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Your class has attended a panel discussion on ways young people can be
encouraged to keep fit in. You have made the notes below:
Ways young people can be encouraged to keep fit: School programmes,
sports clubs, technology.
Some opinions expressed in the panel discussion: Schools should be
responsible for kids fitness; Maybe kids would do sport if they could
choose one they liked; Young people would be more motivated if a
computer was involved somehow.
Write an essay for you tutor discussing two of the ways in your notes. You
should explain which way you think is more important for schools to
consider, giving reasons in support of your answer. You may, if you wish,
make use of the opinions expressed in the discussion, buty you should use
your own words as far as possible.
285 words.
Content: 3/5 You answer the main question but you don't say which
is the better option and why...
Communication: 2/5
Organisation: 3/5 good use of linkers & cohesive devices. Sentence
stucture needs improving!
Language: 2/5 gerunds & infinitives!!! A wider variety of tenses is
needed, but vocab is good :-)