Informal Essay Self and Peer Revision

Name of writer: __________

Name of peer editor: __________________
1) Complete the chart below by following the directions in the
proof column and identifying the examples in your work. Be honest
and thorough. Ask questions along way to ensure you have met all
Success Criteria.
2) Have a peer read your work and give you feedback on
what was done well, and how you could improve the quality of your
work.
Success Criteria:

My essay is written in
first person narrative, and
the point of view is
consistent throughout the
writing.

Proof
I have used pronouns in my writing such as I, We etc.

Highlight 2 examples in blue

Comments from peer:

I can clearly select the beginning, middle and end paragraphs.

Label the beginning paragraphs, middle paragraphs and
end paragraphs.
I have organized my
essay into a beginning,
middle and end.

My essay reveals
something in the
introduction that catches
the readers attention.
I have made my
message (thesis) clear in
the beginning of my
essay.
My message is

Comments from peer:

I have thought about and included a clever hook.

Using yellow, highlight the catchy hook in the introduction.
Comments from peer:

One sentence in the introduction states the message either directly or

indirectly.
Copy the message here:

meaningful and makes

my reader think.

Comments from peer:

I have incorporated 3+ literary devices to add interest within my writing.

Highlight the rhetorical devices in grey.
Copy three device examples here and explain their purpose:

1)

Purpose:
I have enhanced my
writing by using literary
devices.

2)

Purpose:

3)

Purpose:
Comments from peer:

I have tried to express my ideas clearly by referring to specific details

and facts.
When explaining my
personal experience, I
have used many specific
details and facts about
the 5Ws (who, what,
when, where and why).

When writing, I have

used descriptive
language to describe the
5 senses.

In the essay, use the colour red and highlight 5 specific

details that are given to enhance clarity.

Comments from peer:

I have made an effort to use many descriptive adjectives and concrete

nouns.

Find 5 descriptive adjectives and list them below:

___________________

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Comments from peer:

Highlight:

The focus of my essay is

on my personal
experience.

Definitely
Somewhat
Not really

Comments from peer:

Highlight in green any words that need to be doublechecked for spelling.

I have used a dictionary
to check the spelling in
my essay, and made an
effort to use a variety of
words.

Highlight words in purple that could be substituted for a

better word.
Comments from peer:

Peer:
What did you like about this essay?
1)

2)

3)

Peer:

What could be improved with this essay? List three specific things.
1)

2)

3)