Student Name: Andrea Martinez

Total Points: 19.5

1. Topic: Focuses on immigration and the 2016 presidential campaign 3/3
2. Title: The title is both creative and informative. .5/1
3. Thesis: Makes a clear, specific, and debatable argument. Thesis
contains a simple argument, a counterargument, and the supporting
reasons. 4/5
4. Sources: Two scholarly sources are used. 5/5
5. Enriques Journey is discussed somewhere. 3/3
6. Quotes: Quote sandwiches are embedded into the paragraphs. 1/3
7. Development of Paragraphs: Paragraphs are fully developed and well
supported. Topic sentences are used at the beginning of each body
paragraph. 1/3
8. Organization/Coherence: Ideas are organized in a clear way. Transitions
are used to connect sentences and ideas to create a clear flow. 0/3
9. Spelling/Grammar/Mechanics: The paper is virtually free of spelling,
grammar, or mechanical errors. 1/2
10.
MLA format: Paper is formatted using MLA and has proper in-text
citations and a works cited page. 1/2
11.
Page Length: The paper is at least 3 complete pages long.
Yes/No
Comments: You have a clear thesis, but the supporting points in your thesis
could be more specific. The topic sentence of your first body paragraph is a
bit too broad; each one of the things you list in the paragraph could be a
separate paragraph. At the end of the first body paragraph, you mentioned
Nazario as almost an afterthought; this idea does not get enough attention.
Dont start paragraphs with quotes, as you do in the second body paragraph
(provide a topic sentence and introduce the quote. The overall organization
of your paragraphs is not clear to me; you should discuss just one idea per
paragraph. Your conclusion seems to be getting a little off topic, as you begin
focusing on other qualifying factors for each candidate.
Cut out unnecessary words or phrases (example: and I quote). Be sure to

proofread carefully; avoid comma splices. Avoid vague pronouns (example:

when individuals see Hispanics in their communities they automatically
think their presence is in vain. Your title could be revised, as it is a bit vague
still. Be sure to title the works cited page.