Beruflich Dokumente
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William S. Fowler
UWRT 1102
EIP DRAFT
As water flows over the rocks and pools into eddies, a fly-fisherman casts his line
through the air and gently sets it down on the water, waiting for a strike. He looks at his
surroundings, noticing the lush forest, the fresh air, and trash floating down the stream. It is all
too common to see this type of habitat disruption in streams across the state causing detriment to
the fish, and an unpleasant experience for the angler. Despite Fly-Fishings laid back and
relaxing nature there are some topics and ideals that spark debate; conservation of the species
and the habitat being at the forefront of the discussion. The outdoors are a wonderful place, as
The streams and rivers that fly anglers frequent are slowly but surely becoming polluted
and unfishable. This has sparked a massive debate in the community; private versus public
water. The idea behind private water is that anglers will pay for access and treat the waters with
respect since they are paying a premium. Other anglers believe they should have access to all
waters and think that the private waters are exclusive and not conducive from a conservation
point of view. Jack Montague has been a guide in North Carolina for over 30 years and believes
firmly in the privatization of waterways. He has seen waterways shut down for fishing due to
litter and pollution, killing the fish and creating a toxic drinking source for other wildlife.
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There lies much debate in the fly-fishing community over conservation methods and
practices. There are two sides to the debate; those who are in favor of privatization of streams,
and those who are in favor of maintaining accessibility to public waters. The privatization of
streams has been proven to help with species and environmental conservation. The idea behind
private water is that since anglers are paying a premium to access the water, they will be more
inclined to take care of it and respect it. This method has been proven time and time again to
work. Privatization has achieved success in the Blue Ridge Mountains of North Carolina. The
streams as well as the surrounding area are pristine. As a result of the clean environment, there
are more fish, and they are very healthy, specifically in the French Broad River in Western North
Carolina.
Despite private waters being excellent places to fish, there are some anglers who fight
against privatization. These public waters span miles of rivers and streams, lending plenty of
opportunity for anglers to catch fish. Although the fish are abundant after stocking of the
streams, the population quickly dwindles as the fish are caught and not released. Regulation of
catch and cook is very difficult for Fish and Wildlife services to monitor due to the remote
locations of some of the streams. It is well known that people poach and mistreat the fish due to
lack of enforcement and knowledge. It is here that the debate lies, public water anglers want
access to better, cleaner streams, but do not want to pay the steep fees and premiums for access
to private water.
In order to combat the mistreatment of public water, conservation groups have banded
together to clean the streams and educate the public on proper technique and practices. One of
the most popular practices is the Pack it in, pack it out motto. The idea is that you must leave
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with everything you brought. It has been very successful in keeping trash out of the streams and
riverbanks.
political conversations. Many believe that public land and rivers should stay public, the way
Theodore Roosevelt intended. The national parks that Roosevelt set up still exist today. The
reason they exist still is because of strong legislature and the fact that they are beautiful, scenic
places where people enjoy spending time. Land ownership in the United States separates the
U.S. from other nations, we were one of the only developing countries to give away land in
order to encourage expansion westward. Those who moved out and made improvements to the
land, owned it; giving rise to some of the first privatization. Later down the road, legislature was
passed declaring the land public, protected land. Many landowners felt cheated when taxes were
raised and changes were made to the land that had been given to their families generations prior.
The people who were told they could remain on their land but the government now
owned it were some of the first citizens to spark the Public Vs. Private land debate. Despite not
owning their land anymore, they still cared deeply about the places they lived, giving rise to
Fundamental Conservationists; people who wanted to see the land preserved regardless of
ownership. Many of these people were some of the first members of the Forest and Parks
Service, dedicating their time and energy to protect and preserve the land they loved.
Jumping ahead to modern times, there has been a shift in the fundamental thinking of
governments and states. The Federal government has handed most of the land to the State
government and an interesting dynamic has occurred. Individual states now collectively own
more total land than the Federal government. In some places for example, the mountains of
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North Carolina have been preserved and massive swaths of land remain undisturbed, existing as
they did for thousands of years. In the middle of the country, specifically those states known for
en masse production of agriculture, there has been a shift, once vast spaces have been
over-farmed and wiped of trees for thousands of square miles. This happened for two reasons;
one, the demand for food outgrew the supply, and two, state governments became greedy, selling
the land to farmers who were receiving State funded subsidiaries for growing most of the nation's
food.
