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The Power of the Pen A Writing Lesson for Creating Evocative Texts in Years 9/10
The following is an interactive and engaging lesson aimed at developing a students ability to maximize the
evocative nature of their fictional texts. This is an introduction into the use of advanced literary and poetic devices
and the immediate responses they conjure in the minds of readers. Students will take away from this a thorough
understanding of the relationships our minds have with texts and the knowledge to incorporate these skills into
future written tasks.
making language choices and choosing particular language devices to achieve intended effects, for example
building in a surprise or twist in the ending of a short story or final scene of a film (ACELT1638).
If you are looking for a more thorough guide, Suggestions will be in the Notes section of the power point.
Introduction/warm up:
Please find the attached PowerPoint and open it to the first slide.
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Ask students to write down the name of a text which has had a large emotional impact on them (Sadness,
anger, happiness etc.)
Read through the slides until you reach slide 19, then stop the Powerpoint and distribute the worksheets.
Body:
Allow students to complete the worksheets (they will need access to the internet or a dictionary & thesaurus).
Conclusion:
Students pass the texts they wrote three seats to the right and write feedback on the sheet they receive.
Students collect their own text and review the feedback they received.
Assessment Ideas:
Writing a short text that demonstrates the students understanding of language choices, devices and
techniques.
Resources:
Students:
Teachers:
Smartboard / projector
Impactful Texts Writers Worksheet (DOCX)
The Power of the Pen Creating Impactful Texts PowerPoint (PPTX)
Printer
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Evaluate the lesson plan according to the following Australian Professional Standards for Teachers. Only standards
directly addressed in Designing Teaching & Learning that are relevant to this assignment have been included.
However, this does not mean the other standards are irrelevant to lesson planning and evaluation more generally.
1.3 Students with diverse linguistic, cultural, religious and socioeconomic backgrounds
12345 Comments: The activity invites students to draw upon their experiences with any text they
choose, and to write any kind of text or on any subject they choose. This allows for the
representation of a diverse range of life experiences and cultures, recognising the value of
diversity and personal experience - further specific provisions, such as the teaching content
itself drawing on diverse examples, could elevate this score.
1.4 Strategies for teaching Aboriginal and Torres Strait Islander students
12345 Comments: There are no specific provisions for this point, yet there is ample opportunity to do
so by relating storytelling techniques in text to oral storytelling techniques, using indigenous
storytelling as a valuable example.
1.5 Differentiate teaching to meet the specific learning needs of students across the full range of abilities
12345 Comments: There are no specific provisions for this point, and moreover the activities are rigid
and fixed, making it difficult or impossible to adjust during the lesson for varying needs.
12345 Comments: There are no specific provisions for this point, and also no contingencies or options
for students to learn if they have reading and/or writing disabilities. There are also no
considerations for students with social/behavioural disabilities who may have difficulty with the
peer interaction/feedback aspects.
12345 Comments: Many of the literary devices, such as cacophony, are not as important in evocative
texts as others which are not mentioned, such as simile, and some of the devices, such as
litotes are explained in a clumsy manner in the slides. The description of literary devices also
does not explain what each device does, in terms of how it is evocative, nor does it provide
extensive examples.
12345 Comments: The lesson includes peer assessment, but no time allotted to informing students
how to give valuable feedback, and no specific teacher assessment provisions. There is also only
a single narrow curriculum link specified in this lesson, while writing tasks have the possibility
for covering many curriculum links at a time.
12345 Comments: The lesson is centred around PowerPoint slides, and mentions the opportunity for
students to use a computer or other method of accessing a digital dictionary/thesaurus, but
that is the full extent of ICT integration. There are plenty of missed opportunities for students
to engage with ICT, for example: the teachers slides have example text passages with sections
highlighted to draw links, yet the text could be presented and students could themselves
highlight the sections using an interactive ICT approach.
12345 Comments: There are clearly described learning goals in the lesson, however they are relatively
basic and offer no real challenge.
12345 Comments: The lesson has many flaws as identified previously, but it does have a coherent
structure that is relevant to learning. It could be improved in many ways identified above, but
most students will learn something in this lesson.
12345 Comments: The majority of the lesson is a banking approach to teaching, with the teacher
presenting their slides and filling students with information, with some questions posed to
students. However, students get the chance to demonstrate their learning by creating texts and
making choices, this is just a product of the planned worksheet.
