Mendez 1

Eduardo Mendez

Professor Batty

English 28

June 01, 2017

What I Fixed

In this essay I saw that I had many mistakes and when I actually reread my essay I saw

that I needed help. I saw that many sentences didnt make sense and that I was missing a lot

more detail to it. Know that I revised it and added more detail to it I believe it sounds way better

and I also believe that practice makes perfect. In this final essay I fixed my grammar and i also

added in stuff like transitions and more details that i thought were necessary to add in the essay.

This essay made me acknowledge all the cruel stuff that occurs in the world and that no one talks

about due to society. Society makes people stay quiet and dont talk or stand up to what they

believe. News are very bias which is why they only talk about with what they think is important

but dont talk about what really is. People should talk about things like abortion and all the

consequences that can occur if they ever practice one. People should get educated with facts and

not just believe what others say. There are so many things left to say about abortion, abortion is a

subject that can have pros and cons but it is usually due to what other people believe and their

religion. Many people believe that abortion is good or bad due to their religion but do they really

know all the facts due to the practice of it.