Pearson Edexcel Certificate/

International GCSE English Language

KEA0 01/4EA0 01
The purpose of this pack is to provide centres with marked
exemplars of responses to the June 2015 examination.
Included in this pack:
Questions from June 2015 paper
Marked responses
Examiner commentary

SECTIONA:READING......................................................................................................................3
QUESTION3....................................................................................................................................6
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QUESTION4..................................................................................................................................11
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SECTIONB:READINGANDWRITING.................................................................................................27
QUESTION5..................................................................................................................................30
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QUESTION6..................................................................................................................................44
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SECTIONC:WRITING.....................................................................................................................56
QUESTION7..................................................................................................................................57
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SECTION A: READING

QUESTION 3
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S11mark3
Aresponsethatbeginswithoutscoringmarksbutthenshowsitcancommentandsupporton
Larwoodstougheningexperiencesasaminerandhisplaceinthefamilyofminers.Otherpoints
arelesswellexplained.

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S12mark4
Theopeningpointaboutpainisvalidandfurtherexplained,asarethecommentsaboutthe
surroundings,qualityoflifeandsenseofpride.

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S13mark5
Receivesfullmarksbecauseoftherangeofpointsmadeandthequalityofexplanation.Thisanswer
makestwoseparatepointsabouthiscoalminingexperience:thatitshowedhowtheminersheld
himinhighregardandhowitshowedhispersonaldetermination.Thisisindicativeofaperceptive
responsetothequestion.

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S14mark2
Abriefresponsethatcontainslittleexplanationordevelopmentbutdoesmakepointsaboutrespect
andtheharshconditionsofthemine.

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Apassingreferencetotheminesbeingcoldandsooty.ThefinalpointabouthowLarwoodis
regardedisbetterandcontainssomeelementofexplanation.

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QUESTION 4
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S16mark7
Showsasoundengagementwiththetextthroughanumberofpointsthatarewellsupported;other
commentssuchasthoseabouthisappearanceinthesecondparagraphlackweightandarelargely
simple.Isawareofthecontrastinreactionsbetweenthemenandtheboyswhichshowssound
understanding,butwhichshowswhythisanswerdoesnotscorehigherasitmakesverylittleofthis
point.Thesamecanbeseenwiththecommentonthewordroyal.Inabestfitapproachthe
rangeandqualityofinsightscompensatesfortheweakerresponsetolanguageandtechniqueon
thefinalpage.

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S17mark12
Averystrongresponsethatscoresfullmarksandshowsaperceptiveappreciationofthewriters
presentationofLarwood.Thereisagoodrangeofcommentsontechniqueandaneasein
supportingwithcrispandaptlychosenquotations.Thisanswerrecognisesandcommentsuponthe
toneofreverenceandcommentsonthedeificationofLarwood,whichisaverystrongsection.Itis
alsostronguponhisdualstatusascommonmanandlegendandisperceptiveandwellsupported
throughoutandmeetsallofthecriteriaforlevel4.

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S18mark11
Alsoalevel4responsethatisquitedifferenttoS17inhowitachievesitshighmark.Weseeastrong
openingparagraphanditsreferencestostarstruckandMartinLutherKingshowanable
candidateinterpretationandmakingrealsenseofthetext.Thesectionabouttheboysshowsan
awarenessoftoneandisabletoexplainandsupportthisinsight.Theanswerinterspersescomments
upontechniqueandsupportswell.
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S19mark8
Theopeningparagraphsomewhatlackinginclaritybutafterthatthewritershowsasound
understandingwithsomesectionsbeingstrong,suchasthecommentsabouthowheisregardedin

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paragraph2.Somequotationsarelongandlackfocusedselection.Thequalityofthisanswer
improvesasitreachestheendwithsomegoodpointsmadeabouttechniqueinthefinalparagraph.

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S20mark6
Alevel2responsebasedupontheunderstandingitshowsbalancedagainstaweakresponsewith
regardstotechnique.CommentsaboutthewritersadmirationandthepresentationofLarwoodas
strongandproudfigurearetwoofthestrongestfeaturesofthisanswer.

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SECTION B: READING AND WRITING

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QUESTION 5
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S21mark5
Anunusualresponsethatbeginsbytryingtomakecommentsthatapplyequallytobothclimbers
butwithonlylimitedsuccess.Therearesomevalidcommentshowevermanyofthemarequite
generalinnature.Page2isdevotedtoJoeandthereisalmostnothingonSimon.Isabletomake
somecommentsontechniqueandoffersupportaboutJoe.
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S22mark9
Aperceptiveresponsewhichisstrongonthecontrastbetweenthetwoclimbersandwhichprovides
agoodlevelofsupportthroughout.Awiderangeoftechniquesisidentifiedwithsomesubtlepoints,
suchastheinterpretationofthewordraggedinthefinalparagraph.

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S23mark2
Alevel1answerthatlacksdetailofanykindanddoesnotdelineatebetweenthetwoclimbers.The
natureofthegeneralitiescanbeseeninthefinalparagraphwherethecommentsmadeabout
imagerycouldapplytoanytextandthereisnomentionofJoeorSimon.

