rough draft

by Noelia RODRIGUEZ

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No Personal words- No I, you, we, us, "one", et c

No Personal words- No I, you, we, us, "one", et c

Possessive

WC

Missing ","
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GRADEMARK REPORT

FINAL GRADE GENERAL COMMENTS

/100 Instructor

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QM Cap. Error
Capitalization

Comment 1
this is an incomplete thesis....what is subject? consider combining

Comment 2
where did this inf ormation come f rom? need evidence

QM Frag.
Fragment:
A sentence f ragment is a phrase or clause that is in some way incomplete. Such f ragments
become problematic when they attempt to stand alone as a complete sentence. T he most
common version of this mistake occurs when a writer mistakes a gerund (a verb that acts like a
noun) f or a main verb, as in the f ollowing sentence: "In bed reading Shakespeare f rom dusk to
dawn."

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QM Frag.
Fragment:
A sentence f ragment is a phrase or clause that is in some way incomplete. Such f ragments
become problematic when they attempt to stand alone as a complete sentence. T he most
common version of this mistake occurs when a writer mistakes a gerund (a verb that acts like a
noun) f or a main verb, as in the f ollowing sentence: "In bed reading Shakespeare f rom dusk to
dawn."

Comment 3
need more inf ormation

QM No Personal words- No I, you, we, us, "one", etc

 QM No Personal words- No I, you, we, us, "one", etc

QM Possessive
Possessive

QM WC
Word choice error:
Sometimes choosing the correct word to express exactly what you have to say is very dif f icult
to do. Word choice errors can be the result of not paying attention to the word or trying too
hard to come up with a f ancier word when a simple one is appropriate. A thesaurus can be a
handy tool when you're trying to f ind a word that's similar to, but more accurate than, the one
you're looking up. However, it can of ten introduce more problems if you use a word thinking it
has exactly the same meaning.

Comment 4
is

QM Missing ","
Missing comma:
T hough it may not always be grammatically necessary, a comma can of ten help to prevent a
misreading. When a sentence opens with an introductory element (a phrase, clause or word that
is logically related to another phrase or clause in the same sentence), it is a great help to your
reader to place a comma af ter that introductory element. Such phrases will of ten begin with
words like "because," "while" or "although," as in the f ollowing example: "While everyone was
f ighting, the bear wandered away." As you can see, without the comma, the sentence would be
conf using.

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Comment 5
the

QM Frag.
Fragment:
A sentence f ragment is a phrase or clause that is in some way incomplete. Such f ragments
become problematic when they attempt to stand alone as a complete sentence. T he most
common version of this mistake occurs when a writer mistakes a gerund (a verb that acts like a
noun) f or a main verb, as in the f ollowing sentence: "In bed reading Shakespeare f rom dusk to
dawn."

QM Ital.
Italicize

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 Comment 6
need more

Comment 7
you are shif ting your tone to a proposal...f ocus on cause/ef f ect...f or example - another cause
of recidivism is the lack of peer support.

Comment 8
f ocus on cause/ef f ect in this essay

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Comment 9
need more

Comment 10
why is this here? do you ref er to it in your essay?

Comment 11
need to cite this

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Comment 12
need 4 sources