12345 Comments: The lesson plan contains most of the resources necessary to complete the lesson.
However, while it specifies a need for a dictionary/thesaurus, it does not provision for that, so
if the school or students do not have hard copy supplies for the students, they need to access
these resources online. However, the lesson does not provide a specific web site to use, nor
provisions for electronic devices needed to access web sites.
12345 Comments: The lesson starts with student involvement in thinking of a text that has evoked
something in them, then relegates them to a largely observatory role during the slides, before
allowing them to participate again in the completion of worksheets. However, there is some
room during the slides for students to ask questions or offer ideas.
12345 Comments: The lesson plan contains a coherent structure and process, and there are a variety
of activities for students to engage in. The directions are clear as well. The only shortcoming is
that students may disengage during the teachers presentation of the slides, as they are not
particularly innovative or engaging.
12345 Comments: While there are no provisions for this in the lesson plan, the details of the plan leave
the teacher plenty of time and capacity to manage classroom behaviour during the lesson.
Additionally, even if students disengage or misbehave during the class, the final activity
worksheet is something that students can still attempt even if they missed much of the content
of the class.
12345 Comments: In this specific lesson, the feedback section creates a unique risk factor to students
social/emotional wellbeing, as students suffering bullying or social rejection could be worse off
depending on who is giving them feedback. There are also no guidelines or instructions for
feedback to prevent students writing irrelevant, harmful, or offensive comments.
12345 Comments: The teachers use of ICT is appropriate, although their example text passages do not
cite a source (even if its just the teacher themselves), so students may get the wrong idea and
forget the need to give proper credit in these cases. The lesson plan suggests students access
the internet to use dictionaries/thesauruses, yet has no mention of how they do this or
concerns of safe use of ICT.
12345 Comments: The teacher would presumably conduct informal assessment in this lesson plan by
watching students complete the worksheet and viewing their work, but it is not clear if the
teacher collects and marks these worksheets. The plan also includes informal questioning
during the lesson to assess whether students are comprehending content.
12345 Comments: Feedback is provided to students in the form of peer feedback, so there is some
feedback. However, there is no provision for teacher feedback, and the peer feedback lacks
structures and guidelines that would ensure it is actually useful.
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Evaluate the lesson plan according to the following NSW Quality Teaching model elements.
Evaluation score refer to NSW QTM Classroom Practice Guide for each element
1 Intellectual quality
12345 Comments: Literary devices are treated unequally, with some important ones covered but other
notable ones missing. There are also not clear links between the devices, or coverage of their
effects or examples.
12345 Comments: As mentioned, lack of relevant examples and insufficient explanations mean that it
cannot be certain whether all students will understand all content. The worksheet provides a
way to demonstrate understanding and integrate knowledge in the creation of a text, but the
level of it will vary.
12345 Comments: The content of the lesson is presented as facts with specific definitions. The use of
dictionary/thesaurus also implies a fixed nature of knowledge, while dictionary definitions of
words do not actually tell the full story of their socially constructed nature.
12345 Comments: Most of the lesson is about learning the definitions of literary techniques. However,
the final activity in the worksheet allows for extensive higher-order thinking, as students
combine everything they have learned to produce a new, unique text.
1.5 Metalanguage
12345 Comments: The lesson itself is essentially about metalanguage, investigating the way language
works in textual forms, so there is a high score here. However, the effects of certain literary
techniques are not extensively explored where they could be.
12345 Comments: The lesson is largely routine fact-delivery by the teacher to students, with parts of
the worksheet entailing simple definition of terms. There is brief substantive communication
between students in the form of peer feedback and with the teacher during informal
questioning.
12345 Comments: There are very general instructions, where students must complete activities and
produce a creative work that contains some specific things. The quality of the work is not a
specified factor.
2.2 Engagement
12345 Comments: The chance to reflect on texts that have been influential to oneself, and to produce
an original written work with very few restrictions, allows for students to engage with the lesson
in a variety of ways. As such, most students should be able to engage, with the highest potential
for disengagement coming during the presentation of the slides.
12345 Comments: Given the teacher does not specifically mark the worksheets, students may be lax,
and no indication is given of expectations. Additionally, the feedback aspect of the task lacks
guidelines and structure, meaning that students are extremely exposed to overt risk with very
little incentive.
12345 Comments: Again, the lack of elaboration and detail in the instructions for feedback present a
real social/emotional risk to students. There is a very high chance for negative classroom
environment in this instance.
