Name: _____________________

Date: _____________________

__________nightmare bus_
(Title)

There was a boy and he never wanted to go to school like me and he was scared to go on a
bus because he thought that the bus drivers were big scary monsters and he thought he
would get eaten by the bus drivers. And he thought the buses were monsters to so when
ever he saw a bus he would run away from it and he would jump flat on the ground and
hope the bus driver wouldn't see him and then when he went to school he saw his teacher
he kept on hiding from the teacher because he thought the teacher was going to eat him
but then soon in school he started to like his teacher and he met his bus driver and he
found out that the bus driver wasnt a monster and that the school bus couldn't even talk
and it wouldn't eat him so then the boy loved school but he started to do big fits and
freak out cause he hates school now just because it's too much work anthen he ran away
one day and 5 years later the cops found him and put him in jail because he missed 5
years of school.

Rubric rating submitted on: 11/21/2016, 1:01:42 PM by mark.kinzel@wrsd.ca

4

Content
Your score: 2

Details of the story

are established,
specific and
consistent. The
story flows and
makes sense.
Supporting details
are consistent and
help to develop
story. Writing holds
the reader's
attention

Details of story are

clear and make
sense. The story is
generally
straightforward from
beginning to end.
Writing generally
holds the readers
interest.

The story is
predictable. Some
details may be
irrelevant or
unnecessary. Tends
to follow familiar
patterns or ideas.
May keep the
reader's attention.

There are few

details or
descriptions. Does
not flow from
beginning to end,
illogical sequence.
Does not get
reader's attention

Origination
Your score: 2

The story has a

beginning, middle
and end. There is a
connection between
events, setting, and
characters.
Characters are well
described and
developed. There is
a well described
setting. There is a
clear and well
defined story
problem or plot that
flows logically. The
story problem or
plot is connected to
the character.
Events, actions,
details, and/or
characters are
consistently
maintained. The
ending resolves the
problem and
satisfies the reader.

The story follows a

logical sequence
with a beginning,
middle and end.
There is a
connection between
events, setting, and
characters. Story
beginning
establishes
characters and
setting. There is a
clear and well
defined story
problem or plot. The
story problem or
plot is connected to
the character. Story
has a logical ending
that resolves the
story problem.

The story has a

beginning, middle
and end but can be
difficult to follow.
There is some
connection between
events, setting, and
characters. Story
beginning briefly
describes
characters and
setting. There is a
story problemthat is
connected to the
characterbuthas an
abrupt ending.

The story has no

clear beginning,
middle and end.
There are some
actions or events
but are illogical or
hard to follow. Lacks
connection between
events, setting, and
characters. Does
not describe
characters or
setting, may just
give character
names. There is a
story
problembutthere is
no character
development. Story
ending does not
makes sense or is
missing.

Sentence Structure
Your score: 1

Sentences are well

formed and flow
smoothly and vary

Sentences include
one complete
thought. They begin

Simple sentences,
which do not include
descriptive

Basic and poorly

constructed
sentences, that

Vocabulary
Your score: 2

Comments:

in length. They
begin differently
with the correct use
of capitals and have
appropriate end
marks

with capitals and

use appropriate end
marks. They are
logical, and make
sense.

language. They
generally begin with
capitals and use
appropriate end
marks

often don't make

sense and are
repetitive in
construction.

Words are wellchosen. Phrases

are purposeful.
Avoids overusing
words. Words and
phrases are used to
create imagery
(mind images)

General words are

chosen and used
correctly. Words and
phrases help
explain and
describe.

General words are

chosen and are
used incorrectly at
times. Words and
phrases are simple
and/or do not
describe well.

Words chosen are

often wrong and/or
misused. Phrases
are misused or
missing