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3rd para.,
page 5
No.
1.
2.
3.
Hucky peered
through door
1st para.,
page 8
4.
2nd para.,
page 11
2nd para.,
page 14
2nd para.,
page 14
9.
an open shirt/ein
offenes Hemd
4th para.,
page 16
10.
it matted to
dreadlocks/und
sie verfilzten zu
Dreadlocks
Especially since he
owed her 250
marks.
3rd para.,
page 17
5.
6.
7.
8.
11.
4th para.,
page 11
1st para.,
page 15
3rd para.,
page 18
Explanation
Suggested Edit
always gawked
out her window
Hucky peered
through the
door
They talked
about the fuses
that constantly
Lilli stood up and
vanished
Falk looked at
the spaz
Maybe you'll just
stop by a couple
of times for
breakfast
Hucky stood in
the kitchen
doing the dishes,
an open-neck
shirt OR an
open-necked
shirt.
it became
matted into
dreadlocks
mainly because
he owed her 250
marks
English
Location
No.
12.
He had come to
get the piano and
had brought
carrying straps
1st para.,
page 20
13.
Need to stop by at
welfare
2nd para.,
page 20
14.
and mathematics
15.
7th para.,
page 22
5th para.,
page 24
16.
It started to
drizzle, and they
tried to hoist
7th para.,
page 24
17.
vegetables, fruit,
eggs, bread and
knick-knack
Hucky looked out
of the window
Hucky still stood
at his window
1st para.,
page 31
20.
a stand with
sanding machines
1st para.,
page 51
21.
A salesman
3rd para.,
18.
19.
2nd para.,
page 31
1st para.,
page 35
Explanation
the latter.
to get is incorrect here
because he had come to
get help to bring it, not
to take it anywhere.
Actually the original uses
the prep. wegen. To not
combine two instances of
to bring, a periphrasis
would help.
welfare should add
Admin or Services for
clarification, or at least be
capitalized to match the
brevity of Sozi.
mathematics is known in
the U.S. simply as math
the text is a literal
translation
Suggested Edit
He had come to
get help to bring
the piano with
the aid of
carrying straps
OR similar
Need to stop by
at Welfare
and math
she had
forgotten the
lyrics
It started to
drizzle as they
tried to hoist
No.
22.
23.
walked through
English
Location
page 51
1st para.,
page 69
7th para.,
page 70
Explanation
referred to as associate
25.
26.
1st para.,
page 77
1st para.,
page 82
My God is usually
interjected Oh, my God
and waited is better
conveyed by a progressive
form.
the hold is more for
ships. Cargo bay ot
cargo area will do.
into custody, some of
them requires a period for
the pause.
Not a series. Second
comma may go.
28.
the compartment
wall and panted
4th para.,
page 83
29.
gentle as a lamb
and caressed
He sat the water
canister down in
Hucky sat down in
the rocking chair
and rocked back
and forth which
had a calming
effect on him
A baking tin with
apple
1st para.,
page 85
4th para.,
page 89
4th para.,
page 91
and caressed is in
progress.
The verb to put is more
natural.
Paragraph reads very
repetitious. Some
rearrangement could help.
5th para.,
page 91
33.
It would be a riot,
to find them
5th para.,
page 95
34.
then came a
photo on
1st para.,
page 113
35.
Diagonally behind
Falk sat Plum
1st para.,
page 116
24.
27.
30.
31.
32.
Suggested Edit
Oh, my God
she stood five
feet away while
waiting OR
others on crates
in the cargo area
had been taken
into custody.
Some of them
Suddenly, sirens
and flashing
lights
the
compartment
wall, panting
gentle as a lamb
as she caressed
He put the water
canister in
Hucky sat down
in the rocking
chair. This
motion had a
soothing effect
on him
A baking sheet
with apple
It would be
kickass fun to
find them
then came a
picture on
at an angle
behind Falk sat
English
Location
No.
36.
1st para.,
page 117
37.
1st para.,
page 119
3rd para.,
page 122
1st para.,
page 129
40.
Cause it sucks
41.
reading a
newspaper,
beside him
the store and
looked annoyed
Youre crazy
7th para.,
page 136
1st para.,
page 146
38.
39.
42.
43.
3rd para.,
page 151
4th para.
Page 155
44.
3rd para.,
page 156
45.
their emergency
bell which could
gnawing on a
drum bone
1st para.,
page 161
5th para.,
page 165
47.
3rd para.,
page 166
48.
Hick
2nd para.,
46.
Explanation
idiomatic.
crystal clear is one
concept that needs
hyphenation
shop should be store
for consistency
alright is wrong spelling
A period is required for the
pause with some
rephrasing also
Cause might use an
apostrophe
newspaper, beside him
requires a period for the
pause in between
and looked annoyed is a
progressive form.
Adjective crazy is
overused. Some synonyms
replace it here and there.
After a negation comes
either
bell which requires a
comma
Because we all know a
duck was served, wouldnt
roast leg or drumstick
be better than drum
bone?
closed, otherwise
requires a period for the
pause
The onomatopoeia for
hiccup is not hick which
is a rustic peasant, a
country bumpkin
Suggested Edit
Plum
crystal-clear
from the secondhand store
then she would
look all right
Hucky stopped
playing. So did
Kugelblitz and
Plum
'Cause
reading a
newspaper.
Beside him
the store,
looking annoyed
Youre nuts
He had never
eaten truffles,
either
their emergency
bell, which could
gnawing on a
crispy leg OR
gnawing on a
duck leg
and eyes closed.
Otherwise
Hic