Ortega 1

Danira Ortega
Professor Batty
English 28
13 October 2016
In this essay, I had to revise the paragraphs because I wanted to add more details in the
story which would help the reader to have a better understanding of the room where this story
takes place and, I add more dialogue that I received from the teacher and my counseling. I
described the walls of the room and how the teacher was dressed every time I saw him in the
class. I changed the title since it didnt give an idea of what the essay was going to talk about
and although I dont think the title is as creative as it can be, but it was with the best that I could
come up with so far. Also, I explained why I was going to take again the class of Calculus. It
wasnt because I failed the class, it was because the counselor thought it would be a good idea to
take AP Classes to prepare me for the college. I wanted to clarify that I didnt hate the class or
anything like that. I liked a lot the class and the teacher. He was an awesome teacher because it
didnt matter if he liked you or not, he would give you the grade that you earned. I didnt have to
make that many changes since I had already made sure that once I had already turned in the
essays , I had at least two people revised my essay before to avoid making many mistakes which
will bring me more work to edit it.