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S24mark4
Generallysoundasitestablishesthekeydifferencesbetweenthetwoclimbers.Thereissome
commentontechniquewithrhetoricalquestionsandverbchoicesbeingidentified.Thereissome
misunderstandingattimes,suchasthatSimonfeelsupsetforhisfriend.Mostlyclearbutlimited
rangeofcommentskeepthisatthebottomoflevel2.

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S25mark10
Averystrongresponsethatscoresfullmarks.Itisgenuinelyperceptive,verystrongupontechnique
anduponsupport.Demonstratesanabilitytoseemultipleinterpretationsonmorethanone
occasion.Abletosustainahighqualityofresponsethroughouttheanswer.

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QUESTION 6

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S26mark10
Ananswerthatscoresfullmarksbecauseofitsabilitytocommunicateimpressiveaccuracyand
controlthroughout.Theopeningsentencewhichchallengesthereaderthroughthewellconstructed
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narrativetotheshiftintosecondpersoninthefinalparagraphallexhibitacontrolthatisimpressive
withouteverbeingostentatiousoraffected.Goodvarietyofsentencesandcontrolofpunctuation
throughoutandtheeasycreationofpathos,characterandsuspense.Achievesinexcessofwhatis
neededtoreachamarkof10.

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S27mark10
AlthoughnotassustainedasS26,thisanswerdoeseverythingneededtoreachfullmarks.The
impressiveopeningparagraphengagesthereaderandshowscontrolofsentencevariety,simileand
repetitionalldeliberatelycraftedforeffect.Theparagraphstructurecreatestensionandmovesthe
dramaforwardandthemovetofuturetensesignalsafittingconclusiontothedrama.
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S28mark2

Alevel1answerthatcommunicatesatabasiclevelbecauseofitslackofcontrolofexpressionand
lackofaccuracy.Verbcontrolandtensesarenotsecureandthedramaisnotalwayseasytofollow.
However,itdoestellawholetalewithabeginning,middleandendandcreatesasenseoffeelingin
theincidentdescribedallofwhichplaceitinthemiddleratherthanthebottomoflevel1.

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S29mark6
Anengagingopeningthatisnotsustained.Generallyclearcommunicationwithsomesuccessfuluse
ofavarietyofdevicesplacesthisinlevel2.Someelementsofthenarrativearenotclearandsome
elementsareweaksuchasthesentence,Ithurt,badlytodescribethehorrificinjuriessustained.

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S30mark4
Aresponsethatcommunicatesclearlyisparagraphedaccuratelyandmakesuseofdialoguewhichis
generallyaccurate.Theopeningparagraphwithitsobsessionwithtimesafteranexcitingfirst
sentenceillustrateshowthisanswerlosesitsconnectionwiththereader.Therearehomophonic
errorsandanidiolectslipintothepresenttense.Abestfitapproachseesthisinlevel2.

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SECTION C: WRITING

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QUESTION 7

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S31mark17
ALevel5responsethatshowsanassuredcontrolofpunctuation,sentencesandvocabulary.Itshifts
easilyfromanabstractopeningintoawellrecountedanecdote.ThesectionsaboutMariaillustrate
theexcellentcontrolofexpressionthatisafeatureofthisanswer.Thefinalparagraphmaynotlive
uptotheearlierpromise,andthismaybeweakerthanS33,howeverithasenoughqualitytoplace
itinlevel5.

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S32mark10
Aresponsethatscoreshalfthetotalnumberofmarksandisinlevel3becauseitisaccurate,
paragraphedandhassomeclearelementsofcontrolofpersonandtense.However,itappears
unfinishedandthereforelacksanoverallstructure.

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S33mark33
Anabsolutelyoutstandinganswerthathasrange,control,genuinesophisticationandawideranging
vocabularythatincludesafluencyinFrenchexpressionsaswell.Whatthisanswerachievesinexam
conditionsandinthetimeavailableistrulyimpressive.Readingtheopeningandthefinalparagraphs
illustratesthesubtlecontroloftextualcohesionthatissowellcontrolled.Thisanswerisanexample
ofwritingatitsverybestanditmustbestressedthatitispossibletogetveryhighmarks,suchasin
S31withoutbeingasgoodasthis.

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S34mark7
Alevel2answerthatshowssomeearlycontrolbutisnotabletosustainit,endingthefirst
paragraphwithconfusingambiguityandalackofclarity.Thereissomestructureandsomeuseof
rhetoricalquestionsbutthepieceisincompleteanddoesnotsustaininterest.

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S35mark18
Adeceptivelystrongresponsethatachievesalevel5mark.Communicationissubtleandsharply
focused,accurateandvariedthroughout.Thetextualcohesioncanbeseeninthereturntothefirst
paragraphsfocusuponoldfashionedrespecthavingarelevanceinourmodernworld.Thisanswer
isalsoabletocreatesomehumourthroughtheparentheticalinsertioninthefinalparagraph.

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