In order to fully understand the consequences, we need not look further than the Dust
Bowl that happened in 1930s and continued into the 40s and 50s. The state governments were
not monitoring farming practices and it led to soil toxicity and one of the worst economic times
in modern American history. This is a prime example of where privatization of land went
It is my belief, based off of research and firsthand accounts, that the privatization of land
can and does work in certain situations. When land is privatized on a smaller scale, such as in
the case of stretches of rivers and streams in Western North Carolina, the land and resources are
better managed and conservation efforts are heightened in an effort to preserve the land. Still,
some believe that public land is an inalienable right, which it is, per the Constitution of the
United States. They feel that privatization is exclusive and favors the wealthy. Which, in some
cases, it certainly does, but other times, it is simply a safeguard against human nature.
Private vs Public land is illustrated quite well in an economic and social model known as
the Tragedy of the Commons. To put it simply and in terms of fishing, imagine that an entire
river is accessible to everyone. Everyone uses it as a resource, harvesting fish to eat and as a
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recreational place. After some time, the river becomes overfished and polluted due the high
volume of anglers and recreationalists who enjoy the river. The water becomes murky, fish
become scarcer and less healthy, all because of humans who were utilizing it for activities. Now,
here arrives the integral part of the Tragedy of the Commons; since the river is overused, people
arrive to the conclusion that if they split the river up into private and public sections there will be
enough river to go around, and there is. Private waters recover because people are paying a
premium to access the stream, incentivizing conservation and thoughtfulness on the anglers part.
Since the the private waters are recovering, the public stretches quality is brought up by the good
practices of the private water users. It is important to note that people still grumble about
wanting access to the private water, but there is no need too as the river has been restored. That
is why we need private streams and land on a small scale, land and water is of higher quality
because people genuinely care about preservation and smart practices ensuring many more
Works Cited:
Nelson, Robert H. 1994. Transferring Federal Lands in the West to the States: How would it
work? Points West Chronicle, Winter 1994-95, pp 6-7. Center for the New West, Denver,
Colorado.
Bruegmann, Robert. "How the Debate over Public vs. Private Transportation Hurts
Everyone."The Cities Papers. The Cities Papers, 23 July 2014. Web. 20 Mar. 2017.
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Reviewedby:MeredithBond
Tag,Label,Highlight,Question,ExplainandComment
1)Introduction
a) Locatethefiverhetoricaltasks(seecomments)
i) Issue,topic,orproblemidentified[task1]
ii) Outlined/describedthatproblemfortheaudience[task2]
iii) Contextualizedproblembyenteringtheconversationofprominentvoices[task3]
iv) Thesis(claim+reasoning)[task4]
v) Previewthekindsofevidence/analysisthatllbeemployedinaddressing
problem[task5]
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b) Intro(Tasks#1-3above).Howwelldoesthewritercontextualizetheissueforthe
reader?Doesthewaythecontextisdevelopedraiseanyquestionsforyou,ifsolistthem
outbelow?(Toobroad?Vague?Setuplikeawar?,etc)Parts1-3oftheintroductionare
veryfocusedinonthetopicandtheydrewmein&mademewanttoreadmoreabout
thepaperduetothespecificdetailsusedtosetupthecircumstance.
c) Intro(Tasks#1-3above)Towhatextentdoestheintroductioncomeacrossasboth1)
knowledgeableofthecorepovsorpositionsattensionand2)indicatewherethispaper
positionsitselfinthatrange?Theintroductionsetsupthetensionandgivesabrief
explanationandoverviewofthetopicthatwillbediscussedthroughouttherestofthe
paper.Thethesisleadsthereadertobelieveexactlywhattherestofthepapertalks
about..Theimportanceofconservationandmethodsusedtoresultincleanerstreams
andareasforwildlife.
d) Locatethethesis,thencircleboldtheclaimandunderlinethereasoningpartsofthe
sentence.Evaluatethestrengthofthethesisparts.Istheclaimandproposedreasoning
somethingthatthescopeoneessaycouldsupportwithsufficientandappropriate
evidence?Yes.
i) Whatkindofevidencewillbenecessaryfortheessaysreasoning?Information
thatappliestohumans,specificallyflyfishers,andwhattheycandotopreserve
andprotecttheplacestheyenjoyoutdoors(i.e.streams,rivers,andthewildlife
(fishthattheycatch))
e) Basedonwhatyouseeintheintro,whatdoyouthinkistheexigencyandpurpose
(hopedforoutcome/responsefromaudience)oftheessay?Thehopedforoutcomeof
readingthisessayistoprovideinformationtofishermenaboutwhattheycandoto
preserveandprotecttheplacestheyenjoytofish.
