People naturally resist making changes in their lives.

What kinds of problems can this cause? What solution can you suggest?
Some people are able to deal with changes easier than others. The inability to
adapt in new circumstances may lead to several problems. However, there are
some solutions that can be taken to resolve these issues.
There are some consequences of resistance to change on organizations and
individuals. +Firstly, refusing to adapt new ideas and techniques can make
businesses fall far behind their competitors. Modern technologies are likely to
help the business to reduce the costs and increase the quality of products.
+Those who stay with traditional techniques may not be able to provide cheaper
prices, therefore, they become less competitive in the market. Secondly, some
individuals put up resistance to the change, which might lead to a reduced level
of efficiency and productivity. For example, if employees are unwilling to change
the position that they have mastered to new one, they become less focused on
doing their daily tasks.
Feasible solutions can be produced to tackle these problems so that people
would be willing to make the modification. The first one can be assessed by
providing enough information about the benefits of the change. Because lack of
information can make the business hesitate to adapt the new technologies,
reading the publication on websites or inquiring an advice from technology
specialists can keep the company to update with the new trends. The second
measure to encourage people to make change is training. When change
requires mastering new skills, resistances can be prevented through offering
training programmers such as seminar. Employees, therefore, can be educated
to able to get familiar with the new tasks.
In conclusion, resistances to change can have some negative effects on not only
businesses but also individuals. However, these issues can be resolve by taking
the above suggestions.

Feedback:

+ The first reason is that or one of the first reasons is that

+However
See the RED. In the first reason, the logical flow has lost when the BLUE starts.
To get a good flow or coherence, you must stick with the idea. For example:
The first reason is that refusing to adapt new ideas and techniques can make
businesses unable to maintain the current standards. As a result, they fail to
attract customers who love hi-tech/quality products.
There is no way that you can say 'reduce the cost'.If so, you need to explain
that. By the way, the question is about PEOPLE, not organisation. Distortion of
the question, and therefore severe penalties on Task response.
The GREEN one does not add anything to the argument. The question does not
need any contrast so this is redundant ,and you will lose the flow ( coherencelogical flow). Basically you lost the FLOW wherever you see the BLUE and
GREEN. The first reason does not progress really -- only half way of the 2nd
sentence.
Fall behind their competitors : The reason why this part is unsuitable there is, it
is a wide stretch. You should write this part at the end--eg; as a result' after
explaining HOW it leads to fail the company or business.
+The second factor can be

put up resistance: some people are unwilling to change. There is no such

expression -->( put up resistance) . This is a faulty collocation/ vocabulary.
To new one: IN to A new one ( grammar errors)

They become less focused? How? And how am I going to be less efficient and productive ? There
is no logical explanation there.

There is progression with the 2nd reason.

Can write: By sticking with the old methods, people can meet only a below average level. For
example, many farmers (in _______) still use outdated methods, and therefore their yields are too
low.

seminars

You blamed on two things: 1, outdated technology-- fail 2, less productivity- fail
Your suggestions: 1, awareness or advice 2, education

The question says ' people naturally resist'. If so, how can they be educated?
How can they be trained? They would not even turn up even if they are invited to
attend seminars. This is such a weak argument. You need to write about how to
remove the resistance first and then they will be willing to listen.
Possible suggestions:
1, Demonstration of the new practices and prove. Help them to examine and
test. Challenge them.Explain with a relevant background or instance.
2, Mix them with new employees who have updated practice level and show
them the productivity difference. Explain with a relevant background or instance

Resolved

Suggestions such as?You must write the summary specifically. This is not a sign
post to say ' it is up there'. It is OK to write this in the intro but 'summary = sum
up' or abstract.
This question is not about jobs or companies, but it can be anything general. We
can talk about simple stuff such as bias, unhygienic practice, music, sports or
etc .. from our general life, so it is easy to write suggestions. In this case, due to
a lack of subject-knowledge, the response failed to communicate logically with
the examiner.
Grammar: 8
Vocabulary:8
Task: 5
Coherence:6
Overall: 6.5