12345 Comments: The students have opportunity to self-regulate, the teacher has enough time to
address any misbehaviours swiftly, and disruptions that arise would have minimal impact on
other students solo work. However, there are no specific provisions for this in the task, and any
positives in this field are more an inherent result of the activities.
12345 Comments: While the tasks are pre-set, students have choices in the subject matter of the
content they produce using learned knowledge, and the feedback they have to give is freeform.
The worksheet does not have sections with only one right answer, but rather students are free
to choose in their answers.
3 Significance
12345 Comments: Students own knowledge and experiences are called for at many points, and
students are free to devise their answers based on their own knowledge, such as when giving
examples of literary techniques.
12345 Comments: In students freedom to include their own experiences, there is a likelihood of
cultural knowledge being included. However, there is no real substance or purpose to this nor
is it something that is shared or talked about as a class.
12345 Comments: There are plenty of opportunities in the lesson to link literary techniques to their
uses and equivalents in other media such as cinema or daily language, yet these are entirely
neglected. The plan requires students to learn literary techniques solely in the context of the
subject of English and literary writing.
3.4 Inclusivity
12345 Comments: While the tasks allow for everyone to include themselves, the undirected feedback
portion of the lesson discourages participation and presents social risks. Students can very
easily be excluded or devalued in this process.
3.5 Connectedness
12345 Comments: There is some mention of the fact evocative language makes people feel things, and
the real-world implications of this revelation are evident, however there is a lack of specific
connection or elaboration.
3.6 Narrative
12345 Comments: The slides make use of narratives to provide examples, and the worksheet includes
small narratives which students interrogate and modify. While almost any narrative is directly
connected to the substance of the lesson, the example narratives themselves are superficial
and do not hold any weight as they are clearly designed for this lesson and no greater purpose.
Identify the two APST standards and two NSW QT model elements you are targeting for improvement.
APST
1) 1.4 Strategies for teaching Aboriginal and Torres 2) 4.4 Maintain student safety
Strait Islander students
QT model
Cross Curriculum themes & General capabilities Explicit subject specific concepts and skills
Critical & Creative Thinking (composing and evaluating This is an introduction into the use of advanced literary and
creative texts) poetic devices and the immediate responses they conjure in
the minds of readers. Students will take away from this a
Personal & Social Capability (relating or influencing thorough understanding of the relationships our minds have
others via evocative writing, peer feedback) with texts and the knowledge to incorporate these skills into
future written tasks.
Aboriginal & Torres Strait Islander Histories and
Cultures (example oral texts)
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T/S
Intro Prior Knowledge and Reflection Teacher: Opens PowerPoint and asks students to Student
write down the name of a text (specifying that a
Students consider what text can be written, visual, oral, etc) which has
experience or knowledge they can had a large emotional impact on them (Sadness,
5 mins come up with that relates to the anger, happiness etc.), and why they think it did.
topic to be covered in the lesson.
Resources:
Dreamtime Stories Video Teacher: Play the YouTube video and point out the Teacher
links to concepts covered in the PowerPoint
The video illustrates many of the
techniques covered in the lesson, Student: Watch the video
8 mins but in oral form, to varying
extents. Key examples are Resources: (Dreamtime Stories - Biladurang The
anthropomorphism and use of Platypus
diction. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lDl5QwAR8DI)
Dictionaries/Devices
What are some good points about Students collect their own text and review the
the text? feedback they received.
Resources: Worksheets
Feedback Sheets
Reflection
What have I learned about the teaching and learning process when preparing this lesson?
While I initially considered my chosen areas for modification to be easy to implement, given the original lesson
plan did not touch on them, time became a significant problem. Even now, my revisions of the lesson plan may
need to be revised after the plan is used in a practical instance, if the timings do not work out. So, while I thought
the original plan missed a lot of easy things to include, I discovered the reason they are not covered is likely due to
a lack of time. I can clearly see how teaching requires a cycle of planning, implementation, and reflection to get
things right.
I also learned how useful it is to include Aboriginal and Torres Strait Islander culture in the lesson. Not only for the
sake of students from those backgrounds who can always use more representation in education, but for all
students. There are not many examples of oral storytelling in an Australian education context if you exclude
written texts that are simply read aloud, so the deep traditions of Aboriginal oral storytelling are invaluable in
broadening students perspectives beyond written texts.
WHS
What are the key risk issues that may appear for and need to be reduced/eliminated in this lesson? Using your
syllabus and support documents as well as other WHS policy- Outline the key WHS considerations that are to be
applied in this lesson?