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f) IntroCommentary.Offeroneortwosuggestionsaboutthe(strategic,conceptualor
stylistic)introductoryset-upandhowtoimproveonit.Mentionprominentfigures(like
roosevelt)intheintrotoestablishcredibility.
2)EssayDevelopment
a) Paragraphing.Locateeachbodyparagraphsmainidea,orlabel/no.theminorderof
interesttoyou.Locatedincomments.
b) Commenthereandmarkonpage:Whichparagraphidea(s)couldbeexplainedor
supportedmorefully?Whichmainorsupportingpointsdoyouhavequestionsor
concernsabout?Perhapsitisagapinthelogicoraninterestingbutnotfullyexplored
claim.Indicatewhereandwhyyouthinkasectionissucceedingorunderperforming.
N/Aeverythinglooksgood!
c) ParagraphCommentary.Bodyparagraphsshouldberelatedtothereasoningput
forwardinthethesis.Reviewtheessaysdevelopmentofsupport&reasoningatthe
paragraphlevel,theneitheraskcriticalquestionsoroffersuggestions.Overall,asreader
youarescrutinizingtherelationshipbetweenthequalityandmethodofsupportandthe
thesisclaim.Ireallylikehowyousetupthescenariointheintroparagraph,butIfeellike
itmaybemorebeneficial(andeasytocomprehendforotherreaders)ifyoustartoff
withthedustbowlandrooseveltsproposalstosetupacauseandeffectin
chronologicalorder.
d) Citingsources.Iftheresearchisincorrectlycited(In-textorWorkscited)ornotwell
set-up,highlightthemandbringtowritersattention.OwlPurdueCitationsAvailable
here.Noin-textcitations..Butthereisareferencepage.
e) Therhetoricalstance&TheySay.Whichwordsorphrasesinthedraftindicatethe
valuesthewriterholdswithregardtothistopic?Howdoesthewriteridentifyand
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distinguishhis/herpositioninrelationtootherprominentvoices?Towhatextentdoes
thewriterengagewithoutsidevoices,TheySays,opposingviewpoints,naysayers?The
writerusesawholeseparateparagraphtoexplainhisviews&usesevidencefrom
researchtodrawlogicalconclusions.
3)Explainwhatyouthoughtworkedbestinthisessay.Whatdoyouadmireandfindcompelling?
Bespecific.Ireallylikedhowthewriterincludedmanydifferentstandpointsandcausesand
effect.
5. PARAGRAPH Development.
your findings: Which aspects of the anatomy of a paragraph (above) does the
essay need to work on? Point to examples where the topic claim or analysis or insight
They Say I Say / Naysayers /Opposing Views. Anticipating objections and raising them in
paragraph analysis can strengthen ones position. What objections might be raised and
where? Write out your objections for the writer and offer any feedback on TSIS work.
See 2e.
6. RESEARCH AND CITATION. Source credibility can be established in many ways (a writers job,
institutional affiliation, funding sources, reputation) and as readers we take as a given that the writer
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Comment on the apparent quality of the source. Refer to Works Cited page as needed.
Comment on the efficient & clear set-up of source. Note any places in need of revision.
of a situation or persuasive input from prominent voices can be as or more valuable than
isolated numbers or data. What matters is whether intended audience will find it
compelling and whether that kind of support can contribute insight, add meaning,
MLA. Note whether in-text citations and Works Cited references are accurate/need work.
Owl Purdue Citations Available here. (Links to an external site.) Any other formatting
issues to note?
C) Concluding Considerations
7. CONCLUSION. Evaluate the effectiveness of the closing paragraph(s). In your own words,
describe and assess what you understand as the purpose of the essay (the hoped for outcome and
response from its intended audience). To what extent does the conclusion avoid merely repeating
the introduction claim and instead launch itself forward/outward and toward genuine engagement,
Who is the target audience and does this essay speak to their needs, interests, concerns
9. What was the best part of the essay? The best part of the essay was the amount and variety of
things addressed relating to the topic there was a historical overview along with counterarguments
10. Offer a final comment on the total effectiveness of the message and its development in the
essay. I thought the essay was very thought out but there are no citations throughout.
11. Offer a final suggestion (or two) on what you see as high order concerns / areas in need of