BRAN NUE DAE EXPOSITION CHECKLIST

This week is focused on you finalising your Exposition. Once you have typed up your first draft, complete the following
activities to ensure that it is your "personal best". For each activity, use the Checklist (next page) to help you.
Activity 1: Check your structure
Annotate your work either through highlighting or making comments to check that you have each internal paragraph
aspect as required by the scaffold. E.g. Have you got strong topic sentences that include: text connective + thesis
statement + reason?
Activity 2: Check your use of text connectives
Annotate your work either through highlighting or bolding any examples of text connectives. Have you included
sophisticated text connectives at the beginning of your paragraphs? E.g. 'Firstly' vs 'To commence'.
Have you used text connectives throughout your paragraphs to add information e.g. 'for instance'? to show cause and
effect e.g. 'as a result' etc.
Activity 3: Check that you have complex nominal groups that include evaluative language
Annotate your work either by highlighting or bolding your nominal groups. Have you used describers/adjectives etc.
that influence the audience to think a certain way? E.g. 'the proposed fine increase' vs 'the despicable proposed fine
increase'
Activity 4: Check that you have nominalisations
Annotate your work either by highlighting or bolding your nominalisations. Check to see if you have any - are there
ways that you could improve your formality by including more? E.g. 'the fine increases' vs 'the increase in fines'
Activity 5: Check that you are using 3rd person/passive voice.
Check over your work to see that you are not using active voice. Are there ways to improve this? E.g. 'The State
Government is proposing to increase fines' vs 'the increase in fines proposed by the government' OR 'the proposed
increase in fines'
Activity 6: Check that you have used modality
Annotate your work either by highlighting or bolding any examples of modality. Have you tempered your arguments so
that they are more believable? E.g. 'No one supports the fine increase' vs 'Most people do not support the fine
increase'
Activity 7: Check your evidence
Annotate your work to check how you have introduced evidence/examples from sources. If you are
paraphrasing/quoting information from a source have you accurately in-text and end of text referenced it?
Activity 8: Check that you have used correct spelling, grammar and punctuation
Read your work ALOUD (this helps your ear to detect any needless repetition, clumsy sentences etc.). Make changes
where necessary.
Activity 9. Have a peer proofread your work
Ask a peer to read your work aloud, and ask them to give you any suggestions for further improvement.
Activity 10. Use the Checklist to confirm that you have met all aspects to a high standard.

AFTER ALL OF THIS - MS ZEHLE IS HAPPY TO LOOK YOUR WORK!

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BRAN NUE DAE EXPOSITION CHECKLIST

Before submitting your exposition, it is your responsibility to check it against this checklist and ensure that
you have accurately included each item. Failure to do this will result in a poor grade.
EXPOSITION STRUCTURE
INTRODUCTION OF EXPOSITION
Background of the film Bran Nue Dae is provided i.e. director, release date, a brief outline of the plot.
This evidence is supported with in-text and end-of-text references to show where this
quoted/paraphrased information is from.
Thesis statement is clearly stated i.e.
Bran Nue Dae uses characters, songs and visions/dreams to make reference to important Indigenous
Australian issues.
The three aspects and their respective issues are clearly previewed i.e.
This will be proven through showing how Uncle Tapdole references alcoholism, Nothing I Would Rather Be
touches on land rights, and Willies visions of Rosie alludes to temptation/religion.
BODY OF EXPOSITION EACH BODY PARAGRAPH
The paragraph begins with a text connective + topic sentence that expertly introduces each aspect
i.e.
To commence, Bran Nue Dae uses the loveable character Uncle Tapdole to make reference to the issue of
alcoholism.
After the topic sentence, an elaboration of the issue being focused on is provided to help the
audience to put it (and why it is important) into context. This elaboration is supported with in-text and
end-of-text references to show where this quoted/paraphrased information is from.
According to Zehle (2016), since 1963, alcoholism has been an issue that has had a strong and negative
impact on the health of Indigenous Australians. Indeed, as is explained in the Census Report (Munster
2015), over 23% of Indigenous Australians have been affected either directly or indirectly.
After the elaboration, examples/evidence from the film are provided to illustrate your opinion on the
aspect. This evidence is supported with in-text and end-of-text references to show where this
quoted/paraphrased information is from. i.e.
The problem of alcoholism is highlighted most effectively by Bran Nue Daes lovable Indigenous Australian
character Uncle Tadpole, who is the father of the protagonist Willie. For instance, in the scene where Uncle
Tadpole is sitting around the fire with his other homeless friends (Perkins 2010, 22:03), he can be seen
constantly drinking alcohol and swaying from side to side.
After the examples/evidence is provided, further explanation of how/why those examples/evidence
clearly support your (+/-) opinion on this aspect is provided i.e.
Combined, these actions link to the issue of alcoholism as they demonstrate the dependency of alcohol as
well as its effects. Further still, Uncle Tadpoles obvious lack of hygiene and place to sleep also allude to the
impacts of alcoholism that have long been experienced by Indigenous Australians.
After the further explanation is given, a concluding sentence links the evidence back to the aspect
and the thesis statement i.e.
Therefore, the character Uncle Tadpole certainly makes reference to the issue of alcoholism during the film.
CONCLUSION OF EXPOSITION
The paragraph begins with a text connective + topic sentence that signals the conclusion i.e.
In summary, it has been shown that the film Bran Nue Dae uses characters, songs and visions/dreams to
make reference to important Indigenous Australian issues.
Each of the three aspects of the exposition are briefly summarised to capture your (+/-) opinion on
how it references an issue.
A recommendation, based on your understanding of the film and its issue is made. To whom would
you recommend this film, and why them is explained.
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EXPOSITION LANGUAGE FEATURES

