Beruflich Dokumente
Kultur Dokumente
Rowen Lin
Paulson 8H Core B
Advocacy Essay
She was new at the school. Her head covered by a hijab, and her body covered in
complete black. She was holding the hand of her mother who was dressed almost exactly the
same. However, only their eyes were visible. My teacher quickly stepped up and introduced
herself, Hi, I am Mrs. Fullerton, welcome to Irvine Homeschool. She extended her hand and
the mother reached out and softly shook it. How can I help you? The mother quickly scanned
the playground filled with staring children. Um. . .my daughter would like to join this school,
she does not like public school and cant get along with other children. Her voice was shaky,
like english was her second language. Mrs. Fullerton smiled, Sure, why dont we have a quick
talk in my office. Your daughter can remain here and get to know the other students. The
mother turned and spoke to the girl in another language. She nodded and started towards us.
Beside me, I heard David whisper, let's hope she doesnt have a gun up her sleeve or we will all
be dead. I glanced at the girl and noticed that she had turned stiff. She then rambled off talking
gibberish. Moments later, she started to cry. She then ran to her mother and told them the
incident. My teacher then scolded David. At that time, I didnt realize what David had really
mean and why he got scolded for it. Everyone knew it was meant as a joke, but the new girl
didnt think so. But now, as an older person with more experience, I have come to a conclusion
Lin-2
that it has a deeper meaning. Although it was meant as a joke, it was a hurtful comment. She was
being discriminated for her religion. Instead of discriminating, look at their characteristics, their
terrorist activities around the globe (Bergen, Schneider). Because of the actions of these
terrorists, there are some who associate all Muslims with these extremists. Just because there are
some extremists that cause a large amount of havoc, doesnt mean that they all do. Instead of
banning them from America and judging them by their religion, we should judge them by their
personalities, their qualities, and give them a fair and equal chance they deserve. Fortunately,
82% of the American population believe that Muslims are being discriminated against (Gregg).
Additionally, it would be considered unconstitutional under the first amendment to ban Muslims
for their religion. Besides being unconstitutional, it also goes against the very belief the people
wanted when they broke free from Great Britain. They wanted equality for all, and enshrined this
There are some that assume that all Muslims support and encourage the actions of
terrorist groups, however that is not the case. In fact, most Muslims have an unfavorable view of
extremists (Lipka). Recent surveys show that most people in several countries with significant
Muslim populations have an unfavorable view of ISIS, including virtually all respondents in
Lebanon and 94% in Jordan. . . More generally, Muslims mostly say that suicide bombings and
other forms of violence against civilians in the name of Islam are rarely or never justified,
including 92% in Indonesia and 91% in Iraq. In the United States, a 2011 survey found that 86%
of Muslims say that such tactics are rarely or never justified. (Lipka) Even though President
Lin-3
Trump may want to make sure that America stays safe, banning Muslims from the countries in
his executive order does not support his strategy. On the other hand, countries that are more
supportive of terrorists were not included in the ban. According to Michael Lipka, . . .higher in
Nigeria (14%) than most other nations. Among Nigerian Muslims, 20% say they see ISIS
favorably. . . In a few countries, a quarter or more of Muslims say that these acts of violence are
at least sometimes justified, including 40% in the Palestinian territories, 39% in Afghanistan,
29% in Egypt and 26% in Bangladesh. Necessary precautions are reasonable, if justified with
data and facts and not by religion as protected by the First Amendment.
free exercise thereof. . . Based on the text of the First Amendment, religious freedom is a
fundamental right for all who live in America. Although President Trumps executive order does
not violate the First Amendment, his order lacks factual support and can be seen as unjustified.
There is currently no indication that the countries mentioned in the executive order is more of a
threat than other Muslim nations (Lipka). As such, why would they have been targeted and not
countries that have been proven to harbor and support terrorists as mentioned previously
(Lipka)? Regardless of the facts, there is equally strong support for his immigration ban. For the
supporters, this ban is a needed pause as the U.S. reconsiders its strategy against extremists.
In conclusion, judging by religion is the wrong thing to do, it is unconstitutional, and the
fact that 82% of Americans know is astonishing. The right thing to do is that we should try, at
least try to judge them by their character. One way to be able to solve this problem is to educate
particular topic was neutral, feeling that they were treated the same as everyone else, not that big
Lin-4
of a deal, but now, after much research, I have realized that Muslims are treated unfairly and
should be treated equally. From the Declaration of Independence, We hold these truths to be
self-evident, that all men are created equal, that they are endowed by their Creator with certain
unalienable rights, that among these are life, liberty and the pursuit of happiness.
Lin-5
Works Cited
Gregg, Christina. "Americans Believe Muslims Face the Most Discrimination in the US, New
Lipka, Michael. "Muslims and Islam: Key Findings in the U.S. and around the World." Pew
Schneider, Peter Bergen and Emily. "Jihadist Threat Not as Big as You Think." CNN. Cable
on, ,
capitaliza punctuati
tion, on,
grammar, capitaliza
usage, tion,
and grammar,
spelling. usage,
MLA and
formattin spelling.
g is MLA
evident formattin
througho g is
ut. somewha
Sources t evident
are but
accuratel uneven.
y cited. Sources
are
inadequat
ely cited
or
non-exist
ent
Comments:
Very effective use of a scenario to introduce the issue
Descriptions are well-written
Some of the organization within paragraphs is unclear
Are all sources cited?
Some formatting issues
Rubric rating submitted on: 3/14/2017, 11:43:12 AM by kapaulson@mytusd.org
4 3.5 3 2.5 2 1.5 1 0
using language.
precise
language.
Comments: