Beruflich Dokumente
Kultur Dokumente
Eirik Erlandsen
Assignment 1: Summary
The Harvard cheating Sentence structure Being investigated The Harvard cheating
scandal consisted of a sounds like it is part of scandal consisted of a
large number of the course title. I had a large number of
students enrolled in the lot of information that I students being
course Introduction to wanted to include and investigated, and 60
Congress being ended up with a result students being
investigated, and 60 where it was no longer suspended, for
students being clear how the different collaborating on the
suspended, for parts of the sentence take-home final exam
collaborating on the were supposed to of the course
take-home final exam. connect to each other. Introduction to
Congress.
Their solution was not Double negative I wanted to make clear Their solution was not
beneficial for learning that there were no beneficial for learning
and did not have any positive consequences, and did not have any
positive impact for but I ended up going a positive impact for
neither their current bit overboard. either their current
classmates, nor next classmates, or next
years students. years students.
The tendency of Room for simplification I was not sure if I The tendency of weaker
weaker students to rely needed the article, so I students to rely on their
on their more included it. Since we more accomplished
accomplished friends can do without it, we friends leads to further
leads to a further might as well get rid of clouding of the process.
clouding of the it. I think the sentence
process. reads better now.
Education all the way Article Missing article Education all the way
up to masters degree up to the masters
level should therefore degree level should
be available to therefore be available
everyone. to everyone.
This shows that the Hedging The sentence would be This indicates that the
responsibility for fine in a political responsibility for
increasing the number speech where the increasing the number
of female board speaker is trying to of female board
members cannot be appeal to the audience, members should not
left to the companies but the modified be left to the
alone. version is more in line companies alone.
with the tone in the
rest of my paper.
One of the main Clarity The modified version One of the main
concerns that was makes it clearer that concerns that was
raised in the debate the proponents are raised in the debate
leading up to the 2003 the proponents of the leading up to the 2003
act was that there view that was act was that there
would not be enough introduced in the would not be enough
qualified women to fill previous sentence. qualified women to fill
the necessary board the necessary board
positions. Proponents positions. Proponents
claimed that of this view claimed
recruitment had to take that recruitment had to
place further down in take place further down
the system. in the system.
There were, in other Subject-verb error I guess the strange There was, in other
words, no shortage of subject clause no words, no shortage of
competent women. shortage of competent competent women.
women confused me.
There was a shortage
of seems like an
obvious case, but no
shortage made it less
clear.
The employers Apostrophe, possession It is not the The Norwegian
associations organization of the employers
employer, but rather organizations
the specific term
employers
organization/associatio
n. Both alternatives
sound the same, but it
is obvious that we need
the plural form of
employer to get the
correct meaning.