and danced passionately to the maddening
rhythm. The thump grew faster and faster, the whole group
had merged into a single heart-beat, a single organism.
Roger tied Ralph to the cross, and began to chant, O
mighty beast! We throw you this feast!
The group responded, Kill the pig, cut his throat, bash him
in! Everybody charged at the boy. The kids formed a sea
of hands, all trying to tear and grab a piece of the boys
maddening, seductive meat.
There was no time for the boy to even scream. Soon, the
boy who was once chief had became nothing more than a
disfigured pile of bones, held together by strands and pieces
of flesh.