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As the soldiers walked by you could hear their stomping feet on the gravel road, I
didnt know why they were here but my grandpa is a soldier, and he is a mechanic so he
fixes stuff for them, but I did not see him walking by. Maybe he was already here.
When I went out for a walk I seen all of the soldiers that I had seen before, and they
were all on either side of the road, so I backed away and all of a sudden I heard gunshots
everywhere I was so scared. When it was all over I went back over there and I saw every
one of the soldiers kneeling down infront of another soldier and he was everyone's friend
he was the nicest of them all, and he was gone. His name was Sergeant Jim, it was sad.
A few days later it turned fall and all the soldiers had gone home,all of the leaves started
to fall off and I thought the soldiers had gone home but they didn't and that was when I
got to meet one of their war dogs he really loved me, he was a german shepherd and his
owner died in war. Maxs owner was Sergeant Jim so they took him to the pound. Me my
mom and dad went to the pound and I got to keep him, he had his muzzle on so he would
not bite. When I got home I went to my room and I got to know Max and so did he he
was so protective. He was also fast, strong, and he was good at a lot of things, and after
all of that army coming to our town we decided to move. our town was called forest gums
but it was all broken down so that is why we are moving, we decided to move to florida.
And I knew we would be even more happy there.
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Content
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The story is
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Origination
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