The film title is always italicised when mentioned i.e. Bran Nue Dae
The song title is always italicised and each word is capitalises when mentioned i.e. Nothing I Would
Rather Be
Formal language is used to suit the audience i.e.
FORMAL the characters in the film were expertly developed
INFORAL the characters in the film were totally on point
Passive voice (rather than Active voice) is used regularly to increase sophistication i.e.
PASSIVE VOICE Uncle Tadpole shows the problem of alcoholism
ACTIVE VOICE The problem of alcoholism is shown by Uncle Tadpole
Phrases for introducing sources are regularly used i.e. According to Zehle (2016) or Indeed, as is
explained in the Census Report (Munster 2015)
Text connectives to show sequence of your opinion are regularly used i.e. to begin with, to commence,
another reason etc.
Text connectives to add information/ideas of your opinion are regularly used i.e. furthermore, in
addition etc.
Text connectives to show cause/result of your opinion are regularly used i.e. therefore, as a result etc.
Text connectives to clarify information of your opinion are regularly used i.e. for example, for instance,
to be more precise etc.
Text connectives to show concession of your opinion are regularly used i.e. on the other hand, all the
same, however etc.
Modality to show degrees of certainty of your opinion are regularly used i.e. must, might, possibly,
likelihood, definitely
Modality to show frequency of your opinion are regularly used i.e. sometimes, always, rare etc.
Nominalisation to increase sophistication i.e. drinking lots of alcohol versus alcoholism
Expanded nominal groups that include evaluative language to help convey your opinion i.e.
Bran Nue Daes lovable Indigenous Australian character, Uncle Tadpole, is
Verb shades of meaning to help convey your opinion are regularly used i.e. the characters were scared
versus the characters were terrified
EXPOSITION GRAMMAR
Capitalisation of all names, places, people, animals etc.
Full stops and commas where they are expected to be.
No run-on sentences.
Spelling of words is correct.
EXPOSITION REFERENCING
EXPOSITION IN-TEXT REFERENCING
Information from sources is accurately paraphrased or quoted
All information that has been paraphrased or quotes is accurately in-text referenced. The same
source is also presented as a full reference in the Reference List
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EXPOSITION REFERENCE LIST

ONLY sources that have been quoted/paraphrased in the Exposition has been referenced in the
Reference list.
All sources are fully referenced.
All sources are arranged in alphabetical order.
Sources are not numbered or dot-pointed.
EXPOSITION BIBLIOGRAPHY
All sources that HAVE NOT been quoted/paraphrased in the Exposition has been referenced in the
Bibliography.
All sources are fully referenced.
All sources are arranged in alphabetical order.
Sources are not numbered or dot-pointed.

Created by Ms Zehle September 2016