Bullying is a WHS issue, and the contents of this particular lesson are potential fuel or provocation for
bullying. Students will be exploring their emotional selves and receiving feedback from peers, so this
presents a risk.
The structured Feedback Form attempts to control this risk by limiting the scope of comments,
however teacher supervision will still be vital, as will the explanation of how to give appropriate
feedback.
If students write offensive or deliberately hurtful things in the feedback forms, the teacher should
intercept it before it is returned to the owner in order to be preventative rather than reactive.
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Academic Justification
While there were many elements of the lesson plan that could be improved, I chose to focus on
improvements that should also contribute to the substance of the lesson and enhance the
learning of students generally. From the Australian Professional Standards for Teachers [APST]
(Australian Institute for Teaching and School Leadership, 2011), I selected standards 1.4
(Strategies for teaching Aboriginal and Torres Strait Islander students) and 4.4 (Maintain
student safety), and from the New South Wales Quality Teaching Model [NSWQTM] (Ladwig &
Gore, 2003), standards 1.6 (Substantive communication) and 3.4 (Inclusivity). The key
modifications I made to the lesson plan were the inclusion of a student-focused class discussion
at the start of the lesson, soliciting input and ideas about other contexts during the PowerPoint
slides, the dreamtime storytelling video, and the section devoted to feedback at the end.
The student-focused class discussion at the start of the lesson, and soliciting input and ideas
about other contexts during the PowerPoint slides, are both intended to address APST standard
1.4, and NSWQTM standards 1.6 and 3.4. The questions are designed not just to make students
reproduce the facts of the lesson following an initiate-respond-evaluate pattern (Ladwig &
Gore, 2003, p. 22), but to draw on and interrogate their own experiences. In asking students to
think about how texts that affect them may affect others differently, the varying cultures and
experiences of students are also included and highlighted as valuable resources for
understanding and contextualising the lesson content. In order to ensure that all individuals,
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regardless of their social grouping, feel encouraged to participate fully in the lesson (Ladwig &
Gore, 2003, p. 46), I include an instruction to specify in the introduction preceding the
discussion that a text can be other forms of communication, such as music or visuals. This
opens the discussion to include not just different cultural backgrounds, but different socio-
economic backgrounds and those with disabilities, as everyone will have had access to at least
The dreamtime storytelling video (Red Pixels Animation, 2012) addresses APST standard 1.4,
and NSWQTM standard 3.4. In Indigenous culture, oral storytelling is a vital method of teaching
and an important starting point (Spearim, 2013). The audio-visual aspect of the video is also of
importance as it includes nature and land art, and music, both of which are other key pillars of
indigenous culture and pedagogy (Spearim, 2013; 8 Aboriginal Ways of Learning Factsheet). By
depicting this kind of traditional storytelling via the video, I am attempting to promote a
positive sense of culture for indigenous students to heighten their engagement (Mooney,
Seaton, Kaur, Marsh, & Yeung, 2016). Additionally, since the video also demonstrates many of
the literary devices that comprise the lesson content, I am attempting to link English language
and story conventions to their indigenous counterparts, in order to break down traditional-
modern dualism (Ratcliffe, 2004, p. 33-34). It also aims to highlight similarities in cultures rather
than just differences, which is best practice for cultural diversity (Ratcliffe, 2004, p. 34; Watkins
& Noble, 2016, p. 46-49). All of this addresses APST standard 1.4, but also overlaps with
The feedback section at the end is focused on APST standard 4.4. The key modifications I made
were devoting time in the feedback section to explaining to students good and bad feedback,
and including a structured feedback form rather than allowing students to write feedback
entirely freeform. From the functional behavioural approach, I identified a problem behaviour
with potentially harmful consequences as a negative target behaviour (Mitchel, 2014, p.155-
156) that is, inappropriate or harmful feedback. The positive target behaviour (Mitchel,
2014, p. 155-156) I wanted was to achieve constructive feedback. Given that approach
ordinarily would require observation of students and the problem behaviours in the classroom,
and the scope of a lesson plan does not allow me to tailor the task for every conceivable
student, I had to mix this with a cognitive behavioural theory approach. By still allowing
students to give feedback, but providing a basic structure, this support[s] students to control
their own thinking and feelings and allowing them to be guided and encouraged to learn to
manage themselves (Arthur-Kelly, Lyons, Butterfield, & Gordon, 2007, p. 26-27). Essentially,
the feedback form is a preventative step to manage this risk of inappropriate or harmful
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